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Nursery Rhyme or Children's Story--Birthday Surprise

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Long and brown with moon pie eyes. Was the perfect birthday surprise. Thin and furry. He is always in a hurry. Broken tail has he. Wags it with glee if he likes thee. Fast as the wind. Licks your face if you are his friend. Chasing squirrels, his favorite thing. Up the tree, the squirrels do zing. Has a bed near the fireplace. His very own space. On the floor his toenails go clickety clack He barks at the postman! Yakety yack! He digs in mother’s garden. A bath he will need when he’s done. He’s the present I wished for. He’s all I wanted and more. He’s Fritz, my very my own puppy, I love him and now you understand why!

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Silent One

Date: 12/26/2023 6:33:00 AM

This was a lovely poem for the contest..Congratulations on your placement

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/26/2023 5:09:00 PM

thank you, Silent One, for your visit and congratulatory words. Have a fabulous new year, Sara

Valsa George

Date: 12/25/2023 4:45:00 AM

O sara, this is so very cute. He reminds me of my own dachshund that we came to possess when he was only one month old. I was never fond of dogs. But as soon as we owned this one, I began loving dogs more than I ever imagined. Your puppy looks so cute and sweet and your rhyme on him is sweeter. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/25/2023 5:18:00 PM

thank you, Valsa, for your holiday visit and for reading my poem. We share a love for Doxies! They're my favorite breed...always love and mischievous! Glad you fond a dog you could love. Doxies are loving in return. Thanks, too, for your congratulatory words. Have a great week ahead, hugs, Sara

Eve Roper

Date: 12/24/2023 10:19:00 PM

Sara, congratulations on your win. Have a Merry Christmas.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/25/2023 4:11:00 AM

thank you, Eve, and thank you for the 1st place designation! I'm thrilled. Wishing you a Merry Christmas day, Sara

Bill Baker

Date: 12/23/2023 4:03:00 PM

He was the perfect gift on your birthday, Sara, even with a broken tail. Thanks for sharing this uplifting poem with us. Love, Bill

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/23/2023 5:54:00 PM

thank you, Bill..yes Fritz was the perfect family dog...wish you'd known him...you would have gotten a kick out of his mischievous ways!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/23/2023 12:45:00 PM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your fun/cute write/story again. Have A Very Blessed Christmas..................

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/23/2023 5:53:00 PM

thank you, Paula, for your congratulatory words. Glad you enjoyed my poem. Merry Christmas, Sara

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 12/23/2023 6:42:00 AM

Congratulations, Dear Sara on the top win. What a brilliant and perfect nursery rhyme! It takes a different skill and imagination to write for children! You have got that so amazingly well! Your puppy must be a very special one!

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/23/2023 8:47:00 AM

awww, thank you, Mala, for the congratulatory words! They mean a great deal to me. I appreciate your enthusiastic comments about my children's rhyme...you're right...I had to engage a different skill set...the puppy was a special one, the one from my childhood. May you have a pleasant weekend, hugs, Sara

Terry Flood

Date: 12/18/2023 4:00:00 PM

I’m a lover of big dogs (not as any kind of substitute, you understand) but that photo sure is cute and it sounds as though Fritz is too. Enjoyable read, Sara

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/18/2023 5:30:00 PM

thanks for your visit, Terry...glad you liked the picture of the doxie puppy...yes, he was pretty much like my childhood Dachshund, Fritz von Etgen. Merry Christmas, Sara

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 12/18/2023 5:34:00 AM

I was never a fan of dogs that served no purpose. I thought dogs should be for hunting. But my wife has a Golden Doodle now and I must admit, I have grown quite fond of him. Maybe it is old age.

Terry Flood
Date: 12/18/2023 3:56:00 PM

NEVER EVER admit to not liking dogs… there’s weird people in this world… and some of them have ropes! ;-) I guess they’ll forgive you as you continue with your conversion. Just wait till you get the doe eyes… you’ll be forever lost.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/17/2023 12:42:00 PM

It's a great story-poem, Sara. Kids'll love it... even if this old curmudgeon never met a hound he didn't want to shoot if they'd just suspend the laws for a minute or too. Guess I never saw what people like about a slobbering domesticated wolf. Oh, well. It's a dog's life. ~ Gershon

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/17/2023 3:47:00 PM

this was a hard write, for I don't like 'indoor' dogs, but kids love them. I'm not a fan of dog or cat hair in the house. EEGADS. I saw our neighbor's children playing with their dog, hence the inspiration. have a great evening & I appreciate your visit, Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/17/2023 10:30:00 AM

This is adorable. What a great idea. It flows beautifully, and young children would enjoy it. Best of luck in the contest, Sara.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/17/2023 3:50:00 PM

thanks, kind Sotto, for your kind words about the flow of my children's poem--one I wrote in my head while out walking this morning...inspired by watching our neighbor's children play with their dog. I know this sounds strange, but I don't easily relate to small children...so I'm not good at nursery rhymes. I can't get into their heads which is why I taught high school and college and not elementary school. Thanks for your well wishes for the contest. Have a splendid evening,

Silent One

Date: 12/17/2023 7:55:00 AM

aww this is lovely.. nice idea for this. It flows so well and a child would love it.. I did write one, but I think I have done too many lines... so need to see if its ok.. best of luck in the contest dear Sara..

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/17/2023 3:51:00 PM

thanks for the visit, Silent One, and for your gracious comments. Best of luck to you in the contest as well...have a great week ahead, Sara

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/17/2023 6:47:00 AM

A cute write/picture. Good Luck... Have a great day...........

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/17/2023 3:51:00 PM

awww, thank you Paula. Have a splendid evening, Sara

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/17/2023 5:26:00 AM

A lovely story for children Sara, I do miss the clickety clack our 'Ozzie' used to make on the hard floor. Best of luck in the contest. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 12/17/2023 3:52:00 PM

I agree that clickety clack on a hard wood floor is memorable...always made me smile. Have a great week ahead, Sara