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This one came out of the blue, practically wrote itself, who knows what it means.

Now that you have gone I meander through lush memories, of when we were young, and, your heart was given so tenderly, and my soul, rejoiced in receiving it The years passed and I saw the snow fall, and I discerned, that you received it's chill, with open arms... my zeal and affection was not enough to warm you and the last of our embers died. Why did you not have the courage or the will to resist the cold? The stars I fought so hard to attain, you returned them, without so much as a thought, or a thank you. I watched, helplessly as our life unraveled , as time and unexpected events pulled our heartstrings in different directions My cello and I have become solitary companions, and I stroke her strings now and she resonates with me but only in a soulful dirge I used to bathe in our memories, until you dirtied the waters, and now I'm stuck in the mud that you left behind The stars have departed now, I gave them their wings and released them with a soulful sigh I look back for one last time at what was, but now is not and will never be again, I trudge onward, the path to the future growing ever dimmer now that you ... have gone. John Derek Hamilton November 24, 2020

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Date: 12/11/2020 9:02:00 PM
"The stars have departed now, I gave them their wings" That is beautiful and sad, all at the same time. Sometimes, it's just not meant to be. Doesn't make it any easier on the heart. This is emotional and tender. Your thoughts caress gently around me. ~ Brandy
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Date: 12/12/2020 2:52:00 PM
Thanks Brandy for your always positive thoughts and visits, nice to "see" you today!
Date: 12/4/2020 9:35:00 AM
The good Lord knows how much I can relate to this. My dead wife will always be with me. ~~
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Date: 12/4/2020 3:13:00 PM
Thanks for your kind visit Victor, sorry if it brought any bad feelings back, have a great evening!
Date: 11/28/2020 11:36:00 PM
Nicely done, John ... keep up the good work.
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Date: 11/29/2020 8:13:00 AM
Thanks G nice to see you active on the soup, and passing by my page, thanks for the comment!
Date: 11/27/2020 9:49:00 AM
A beautiful write John. Sadness so often needs to express itself whether we wish for it to or not.
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Date: 11/27/2020 10:21:00 AM
Thanks James, yeah I guess so, seemed to be out of place from my life now, but anyway glad you liked it.
Date: 11/26/2020 1:22:00 PM
Hi John, I have trodden that very same path, some years ago, with a similar outcome - as doubtlessly have many others. You narrate the journey and it's ultimate conclusion with skill and great use of metaphor. Regards - Bill
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Date: 12/4/2020 9:29:00 AM
Thanks for your kind visits sorry I missed your previous comments. Nice to get to know you Bill. Yes Covid is a challenge for us all. Haven't been able to visit my folks in a while they (and I) are high risk so we have to be cautious, but I agree socializing on this poetry site does fill to some degree our need for the human touch, even if it is virtually!
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Date: 11/26/2020 3:34:00 PM
Oh! And yes, there are times when writing poetry that it does almost write itself - that's on good days, and oddly enough I struggle far more with free verse than rhyme - which always strikes me as peculiar. Hope you've had a happy Thanksgiving Day.
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Date: 11/26/2020 3:28:00 PM
Funny thing John, the one time I choose my words carefully is when writing poetry or letters. I am a little OCD when looking for the exact word to complete a rhyme etc. I live alone in a rural area, and have friends in the USA - mainly Ohio, also in Florida and Oregon, and I'm finding it difficult not being able to visit the USA, and they can't visit me - but for an old guy I am in pretty good shape apart from the odd stiff joint, and have so much to be grateful for, normally - and in social situations I always get along fine with everybody and don't worry too much about choosing words especially carefully. I do find PS a particular positive outlet for me during this covid and I enjoy interacting with those who are happy to do so - hence this is a very brief bio of the real Bill Brook. Cheers.
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Date: 11/26/2020 2:15:00 PM
Thanks Bill I appreciate your kind visit, and your truly generous remarks! This free verse write felt like it wrote itself, that ever happen to you? Or do you methodically with intent choose every word carefully every time?
Date: 11/25/2020 4:22:00 PM
Hi John, You have penned some sad lyrics that we all can relate to. Who hasn't experienced heartbreak? You are a gifted songwriter and the lyrics are just in you ( if that makes sense ). Another song that I would love to hear set to music. Have a great day:-)Alexis
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Date: 11/25/2020 4:27:00 PM
Thanks Lexi glad you like it, I'm a little surprised I'm getting good feedback on this, it's not a lyric it's free verse and it was a strange way of writing for me, I felt like it was being dictated to me, it's only happened a few times but it's nice to see it get some acceptance. Maybe I'm too critical with my own stuff, but glad you liked it!
Date: 11/25/2020 10:47:00 AM
I really liked the flow of your sad thoughts and words in this poem, John. It conveys the heartbreak of a love grown cold over time, and I can feel the angst. Thanks for sharing. :)
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Date: 11/25/2020 4:11:00 PM
Thanks Laura, like I mentioned in other comments this is not really relevant to my life so I was surprised when it popped out onto the page, but, glad it did as it appears some like it.
Date: 11/25/2020 5:27:00 AM
I cna feel the sadness in your words and i can tell it is straight from the deep parts of your heart... I get like this sometimes also and i find the best poetry is formed as a result.
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Date: 11/25/2020 7:37:00 AM
Thanks SO it's the first time in a long time that I write something that feels dictated, I guess that's what they call stream of consciousness writing, kinda cool except looking at it critically it doesn't seem to have harmonious thoughts!
Date: 11/24/2020 4:25:00 PM
Emotions resurface to be released just like the departing stars you gave wings to and released with a soulful sigh... Every moment is poetic in this sad wistful beauty. Nobody does lost love with as much heartfelt loss as you, my dear friend. Tender, emotional, and deep is its poignant reach into the heart. Warmest wishes, dear poet.. ~Susan
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Date: 11/25/2020 7:34:00 AM
Thanks Susan for your positive comments, I'm glad you see the value, I normally don't write like this but like I said it felt like is was dictated to me, I guess that's what they call stream of consciousness writing, kinda cool I guess!
Date: 11/24/2020 1:31:00 PM
sometimes the best poems come from out of the blue... maybe a past poet whispered words to your muse while you were sleeping... one never knows, but regardless of where it came from it's an excellent write... poignant like i like them... hugs
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Date: 11/24/2020 2:46:00 PM
Thanks Sandy, I don't think there's much harmony in the write, feels like incompatible thoughts put together, but I wrote what feels like was dictated to me, make sense or not, glad you liked it!
Date: 11/24/2020 1:03:00 PM
Quite emotive poem, John. Past sometimes bleeds into present..--perhaps with a new meaning.
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Date: 11/24/2020 2:42:00 PM
Thanks Vijay, who knows maybe I will recognize it's value later, I appreciate your comments always.
Date: 11/24/2020 11:24:00 AM
Nicely penned, John, I can feel the deep emotion in this piece. It reminds me of my life some 40 years ago. All the best, John
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Date: 11/24/2020 11:42:00 AM
Thanks John, yeah, I realize now the meaning, mine is from 30 years ago, strange how these feelings resurface from time to time!