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Not Just Another Haiku

She had come to know him as her hero. They met on a cloudy day as sunlight tried filtering softly through the pine trees that surrounded her mountain home, casting charcoal shadows on her swimming pool. She rented her home to him with joy as she moved her last boxes into her compact car. She was happy to be moving in with her beloved boyfriend thirty miles across town. it rained hard that May presage of future events... black clouds lingered low The first few days were blissful as his young sons adored her and even began calling her Mama. Two and four, precious little red heads. But to her heartbreaking dismay he was not ready to move on with anyone, and had issues she could not help heal. He demanded she leave with no where to go. a cloud burst poured down in torrential tears and storm... divine light appeared She returned to her home and prayed her tenant would understand. He was upset at first fearing he would be given notice to move. She only asked to move into the one room pool house to keep from being homeless. With tears streaming down her cheeks and a broken heart she related her story as he listened with empathetic ears. roses bloomed in the fresh fragrant flower garden... hope bloomed too that day July 13, 2017

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Date: 1/4/2019 9:33:00 AM
Hi Connie, a wonderful Haibun flows from your golden pen. I am getting to be a sap, really, I find myself reading through tear-filled eyes. You truly know how to mount up the emotions as your piece goes along. The emotions sing so strong, painting such vibrant pictures in the mind. I am so glad I did read this emotional gem today. Have a wonderful Friday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 1/4/2019 10:40:00 AM
This haibun was about my oldest daughter. She and her hero are still happy together! Thank you Mike. I hope you are having a good year. So far mine is wonderful. xxoo
Date: 7/30/2017 5:14:00 PM
Nicely done, Connie. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 7/30/2017 10:11:00 AM
Hope blooms in our mind too ... Beautiful flow in a haibun ... Great job ...
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Date: 7/28/2017 8:16:00 PM
Connie, how did things go this week for your eye? I have to leave Soup very soon and was wanting to see if you are doing ok. Have a restful wonderful weekend!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/29/2017 3:11:00 AM
Okay Andrea. I will have laser surgery on it Aug. 17....thanks, Connie : )
Date: 7/28/2017 8:56:00 AM
Nice haibun. I really like this form, and you have written a beauty.
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Date: 7/28/2017 3:11:00 PM
Thank you very much Scott. I appreciate your kind comment! : )
Date: 7/24/2017 3:12:00 PM
heartbreaking sliver of life made beautiful with your poetic mood and intensity, connie... love how it ended on a positive note... a splendid pen!.. huggs
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/25/2017 3:34:00 AM
Thank you very much Nette. I value your input. : )
Date: 7/24/2017 5:32:00 AM
Wonderful haibun Connie. I only wrote one in my Soup life and I can tell you, that's not easy at all :)
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Date: 7/25/2017 3:35:00 AM
They are a challenge, I agree. This is only my third. Thank you much Darren. : )
Date: 7/24/2017 1:24:00 AM
Wonderful poem my dear. Flows beautifully, with all those Haiku making it an excellent poem, Great content too. A joy to read you today.
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Date: 7/23/2017 9:03:00 AM
Right from the start I felt the looming heavy atmosphere building up, Connie, and I felt better when that 'divine light appeared'! Sometimes love is standing right next to us and little do we realize! Regards // paul
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/23/2017 8:52:00 PM
It is all there in that first line Paul. I agree with you. Everything happens for a reason I feel. : )
Date: 7/21/2017 3:21:00 PM
A sad beautiful hopeful piece!
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Date: 7/20/2017 11:07:00 PM
Profound writing that showcases an array of emotions. Very real!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/23/2017 8:54:00 PM
Thank you Afzal. That is life, isn't it? : )
Date: 7/18/2017 9:08:00 AM
A superb write my friend...best of luck...but I think I smell a winner lol...^WW^
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/19/2017 3:47:00 PM
Thank you very much WW. I sure loved your latest post! : )
Date: 7/17/2017 4:57:00 AM
Lovely haibun. I've only ever written one before. It is a challenge, but you've done it so well, dear. :) I really enjoyed this piece. Sending hugs
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Date: 7/17/2017 1:37:00 AM
Excellent and beautifully written. love it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 7/25/2017 12:06:00 AM
Thank you very much Ravi. I appreciate your nice comment. : )
Date: 7/16/2017 3:34:00 PM
Wow!!! awesome write, Connie.you always move me with your creative work.... Peter posted your ; Constanza created by Connie Marcum Wong... your poetry is just created by the nature you live ... I love it...
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Date: 7/19/2017 3:51:00 PM
Thank you very much Eve. I hope to be around more now after my surgery yesterday. I am much better. Things get in the way of my favorite pass time...poetry. So kind of Peter to acknowledge my poetry form. Blessings, Connie : )
Date: 7/16/2017 11:16:00 AM
A tragic story but many times experienced all over the world. This is not just "another Haiku", but one of life's mysterious ones that happen. Nicely written Connie, with a style and personality of only a true writer's hand.
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Date: 7/16/2017 8:52:00 AM
love this beautifully-written & touching haibun, Connie
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Date: 7/16/2017 6:19:00 AM
I like how the rainy theme in the haiku ended with rose blooms...and hope...Very nicely penned Connie
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Date: 7/15/2017 6:46:00 PM
OH, connie, this is a fresh take on Haibun. That last haiku is my favorite. So cool that things were ending on a good note for her! Very nicely done!
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Date: 7/15/2017 4:38:00 PM
HAibun is not my favourite form, but you have written this very well, I like the story telling and the descriptive writing. Well written Connie.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/15/2017 4:57:00 PM
It is not my cup of tea either Silent...this is only the second one I have ever written, but it is for the contest. Thank you. ; )
Date: 7/15/2017 3:12:00 PM
- A wonderful "mix" poem, Connie - Enjoy it very much - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/15/2017 12:52:00 PM
A beautiful story, beautifully penned. I haven't had the courage to try one of those, yet.
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Date: 7/15/2017 8:09:00 AM
Such a beautiful story, and I love the haiku ending. So different Connie you've brought in so many emotions here , very cleverly crafted...Maria
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Date: 7/15/2017 6:32:00 AM
Fabulous not just another haiku story. I enjoyed it very much this early morn' :)
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Date: 7/14/2017 5:58:00 PM
A sad and happy poem co-joined together, Connie. A rare poetess' feat. Well woven story that brought smiles, tears, more tears, then smiles and smiles. A very poignant poem of human roller coaster emotions. Love always.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/14/2017 6:07:00 PM
Isn't that the way life is Freddie? Love makes the world go round and there are so many different kinds of love. Thank you for your generous comment Freddie. It is much appreciated! : )
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