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Not At All What a Haiku Ought To Be

Passing up stinging sun and flies. The trouble is, nature’s outside. Flowers I find in frames. I recline in conditioned air. Not at all what haiku ought to be, where the outdoors is dreamy; buzzing with hummingbirds, flies and sun burning. Not in trouble with nature, outside of it all. Air conditioning, ice cubes, tall glass and coca-cola. It’s all part of the plan, and a newspaper - just in case a flotsam fly needs a swatting because the sun threw up its hands and the bug declared squatter’s rights. I have a problem - the newspaper’s online. Air conditioning is breezy, but I’m not fine.

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Sally Eslinger

Date: 7/9/2024 9:24:00 AM

Kim, so wow i really agree. Maybe you’ve touched on why my budget allowance for houseplants has been increasing 8-) thanks for this one. Well done. Like your wit. xox sally

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 10:53:00 AM

LOL! Yes, bring the outdoors inside (without any pests..wink…wink) Thank you, Sally! I appreciate you!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 7/9/2024 7:22:00 AM

Dear Kim, How cleaver was your poem. It really does express how technology is taking away the perceived joy of God's creation. I really loved reading this soulful poem. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 10:52:00 AM

Thank you, Daniel! It certainly is a different world. May God bless you, my wonderful friend!

Yann Rolland

Date: 7/9/2024 12:52:00 AM

you made me smile, it seems really hot there, and writing an haiku is not so easy then, really enjoyed your spiritful poem

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 5:15:00 AM

Thanks so much, Yann! You’ve made me smile, as well! It is hot and humid here so not outside enjoying the flowers thus the title…lol. Hugs ~ Kim

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 7/8/2024 9:37:00 PM

Outdoors is a wonderful place to be, unless it's too hot and those bugs start biting! I enjoyed this poem, and it's humorous elements. Hope the bugs don't follow you inside next time. ;)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 5:14:00 AM

Thank you so much for seeing the humor! No “real” bugs inside right now, thankfully! One year we had an infestation of horseflies because onemof my kids left a pile of their things in my garage!! I promptly called them to remove them…now we can laugh. Hugs, my friend ~ Kim

Paige Hind

Date: 7/8/2024 8:23:00 PM

Like Karen said, I hope you are fine too. Big Hugs :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 5:12:00 AM

I am fine! Just the speaker, not the poet along with a few messages ;) Thanks for your concern though.

Paige Hind
Date: 7/8/2024 8:24:00 PM

Or that you feel better soon-

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/8/2024 7:55:00 PM

I think you've got the 'inside track' on non-haikus now, Kim... The disappointment is so convincingly conveyed. Here's to better, non-air-conditioned days! :) Gershon

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 5:11:00 AM

I loved those mornings in the 60’s where I could use the screen door! I’m not often outside so I thought I’d write about being inside. :)

Karen Jones

Date: 7/8/2024 7:41:00 PM

This is intriguing. I enjoyed it and it left me wondering WHY you are not fine???

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 5:09:00 AM

The “speaker” is not fine but I am. ;) A bit tongue-in-cheek with an online newspaper. Glad you found the poem intriguing. Hugs ~ Kim

Paige Hind

Date: 7/8/2024 5:22:00 PM

Glad you posted something today- and this is so intelligent, a different perspective for me <3 :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2024 5:05:00 AM

Thank you, Paige :)