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Balloon tears raining havoc While doubts cascade freely Paddling through droplets of glass Her life force drifts through endless passages White lights reach out to embrace the waves Shield her from perpetual anguish Worry only dims the path bestowed Faith exhibits a lantern lit

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Ronald A. Williams

Date: 2/18/2018 7:20:00 AM

Hi Carol. I have to admit. The poem is a little too abstract for me. I could only understand parts of it. The parts that I could understand were very good. The first Stanza, I could not connect the Balloon, white doubts, padding through the droplets and Her life force. Please advise me. Thanks, Ronald.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/4/2018 8:28:00 AM

Way to go, this was an excellent choice for POTD.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/10/2017 1:52:00 AM

That last line is pure gold, Carol. What can one do in these circumstances except keep eyes focused on that light of faith.

Carol B.
Date: 11/7/2017 1:19:00 PM

Thanks! :)

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 9/7/2017 10:12:00 PM

"Her life force drifts through endless passages" What an intriguing line! I am in awe. The last line also is brilliant. Beautifully written, Carol. I will keep close watch on your work! Always, Laura

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:13:00 PM

Laura, Thank you so much for your lovely comment. It sure made me smile. :)

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/2/2017 11:41:00 AM

Hi Carol, nice to know you. Your poem flows as heavy rain and the last stanza is very optimistic. Great write, my deepest compliments!

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:14:00 PM

Thank you kindly!

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/23/2017 8:35:00 AM

A beautiful written poem Carol. Have a nice day my friend.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:14:00 PM

Thanks! :)

John Fleming

Date: 8/21/2017 3:34:00 AM

Fantastic piece of prose, Carol--every line simply superb! My best regards. :) john

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:16:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/19/2017 10:55:00 PM

I really liked this, and the imagery! Hugs!

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:16:00 PM

Thanks so much :)

Ronald A. Williams

Date: 8/16/2017 8:57:00 PM

Nice ending and form.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:15:00 PM

Thank you! :)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/9/2017 8:59:00 PM

Well done i enjoyed this poem. it is late so i will say good night my friend.

Carol B.
Date: 9/9/2017 2:15:00 PM

Thanks! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/5/2017 8:00:00 PM

I just noticed I spelled balloon wrong in my comment. Good grief. Let me see if I can find another poem of yours I have not seen before.

Carol B.
Date: 8/5/2017 8:20:00 PM

Andrea, You're such a nice person. I am so grateful for the support and kindness you have shown me. :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/5/2017 6:38:00 AM

Congrats!

Carol B.
Date: 8/5/2017 8:20:00 PM

Thanks :)

Gary Bateman

Date: 8/4/2017 6:23:00 AM

Hello Carol, Congratulations on POTD!! A marvelous write. (I really like the lead off with "Balloon tears.") Best Always, Gary

Carol B.
Date: 8/4/2017 5:02:00 PM

Thanks Gary :)

Charlie Smith

Date: 8/3/2017 10:07:00 PM

Brilliant Carol, congratulations...

Carol B.
Date: 8/4/2017 5:03:00 PM

Charlie thanks for the comment. :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/3/2017 5:51:00 PM

Stupendous poem! Congratulations.

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 5:53:00 PM

Thank you!

Eve Roper

Date: 8/3/2017 4:26:00 PM

Congratulations on POTD, Carol.. ~*

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 5:34:00 PM

Thank you!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/3/2017 2:21:00 PM

This poem is so lovely Carol! Congratulations on having it honored as POTD!

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 5:35:00 PM

Thanks Connie :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/3/2017 1:25:00 PM

- CONGRATULATIONS, CAROL ! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 5:54:00 PM

Thank you!

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 8/3/2017 12:38:00 PM

Nice poem! Congratulations on getting poem of the day

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 5:56:00 PM

Thank you!

Darren White

Date: 8/3/2017 10:44:00 AM

Coming back with congratulations Carol :)

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 5:56:00 PM

Thank you!

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 8/3/2017 9:33:00 AM

Consistent themes of rain falling and lights returning make this a very effective hopeful write. Congratulations!

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 6:00:00 PM

Thank you for the wonderful comment!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 8/3/2017 9:05:00 AM

Congrats on POTD, Carol.

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 6:01:00 PM

Thank you!

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 8/3/2017 8:38:00 AM

Congrats! Marvelously composed and a different take. GL :) Sunita

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 6:08:00 PM

Thanks much appreciated.

Joseph May

Date: 8/3/2017 8:21:00 AM

Congrats on POTD Carol

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 6:09:00 PM

Thank you!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/3/2017 8:06:00 AM

Many congrats on POTD Carol so lovely to see you honoured for your poem:-) hugs jan xx

Carol B.
Date: 8/3/2017 6:20:00 PM

Thanks Jan!