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Naked Outside of Dreams

she retires for the evening stripping clothes like emotions just to match the emptiness she hides inside she wraps herself in a blanket of thoughts as she dreams on the edge of her soul he shines flickering like a lost star in and out of night's shadows she feels the heat of his touch as she yearns in a climax of winded breaths beneath the sighs of a lonely moon in the brilliance of darkness she walks descending the stairs that connect life and dreams naked, and alone she wakes in the pools of her tears as night fades with dreams October 13, 2019 NUDE - descending a staircase Poetry Contest Contest Judged 11/10/2019 Writing Challenge - December - Any poem NA'd in November 2019 Sponsor, Dear Heart- Wiishkobi Ode

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Date: 12/10/2019 7:14:00 PM
Sandra, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this excellent poem, well done!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 12/10/2019 8:02:00 PM
Thank you so much Constance...i love your contests, thank you for always hosting them :) hugs
Date: 12/9/2019 8:38:00 AM
Congratulations my friend on your placement in this contest. I would have put yours as a 1 but I wasn't the judge. : )
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Sandra Adams
Date: 12/9/2019 12:24:00 PM
you my friend are too kind... thank you Chris..it had an n/a in the original contest so i was thrilled with its placement :) hugs
Date: 10/15/2019 9:53:00 PM
Lovely, Sandra.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 12/9/2019 12:24:00 PM
Thank you so much Line :) hugs
Date: 10/15/2019 10:37:00 AM
Refined and fine, I'm grateful because its beautiful, great lines with fire, connecting me like a wire, shows the glory of your hand and the power of your mind. An excellent piece my friend.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/15/2019 11:25:00 AM
Thank you, what a wonderful comment my friend :) hugs
Date: 10/15/2019 6:13:00 AM
A wonderful write for this contest, Sandy, so full of deep emotion and loneliness. Best of luck. Hugs, John
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Date: 10/15/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thank you so much John... my muse took me on a metaphoric path for the contest... hugs :)
Date: 10/14/2019 7:36:00 AM
- Beautifully written ... love this ending :) - Best wishes in the contest, Sandra :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/14/2019 9:37:00 AM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise....:) hugs
Date: 10/14/2019 7:26:00 AM
I saw this contest and made several attempts to write something for it, all ended up being deleted which now I see is a good thing because this is amazing. You have painted a picture that is not only alluring but leans towards a loneliness that is the perfect metaphor for this theme. Beautifully done.
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Date: 10/14/2019 9:36:00 AM
I saw a few writes for it, kind of funny in nature so i decided to attempt it, not sure this is what John was looking for or how it will do in the contest but it was a fun write, and i liked the outcome :) hugs
Date: 10/13/2019 8:27:00 PM
Amazing depths shown in this new poem my friend. Perfect ending verses that bring in the cold hard and naked truth that life too oft leads one from joy and bliss into darken realms of sadness and heartaches. A fav- and a true jewel....
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Date: 10/13/2019 8:42:00 PM
Thank you so much my friend....it was a fun write, i always like to scatter emotion through my poems :) hugs
Date: 10/13/2019 4:25:00 PM
Nice penning Sandy,great imagery and insightful wording. Poetry hugs, Gordon
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Date: 10/13/2019 5:17:00 PM
Thank you so much Gordon :) hugs
Date: 10/13/2019 3:40:00 PM
a poetic expression of loneliness and pain...good luck in the contest
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/13/2019 3:51:00 PM
Thank you so much Frederic :)
Date: 10/13/2019 3:27:00 PM
The image of vulnerability is clear here... Your words create despair, perfect for the contest... You are a master in showing rather than telling.
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Date: 10/13/2019 3:51:00 PM
Thank you my friend...i think you were one of the few who saw this before i reworked the ending...i think i like it better now... i love my use of metaphors.... hugs :)
Date: 10/13/2019 3:05:00 PM
Very apt for the contest theme, Sandy..full of emotions..I see her frame on the edge of her soul..descending the stairs that connect life and dreams..the last stanza so sad and tearful..excellent write..worthy of a TOP win.
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Date: 10/13/2019 3:15:00 PM
Thank you my friend, all the ones i had read were humorous so i wanted to take a different approach...not sure how it will do in the contest but it was a fun write... hugs :)

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