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My Love Is Dying

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On the day we got wed you were so thirsty for life sadly we knew your cancer had spread deep inside I cherished the moment we became man and wife although my heartbreak I just could not hide You’ve asked to be buried in your dress of white lace which you wore yesterday when we hurriedly got wed Your raven hair now frames your pale beautiful face I caress your cheek as you rest in your hospice bed You’ve chosen the music to be played on the day when your rainbow coffin is interred into the ground True love does not die; my grief I must not display ... you said don’t be melancholy when I’m not around required words melancholy, thirsty, music, beautiful Chosen line to use - Line 4. love does not die A poem about death Contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 5/15/18

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Line Gauthier

Date: 6/2/2018 8:45:00 PM

Wow, a most deserving top win. Congrats, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/3/2018 10:23:00 AM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 5/20/2018 4:42:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan on your win. What a sad poem.."True love does not die" ..great line.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2018 5:26:00 AM

Thanks Subimal - i just added 'true' to the line Constance had given us to put in the poem, I think it works well:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 5/19/2018 10:35:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this excellent write, well done and I like the image too ~

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2018 3:34:00 AM

Thanks Constance:-) Your contests take me over to the dark side, I much prefer humour but I do try to write sad for you:-) hugs jan xx

Warren Doll

Date: 5/19/2018 6:59:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 7:07:00 PM

Thanks Warren:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/19/2018 3:36:00 PM

Well deserved Jan, congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 5:35:00 PM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/19/2018 12:41:00 PM

Congratulations for your win Jan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 1:14:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

Dm Babbit

Date: 5/19/2018 9:57:00 AM

Congrats Jan, you paint a picture well.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 1:14:00 PM

Thanks so much DM:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/19/2018 9:49:00 AM

Congratulations on your #1 win. This wou lo d be a hard thing to do... Well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 1:13:00 PM

Thanks Susan, I read so many sad tales in women's magazines and they are often about getting wed before one partner dies of cancer:-( hugs jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/18/2018 3:44:00 PM

I'm back to say CONGRATS, Jan! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 3:45:00 PM

Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/18/2018 2:26:00 PM

Beautiful! Congrats, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:30:00 PM

Many thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/18/2018 12:24:00 PM

- A poem about death represent the emotional ... we have all death in wait - That's how it's always been, but still difficult - Congratulations on your 1st place in the contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:30:00 PM

Many thanks Anne lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/18/2018 11:58:00 AM

Hi Jan, It's no surprise that you're in the winner's circle. Congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest. PS, I didn't get a chance to enter my write. The contest filled up fast- Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:29:00 PM

Many thanks Alexis, I too don't always have time to get the poem posted but I still will post even if I miss the contest deadline:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 5/18/2018 11:56:00 AM

Jan, back to say congrats on your wonderfully written sonnet. John

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:28:00 PM

Many thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 5/18/2018 11:32:00 AM

Your sad, poetic story draws one in so well, Jan. Well penned poetry. Congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:28:00 PM

Many thanks Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/17/2018 7:18:00 PM

Good luck, Jan. This turned so sad so fast; an unexpected twist to my heart. Well done my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:41:00 AM

Thanks Caren, I much prefer writing humour but the sponsor likes sad themes:-) hugs jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/17/2018 5:59:00 PM

So lovely and moving, Jan! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 5/17/2018 6:11:00 PM

Thanks Janice I much prefer humour but know Constance likes melancholy poetry so i write and hope that she likes it:-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 5/17/2018 1:34:00 PM

A well written sad poem with much emotion. It is obvious from the comments that all the readers could feel the emotion in it. Nicely done, Jan, best of luck. John

Jan Allison
Date: 5/17/2018 3:12:00 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Warren Doll

Date: 5/17/2018 11:52:00 AM

Jan, you usually make me laugh , but today you made me cry. :( This is a difficult contest and with this poem you should win. Best of luck! Warren:)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/17/2018 12:00:00 PM

Thanks for the comment Warren, I much prefer humour and amaze myself when I come up with a sad poem . :-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/16/2018 7:50:00 PM

Jan, This poignant and touching write brought tears to my eyes. I continued to cry even after I was done reading this piece. It really got to me. Anything about true "love" touches me deeply. I am finding it really hard to come up with something for this contest. You did a good job my friend. It looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest - Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 5/17/2018 4:46:00 AM

Thanks Alexis - I find writing sad poems very difficult especially about death. I hope you manage to come up with a poem for the contest. hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/16/2018 5:36:00 AM

- A deep touching poem, Jan - (I remember the rainbow coffin) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/16/2018 5:37:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise, yes the rainbow coffin is what I wish for myself and hope hubby will grant that wish for me - not that i will know anything different lol:-) hugs jan xx

Hija De La Luna

Date: 5/16/2018 4:13:00 AM

tears my heart, Jan. your words run smooth..am glad i visited your page

Jan Allison
Date: 5/16/2018 5:35:00 PM

Thanks Hija:-) hugs jan xx

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/16/2018 3:16:00 AM

Good Morning Miss Jan. You have outdone yourself. What a meaningful and emotional entry. The reader is drawn with each line. Have a wonderful morning. Best of luck with the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/16/2018 3:44:00 AM

Thanks so much your lovely comment you do encourage me so much with my poetry:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/15/2018 4:56:00 PM

very touching, jan! i hope it does well in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 4:57:00 PM

Thanks Ilene, as you know I prefer humour and just go with the flow of my muse and see if she is willing to write sad for some of the contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/15/2018 4:39:00 PM

a moving poem which touches my heart...quilled beautifully, jan.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 4:48:00 PM

Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/15/2018 1:08:00 PM

Such a sad story Jan, told brilliantly in poetic form. Good luck in the contest. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 1:10:00 PM

Thanks Tom, I much prefer humourous themes but thought I would give the contest a go:-) hugs Jan xx