'my Beautiful Dream'

And in my dream I stand in a frozen woodland, the air is cold, quiet, the sky is black as ink; I wear a gorgeous red velvet cape quite grand. Branches hold up icicles that drip with a clink, my hair falls long and raven- like fluid divine; the air is cold, quiet, the sky is black as ink. And snow is falling like drifting crystals that shine, from afar . . . I hear the melody- of a bell; my hair falls long and raven, like fluid divine. Before me is a black horse like a magic spell, on his neck, a red ribbon holds a bell tinkling; from afar- I hear the melody . . . of a bell. Above, in the pretty night sky stars are twinkling, the snow, a blizzard and we are lost in this dream; on his neck, a red ribbon holds a bell- twinkling. Oh, this vision will end with the first sunbeam- and in my dream- I stand in a frozen woodland; the snow, a blizzard and we are lost in this dream, I wear a gorgeous red velvet cape- quite grand. ______________________ February 14, 2017 Poetry/Terzanelle/'My Beautiful Dream' Copyright Protected, ID 17-1214-444-02 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. Submitted to the contest, Strand Special 5 sponsor, Brian Strand Second Place
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Watt Avatar
January 8, 2020 at 1:28 AM
Dear Heart, your poem is so fluid and dreamy and totally captures a winter vision. I can just picture the red velvet cape surrounded by snow and icicles. Terzanelles are not easy to make flow naturally and you did it so well. Maybe the word "twinkling" in line 15 should be "tinkling" like line 11? All in all a gorgeous write and worthy of your win in the contest. Blessings ~ John
La France Avatar
January 9, 2020 at 7:50 PM
John, thanks for visiting and for the compliment on my writing, you are right theses Terzanelles are like putting together a 1000 piece puzzle !
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2020 at 9:44 PM
Beautiful write! Sincere congratulations for your win in Brian's contest, Constance - keep the ink flowing, my friend, and best wishes for a bountiful and healthy New Year. Blessings! :o) <3
La France Avatar
January 9, 2020 at 7:51 PM
Greg, thanks for the beautiful and the congratulations !
Kauffman Avatar
January 7, 2020 at 6:47 PM
Dear Heart, this is a dear poem with soft images contrasting the images of cold winter to warm love. So lovely! Congratulations!!!
La France Avatar
January 9, 2020 at 7:52 PM
Sam, thanks for the lovely comment and the congratulations !
Proxenos Avatar
January 6, 2020 at 1:47 PM
Oh wow Dear Heart, this poem is totally outstanding, brilliant write. Blessings, Jennifer.
La France Avatar
January 7, 2020 at 12:36 PM
Jennifer thanks so much for the visit and compliment on my poem !
Andresen Avatar
January 6, 2020 at 12:51 PM
- A frosty and cold winter dream so beautifully written, D.H. :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
La France Avatar
January 7, 2020 at 12:37 PM
Anne-Lise, thanks for the visit and lovely comment and compliment !
Krutsinger Avatar
January 6, 2020 at 11:13 AM
Reminded me of National Velvet and Black Stallion. Beautifully done.
La France Avatar
January 6, 2020 at 12:19 PM
Caren, I loved those movies, and Black Beauty was a childhood favorite. i love horses and well, I dream of them sometimes, thanks for visiting and for the beautiful ~
Scars Avatar
January 6, 2020 at 10:28 AM
wow, amazing poem sweet lady- deserves a win for sure. May your dreams fill you with light and love. x:-)-luloo
La France Avatar
January 6, 2020 at 12:20 PM
Laura, thanks for visiting and for the compliment on my poem, appreciate !
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