My Balloons

I fashioned my dreams, into colorful balloons, blowing as much air into them as I could. Tied their ends with long strings of hope, and set them fly into the sky. I watched them soar, higher and higher into infinite heights, over shrouds of sleeping fog. I clapped my hands loud, in gay abandon. But when had they eluded my grip? Some of them had burst, before they could ascend higher I wasn’t cautious! Oh, now I see my balloons, with the thread of hope hanging loosely down, disappearing into the horizon, like black specks of soot signaling, they no more belong to me! ------------------ Feb.5. 2023 Re- entered for Brian's Premier No.1194 Poetry Contest Balloon Poetry Contest Sponsor- Anthony Biaanco
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Date: 3/3/2023 7:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative write and ending. Have a blessed day......................
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Date: 2/15/2023 1:08:00 AM
Yes, that’s life indeed. Fond imaginings and ambitions, some of which materialise and others are changed or abandoned. Love your balloons metaphor. Perfect !
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Date: 2/8/2023 3:59:00 PM
I can see them floating away and the tragedy of those that burst. Nice imagery, Valsa. Good entry, good luck! A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 2/6/2023 8:34:00 PM
This is so lovely Valsa, the visual is perfect, as is the poetry.
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Date: 2/6/2023 6:58:00 PM
This is just beautiful. Totally enjoyed it :)
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Date: 2/6/2023 12:52:00 PM
wow, free verse its finest here. What an awesome extended metaphor you made of balloons!
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Date: 2/6/2023 11:41:00 AM
- Lovely metaphorical written, Valsa ... that's the way you go is the most important thing... sometimes hope hangs in a thin thread ... and we have to inflate new balloons :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 2/6/2023 9:29:00 AM
In our imaginations this concept of balloons , IMHO, is great. Mine never came down. {I learned in meditation classes how to do this} And no comparison to China’s nonsense. Good luck in Anthony’s contest. I precict a win I for you! Panagiota xxoo..
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Date: 2/6/2023 9:19:00 AM
I believe this to be hokum, similar to the spy Chinese balloon:) dear Valsa. There is always a glimmer of hope for you. You lift your emotional writing to new heights by using balloons as a metaphor. Good luck
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Date: 2/6/2023 6:54:00 AM
Love your style of writing, so captivating, live this, May God bless, comfort, guide and fill you with His love, peace, spirit and joy in abundance
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Date: 2/6/2023 6:49:00 AM
With the metaphor of balloons--you buoy this emotive write, Valsa. Best to you.
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Date: 2/6/2023 1:51:00 AM
I'm sure this is fiction. You never lose hope. The worst thing one can do. Lovely metaphorical poem. Hugs.
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Date: 2/6/2023 1:26:00 AM
Our sincere aspirations and dreams will at times, be deflated and fall back on the ground, to prove that we are imperfect creatures, and that overconfidence can certainly slow their advance. This piece is a fine reminder, Valsa, to all varieties of overachievers___ to take their time! Excellent!...ab
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Date: 2/5/2023 11:32:00 PM
In light of the Chinese balloon being turned loose to spy on us then being shot down this one is enlightening. Sometimes in youth we do aim higher than we should because we are not mature enough to reach those heights. I enjoyed reading your contest entry and it reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
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