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My 4 Walls

After several years of adolescence I finally scaled the wall of adulthood. Trying many times before, I had only managed to butt heads. One day a frisky filly, gave me a kick and over the wall I went. Once over that wall, I encountered the wall of responsibility. I walked beside it for a while. After my first son was born, I scratched and clawed until I got over. No sooner than I had cleared it, I came face to face, with the wall of accountability. It would be many years before I would even think about climbing that wall. Every time I would get close I would always blame my shortcomings and fears on others. There were many setbacks until one day a strong feminine hand pulled me on top so I could see the light. Then I felt I had become a real man and my life changed for the better. I could see the choices I had been making were holding me back. Now, unrestrained I travel to the final wall, where I am certain there will be a helping hand. Feb 22 2016 By Daniel Turner

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Date: 3/11/2016 2:13:00 PM
Love your metaphors, Daniel. Wonderfully written with an outstanding take on the theme. Congratulations on your fine win. Sandra
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/11/2016 2:26:00 PM
Thank you, Ms. Sandra. I appreciate your kindness and the courtesy. Peace dear lady:)
Date: 3/11/2016 11:31:00 AM
Congrats Daniel...well deserved my friend...god bless...^WW^
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/11/2016 11:33:00 AM
Thank you, WW. I appreciate your kindness and your friendship. Peace my friend:)
Date: 3/11/2016 11:22:00 AM
Thanks for the reply Daniel, at least now you know you have an awesome free verse poem about 4 walls ...Linda
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/11/2016 11:34:00 AM
Smiling:):)
Date: 3/11/2016 10:21:00 AM
Hi Daniel, Congratulations on your "4 walls" win.... Love LINDA
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/11/2016 11:03:00 AM
Thank you, Linda. It was a little out of my realm of writing as I do not have any knowledge of free verse. I was simply trying something new. I appreciate the flowers and a chance to see your lovely photo. Thanks for the smile. Peace my friend:)
Date: 3/11/2016 10:13:00 AM
Daniel, thank you
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/11/2016 11:01:00 AM
Thank you for letting me participate and for the chance to stretch the boundaries of idealism. I appreciate your kindness. Peace my friend:)
Date: 2/28/2016 10:59:00 AM
Excellent take on '4 Walls contest' You have taken me over walls to see progress wonderfully expressed.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/28/2016 11:09:00 AM
Thank you my friend. Heart smiles are always appreciated. I am glad you took time from your day to read and comment. Peace and have a blessed day:) Iris, such a lovely name that brings to mind fresh beautiful, fragrant flowers.
Date: 2/24/2016 11:26:00 AM
Very well expressed, good luck in the contest. You might enjoy my poem "Boy Oh Boy and a Girl".
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/24/2016 11:30:00 AM
Thanks, Richard. I'll go check it out!
Date: 2/24/2016 1:34:00 AM
I love your entry Daniel. It is perceptive and leaning toward an introspective view of your life. I hope to see this a top winner! #7
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/24/2016 6:22:00 AM
Thank you, Connie. Such a gentle lady. I'm still not sure if it's considered free verse or prose. I like trying new things, even if I do wind up looking like a jackass. Always enjoy the visits Connie. malu, maluhia, la'i :)
Date: 2/23/2016 9:22:00 PM
Cunning interpretation of a wall. Lots of luck in contest. Peace, Love and Joy
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John Hardison
Date: 2/23/2016 9:42:00 PM
Checking in with Used wrong choice of word. Meant to say good introspective. Not off the wall like my first comment. My mind was coming from another poem. Old age hang over thing.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/23/2016 9:34:00 PM
Thank you, John. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I will need the luck. Peace:)
Date: 2/23/2016 8:43:00 PM
Great interpretation for this contest Daniel, life is full of hurdles and we can choose to find a way over them or let them loom over us in an unbearable fashion. good luck
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/23/2016 9:11:00 PM
Thank you,Brian. I still ahven't figured out if it's considered free verse or prose. I appreciate your supporting comments. Peace my friend:)
Date: 2/23/2016 7:04:00 PM
Silly Milly to miss out on Dashing Daniel.
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Date: 2/23/2016 6:54:00 PM
Ah Daniel...was that frisky filly called MILLY?
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/23/2016 6:57:00 PM
No silly. The first was Kathy the second was Charlotte. That's all I got!! Thank you for making ME smile. Peace my pretty Irish lass:)
Date: 2/23/2016 5:56:00 PM
Love the way you relate the walls to your own life experiences Daniel - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2016 5:59:00 PM
I have no idea if mine is free verse - i just write and hope:-) hugs Jan xx
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/23/2016 5:58:00 PM
Jan, honestly I have no clue what free verse is. It seems more like prose to me. Thank you for the wishes, I just wasn't sure how to go about it.

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