Mother's Voice

Hush, my dear mother, say no more
(Shut up your criticizing, out the door)
I know you love me, want my best,
(You’re putting my temper to an acid test)
I’m trying Jenny Craig, I know I’ll win
(Your suggestions are tantamount to starvation sin!)

Hush, my dear mother, say no more.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Goudreau Avatar
October 21, 2017 at 5:51 PM
You are still her little girl and always will be. Mothers can be nicely....over protective. Am sure she cares so much for you but i can understand your frustration. Well constructed poem.
Edwards-Gregory Avatar
September 25, 2017 at 7:36 PM
quiet interesting poem. Sometimes the frustration really takes center stage.
Robinson Jr. Avatar
September 22, 2017 at 5:31 PM
Very riveting and forthright poem, Sunlite. The dynamic, dialogue interplay is creatively brilliant. I love the Jenny Craig call and response lines. Superb poetry, dear. Star bright write. Instant fave for sure. Love and hugs always.
Wanter Avatar
September 22, 2017 at 6:35 PM
Thank you for reading this, Freddie, and leaving such nice comments!
Williams Avatar
September 20, 2017 at 1:56 AM
Yes, this sounds like a mother and daughter I know, say no more. Lol Love the poem Sunlite, a bitter ,sweet relationship is what I share too...Maria
Wanter Avatar
September 20, 2017 at 9:34 AM
Thanks for reading and sharing!
Goff Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 8:52 PM
Smiling with tension...nice pc, Sunlite
Wanter Avatar
September 19, 2017 at 11:40 AM
It's sort of bittersweet, I guess. Thank you!
One Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 8:05 AM
Well written personal poem..
Wanter Avatar
September 19, 2017 at 11:48 AM
Not too personal, Silent One. But very common to mothers and daughters.
Ashley Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 7:33 PM
Your poem is awesome Sunlite! Very deep and thought provoking. I love your concept and your content. SO wonderful on so many levels. I love the rhyme and the tinge of wicked humor... I truly enjoyed your poem this evening! :)
Wanter Avatar
September 19, 2017 at 11:48 AM
Thank you for your insight, Susan.
Sivey Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 4:52 PM
Yes, mothers do care a lot for their children, so much so they sometimes tend to get too involved with their lives and decision making! I'm sure she only has the child's best wishes at heart! I say this as I don't know if this poem is about you, and to say it is could be offensive, I'm not one to hurt people! I really enjoyed reading your very descriptive and back and forth thought process poem this afternoon! What a grandiose piece, Such Awesome Work!!
Bateman Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 2:56 PM
Hello Sunlite, It's Mr. "ME" here. (And thanks for your recent comment on my latest poem!!) I agree with Eileen, relationships between Mother and Daughter can be complicated at times. I do sympathize for sure. Best of Luck!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Wanter Avatar
September 19, 2017 at 11:50 AM
Yes, they can be complicated, but after a while, they get sweet.
Roper Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 12:49 PM
Wow!! Sunlite, i love the way you form this poem... amazing, but I feel the emotional pain ~`* Eve
Wanter Avatar
September 19, 2017 at 11:51 AM
Thank you, Eve. Just "light" emotional pain.
Manassian Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 12:39 PM
Wow! This is so deep, Sunlite. The reality is often very different than what it appears to be. The way you wrote this is superb. Mother/daughter relationships are complicated at times.
Wanter Avatar
September 19, 2017 at 11:56 AM
Thank you for your very astute observations.
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