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Mother No More

"recently scenes of early life have stolen into my mind, like breezes blown ..." Quote by _Samuel Taylor Coleridge (from his writings) Mother no more! You're half-orphan! They said. At just three, I did not know where she went. With some secret-filled smile I went ahead. Through grassy, bushy, thorny, paths so bent, They carried her within coffin coal black... At just three, I did not know where she went. While walking through the same way our home back, I did not know why I did not ask why They carried her within coffin coal black... When I first went to my first school nearby, When my first teacher kissed my hand and cried I did not know why I did not ask why I did not cry; my dad's tears never dried. A feeling, like rough cloudburst, within rushed... When my first teacher kissed my hand and cried With growing up when past feelings got hushed. Mother no more! You're half-orphan! They said. A feeling, like rough cloudburst, within rushed... With some secret-filled smile I went ahead. 22 October 2022 Writing Challenge - Past Memories - ''T'' Forms Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France. Theme: Past Memories Form: Terzanelle

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Date: 11/18/2022 7:42:00 AM
An outstandingly tragic poem, tears fill my eyes, I feel dejected and may God bless that child!
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/18/2022 8:59:00 AM
hank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/12/2022 12:35:00 AM
Christuraj, you have penned a beautiful and emotional Terzanelle. It touched my heart. And congratulations on your placement in my contest, Writing Challenge - Past Memories- "T" Forms. And of course, I like the quote also, well done !
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Date: 11/6/2022 8:06:00 PM
Such delicate execution of feeling shows the fragility so perfectly. Beautifully rendered. Elizabeth
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/11/2022 12:49:00 AM
Thank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/1/2022 10:52:00 AM
Wow! Christuraj. This is a beautiful poem. A well-deserved first-place win. I have fav so I can read it over and over again.
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/11/2022 12:49:00 AM
Thank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/1/2022 8:51:00 AM
Dear Christuraj, My mom died when I was almost three, also, so my heart goes out to you. We missed our mother's love as we grew. Beautiful poem you wrote. Congratulations on winning!
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/11/2022 12:49:00 AM
Thank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/1/2022 7:22:00 AM
Congratulation on your win, Alex. You amply deserve the podium with this very well-penned poem.
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/11/2022 12:48:00 AM
Thank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/1/2022 6:15:00 AM
This has brought tears into my eyes. I feel it so deep, being a sensitive person. How orphaned you were without a mother when you were only three. Fortunately you being so young, you didn't know what was happening and you had no questions to ask.... ! Congratulations on your great win Chris!
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/1/2022 6:32:00 AM
Thank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/1/2022 6:10:00 AM
Congratulations, Dear Christuraj, on your very well-deserved top win. This is such a tender, loving, but painful write from perspective of an innocent three-year old! The exquisite form suits perfectly with the heart-wrenching content - my eyes welled up especially with the refrain. I can not imagine a three-year old losing his mother. Love and blessings ~ Mala
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/1/2022 6:32:00 AM
Thank you very much for your support and encouragements. May God Bless You!
Date: 11/1/2022 5:16:00 AM
Congrats, Christuraj. Such a well-told story.
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Date: 11/1/2022 1:07:00 AM
Damn.This is quite saddening but written so beautifully. Congratulations!
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 11/1/2022 2:48:00 AM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Date: 10/22/2022 4:03:00 PM
Ah, this one touched my heart Chris, how tender you put it all in prospective, but I am sure she lived in your heart each and every day, from grade school on, a winner by far :)
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 10/23/2022 8:19:00 AM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Date: 10/21/2022 9:34:00 AM
Wow, Christuraj! Glad I happened upon your lovely write. The innocent speak in their minds and hearts, not yet with understanding…it’s raining all about.
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 10/21/2022 9:55:00 AM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Date: 10/20/2022 8:24:00 PM
This is powerful, and it sings. Well done
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 10/20/2022 9:33:00 PM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!

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