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Gate or Gates, Constance La France, 7/7/2025

Mother at the Gate

The gossamer on a child’s frame, looked new and ancient,
all at once. A ghostly smile, a trick and treat, directed at me.
No wrinkles on the hand of time, his godforsaken finger
pointed at the stabbed pigeon. I followed the tracks of blood
down to the river. I seemed to have no choice, in this misty
sequence. A grief-stricken mother lay next to her child.
A solo, red shoe alongside the body. Gossamer-boy wore
the other shoe, pristine-white. A wicked groaning bellowed
from inside the frame of this devil’s child. The mother moves
beside a grave and deposits dead roses on her son’s tomb.
      She lost both her children that night. One she claims
            a t   the   gate… the other is left   to  his  fate.
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Goldsmith Avatar
July 19, 2025 at 11:25 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad "Mother at the Gate" write. Scary!!! I have been off the computer for a few days. Have a blessed day with your win...........
Rodrigues Avatar
July 19, 2025 at 11:46 AM
It is good to be off media sometimes. Hope it was for a good reason. xx
Fowler Avatar
July 12, 2025 at 9:18 AM
I have come to expect the unexpected from you Kim. Ever unique and intriguing. Thank you and congratulations! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
July 12, 2025 at 10:34 AM
Thank you so much, Linda! :)
Andresen Avatar
July 11, 2025 at 5:01 AM
- Congratulations on your great win in the contest, Kim :) - hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
July 11, 2025 at 6:51 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise!
Roni Avatar
July 9, 2025 at 3:13 AM
Excellent verse, dear Kim. The surreal imagery and fragmented timeline evoke a sense of helpless descent into grief and fate.
Rodrigues Avatar
July 9, 2025 at 7:23 AM
Thank you, Faruk! I love how you described it!
Legros Kelley Avatar
July 7, 2025 at 11:22 PM
This is certainly an eerie one Kim, as well as incredibly sad!
Rodrigues Avatar
July 8, 2025 at 8:09 AM
Indeed! Glad you read it and thanks for supporting with your comment, BJ!
Crandall Avatar
July 7, 2025 at 5:36 PM
Scary!
Rodrigues Avatar
July 7, 2025 at 7:06 PM
I don’t write too many scary things but went with the words, where they took me. Hopefully not too much.
Hind Avatar
July 7, 2025 at 5:25 PM
This has a lot of intrigue, but pain. Somehow I believe this is personal, but I don't know. It's very fitting the prompt, no one else could write it like that.
Hind Avatar
July 8, 2025 at 11:03 AM
Hmmm, okay- lol Sorry, glad you told me. :) Sometimes as with me images reflect what I am feeling, I guess. I thought maybe you were in a dark mood or something. Hugs :)
Rodrigues Avatar
July 7, 2025 at 7:06 PM
Definately NOT personal, but it is okay that you pondered that. It was the last entry before contest end. I had to come up with something.
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