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Gate or Gates, Constance La France, 7/7/2025

The gossamer on a child’s frame, looked new and ancient, all at once. A ghostly smile, a trick and treat, directed at me. No wrinkles on the hand of time, his godforsaken finger pointed at the stabbed pigeon. I followed the tracks of blood down to the river. I seemed to have no choice, in this misty sequence. A grief-stricken mother lay next to her child. A solo, red shoe alongside the body. Gossamer-boy wore the other shoe, pristine-white. A wicked groaning bellowed from inside the frame of this devil’s child. The mother moves beside a grave and deposits dead roses on her son’s tomb. She lost both her children that night. One she claims a t the gate… the other is left to his fate.

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Date: 7/19/2025 11:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad "Mother at the Gate" write. Scary!!! I have been off the computer for a few days. Have a blessed day with your win...........
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/19/2025 11:46:00 AM
It is good to be off media sometimes. Hope it was for a good reason. xx
Date: 7/12/2025 9:18:00 AM
I have come to expect the unexpected from you Kim. Ever unique and intriguing. Thank you and congratulations! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/12/2025 10:34:00 AM
Thank you so much, Linda! :)
Date: 7/11/2025 5:01:00 AM
- Congratulations on your great win in the contest, Kim :) - hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/11/2025 6:51:00 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise!
Date: 7/9/2025 3:13:00 AM
Excellent verse, dear Kim. The surreal imagery and fragmented timeline evoke a sense of helpless descent into grief and fate.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/9/2025 7:23:00 AM
Thank you, Faruk! I love how you described it!
Date: 7/7/2025 11:22:00 PM
This is certainly an eerie one Kim, as well as incredibly sad!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/8/2025 8:09:00 AM
Indeed! Glad you read it and thanks for supporting with your comment, BJ!
Date: 7/7/2025 5:36:00 PM
Scary!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/7/2025 7:06:00 PM
I don’t write too many scary things but went with the words, where they took me. Hopefully not too much.
Date: 7/7/2025 5:25:00 PM
This has a lot of intrigue, but pain. Somehow I believe this is personal, but I don't know. It's very fitting the prompt, no one else could write it like that.
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Paige Hind
Date: 7/8/2025 11:03:00 AM
Hmmm, okay- lol Sorry, glad you told me. :) Sometimes as with me images reflect what I am feeling, I guess. I thought maybe you were in a dark mood or something. Hugs :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/7/2025 7:06:00 PM
Definately NOT personal, but it is okay that you pondered that. It was the last entry before contest end. I had to come up with something.

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