Moongone

I plucked the moon out of a blackened sky

To save it from the music of Orion's wrath

The universe, now without its lover

Played its tune among  the stars




Adapted from 

Moonsong by Deb Guzzi


The moon sat, plunked in a cobalt sky
punctuating the stratus
a wane full note on a blank scale
resonating, pulsating, pregnant in it’s fullness
and the string was plucked.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
July 30, 2010 at 12:43 PM
yOu are very creative, Barbara and congrats for doing well in the contest. LUv, Andrea
Brown Avatar
July 30, 2010 at 5:25 AM
Congratulations Barbara on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Critcise Me". Love, Carol
Freeman Avatar
July 29, 2010 at 10:26 PM
Congratulations, Barbara, on your success in deborah's contest. Agape, Moses
La France Avatar
July 25, 2010 at 7:34 PM
You did a wonderful job at making Deb's poem your own ~ I found this challenge very difficult to do ~ best of luck in the contest
Mehta Avatar
July 24, 2010 at 6:59 PM
A nice adaptation. Good luck in the contest
R Avatar
July 24, 2010 at 7:26 AM
Wow...Debbie sure awakened a lot of inspiring words inside you! Great job in metamorphosing her poem! Good luck in the contest! Emily
Culverhouse Avatar
July 24, 2010 at 7:03 AM
I envision a ripe rising being plucked, yuck! sorry I couldn't help myself.
Mitchell Avatar
July 24, 2010 at 6:24 AM
I think this could be a difficult contest to judge! Good luck, Barbra : )
Neels Avatar
July 23, 2010 at 9:59 PM
Barbara, I love this.. All the best for the contest.. You had me smiling with you comment on "ignite the fire" WNN
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