Mixing In the Moonlight

Mixing in the Moonlight 

Dear darling, gaze ye at the blood red moon.
Ancient light that calls with its bright red tones.
Fret not, on the breeze there will be no tune.
For the loss is great, witness how she moans.

How can we lowly sinners, give her hope?
Her pain daunting, my love, that is so true.
The poor boy hanged at the end of a rope.
With our hidden love, it may next be you.

Let us then escape ‘neath cover of dark.
For to lose you would crush my very soul.
Upon that tree, the beasts have left their mark.
Where once his heart was, there is but a hole.

They forbid two colours joining as one.
The moonlight is far safer than the sun.

My attempt at a sonnet.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Kingston Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 8:11 PM
Moonight is one of my favorite things. I would love to own a house with a skylight to fall asleep moon gazing. . How about you? Your poem moved me, made sad and happy. I loved your last two lines. I believe it might make a lovely song, possibly sung by Barbara Streisand. I would buy it and learn all the words. Your poem is timeless. "The moonlight is far safer than the sun" always and I suppose forever.
Lamoureux Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 5:19 AM
Thanks for your generous comment. I appreciate you reading my sonnet.
Hind Avatar
September 18, 2023 at 1:25 PM
I liked your sonnet! The title was intriguing...
Lamoureux Avatar
September 18, 2023 at 2:07 PM
Thanks Paige.
Edmonds  Avatar
September 14, 2023 at 4:40 PM
An excellent sonnet Richard, for your first attempt too, well done you… Belle
Lamoureux Avatar
September 14, 2023 at 5:11 PM
Much appreciated.
Bowring Avatar
September 10, 2023 at 2:52 AM
Goodness Richard- your first sonnet! What an amazing achievement. I think this form suits you well. Perfect pentameter and I love the use of archaic words. Think the Bard himself would be impressed with this one. I am! A great tragedy as you would expect from a sonnet. Wonderful ending couplet- especially that last line. I look forward to hopefully enjoying more from you!
Lamoureux Avatar
September 10, 2023 at 3:47 PM
What a wonderful response to this piece. Much appreciated.
Baker Avatar
September 9, 2023 at 8:57 AM
I like it, Richard. Good form, and very intriguing poetry, my friend. I hope you'll write more sonnets in the future. Bill
Lamoureux Avatar
September 9, 2023 at 10:50 AM
Much appreciated.
One Avatar
September 9, 2023 at 8:10 AM
Your sonnet rhymes and flows very well..
Lamoureux Avatar
September 9, 2023 at 10:50 AM
Thanks, I was hoping I got it right.
Campanella Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 8:57 PM
Hello, Richard Lamoureux you have got it now - beginners luck - I'm not fond of sonnets - as you will see - I did like the read and imagery - well done - Good Luck, stay safe too!
Lamoureux Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 9:42 PM
Much appreciated. It’s good to try new things.
Chircop Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 6:44 PM
Forbidden Love,many times forbidden for no valid reasons...and the punishment it carried..In some countries it's still that way..How scary to live a life without the freedom to love who you want,to be with who you want..A great topic Rick..A tragic sonnet..I enjoyed.reading it.
Lamoureux Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 7:55 PM
Your response is so eloquently expressed. Hugs Rick.
Faulkner Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 12:30 PM
A very haunting and tragic story, and still too recent in history for comfort~
Lamoureux Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 2:02 PM
Thanks for giving it a read.
Situation Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 9:51 AM
Did you mintion a lynching? And the fears of the masters? Thank God we have a God.
Lamoureux Avatar
September 8, 2023 at 10:28 AM
Yes at one time it was very dangerous to be in an interracial relationship.
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