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At your tomb I stand, forlorn and full of despair; our wedding song I murmur, then, I notice a bird nest . . . with chirping, peeping, trilling babies. ______________________ October 14, 2017 Free Verse/Song of Despair Copyright Protected, ID 949641 Written for the contest, Minamalist sponsor, Nett Onclaud Second Place

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Judith S

Date: 10/26/2017 11:56:00 AM

It is amazing to me how you deliver so much emotion in 5 short lines of writing! I think this is brilliant! Best, Judy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/22/2017 8:50:00 PM

that last line was SO cool how you tied it up, Constance. Sad and beautiful. Congrats for the win.

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 10/22/2017 6:48:00 AM

A very emotional piece... As Jan said, the last line is uplifting. Congrats Constance, for your placement in the contest! ;-)

Jan Allison

Date: 10/21/2017 6:01:00 PM

So sad but with an uplifting ending Constance:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 10/21/2017 5:42:00 PM

Broken Wings, congratulations on your win well done.. :) Hugs Eve ~`*

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/21/2017 4:55:00 PM

lovely expression of nature humming in the midst of death, constance... am glad you found time to participate and garner a smashing honor in this challenge... thanks!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/15/2017 6:27:00 AM

Song of despair--happy chirping birdies!

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/14/2017 9:56:00 PM

Magnificent piece lovely xomo