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Marry Me

he proposes with
              his late grandma’s sapphire ring
                              will his girlfriend accept it?

                              her eyes fill with tears
              can this be my something blue
to wear on our wedding day?



5,7,7,5,7,7 checked with how many syllables

Ni (2) Katuata Poetry Contest

Sponsored by William Kekaula

07/12/21

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Malabika Ray Choudhury Date: 7/18/2021 5:09:00 PM Very sweet emotions, Jan. Enjoyed. Love ~ Mala Login to Reply

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/17/2021 2:42:00 AM Nice one, Jan:) Login to Reply

Anisha Dutta Date: 7/13/2021 10:30:00 PM VERY GOOD. I admire. Blessings Login to Reply

Rico Leffanta Date: 7/13/2021 12:04:00 PM Interesting! A Navajo would wear it believing it held all the power of the grandmother, but an Apache would never wear it because the spirit of the grandmother could return to reclaim it . . .I never thought of a gemstone as the "something blue" ...well done, Jan! Login to Reply

Caren Krutsinger Date: 7/13/2021 8:32:00 AM Ahh so delicately written. A blue stone used to be the most popular engagement ring. Login to Reply

Kathryn Collins Date: 7/13/2021 7:46:00 AM Dearest Jan, A glorious poem. And…. Thanks for the memories. Kathy Login to Reply

Mike Gentile Date: 7/13/2021 4:39:00 AM Lovely thought and sentiment Jan. I think you really did well with this form and I love the sweet feeling it conjures for me! Happy Tuesday xxoo Login to Reply

Rama Balasubramanian Date: 7/13/2021 12:18:00 AM Very nicely done. I am not good at writing romantic poems, so when I read one, it gives much joy. All the best for contest Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:29:00 AM aww Rama that is such a sweet comment i struggle writing romantic poems I much prefer humour:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar Date: 7/12/2021 11:30:00 PM This is very cute, Jan. Hugs. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:29:00 AM Thanks Victor:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman Date: 7/12/2021 6:50:00 PM Lovely Jan, good luck in contest. When i saw the title i said 'Yes' but the wife wouldn't let me, spoil sport. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:29:00 AM ha ha ha Harry, comment of the year lol you made me smile. is bigamy big down under lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues Date: 7/12/2021 5:47:00 PM Pretty! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:28:00 AM Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

David Mchattie Date: 7/12/2021 4:57:00 PM Something old and something blue. Well penned. Very sweet. Have a great day my friend. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:28:00 AM Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham Date: 7/12/2021 1:59:00 PM Very romantic Jan, a tender moment. Good luck Tom Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:27:00 AM rare for me to write romance i prefer poop lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 7/12/2021 1:34:00 PM ? Great verse , I hope she accepted Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:27:00 AM Thanks Eve - she said YES:-) hugs Janxx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 7/12/2021 1:31:00 PM - Definitely a beautiful ring ... I would ... a lovely poem, Jan :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:26:00 AM Thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner Date: 7/12/2021 1:31:00 PM I love sapphires, so much prettier than boring white diamonds :) Excellent entry for the contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2021 1:26:00 AM I love Ceylon sapphires - my engagement ring is a small diamond I was never much of a ring person, now I have a larger diamond i wear on the other hand:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 7/12/2021 12:52:00 PM Hello Jan, I wonder if she wears this on her wedding day. Hugs, Login to Reply Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 7/13/2021 3:50:00 PM Hello Jan, I would wear that ring if given to me. Yes it is a lovely ring. I would prefer the Ceylon sapphire ring to. xx Hugs.Darlene Jan Allison Date: 7/12/2021 1:27:00 PM I would hope so i would wear it if I got given such a lovely ring! I adore Ceylon sapphires rather than the inky blue ones:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer Date: 7/12/2021 12:46:00 PM very touching, jan! best of luck in the contest... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/12/2021 1:26:00 PM Thanks Ilene i am not good at romantic poems but thought I would try this contest:-) hugs Jan xx