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Maddening Meter

If my meter were sweeter could I be the star of the show
I struggle with getting it right – I know I’ve a long way to go
I sound out the syllables but where is the stress
Apart from in my brain  - oh I make such a mess


'Foot’ or ‘feet’ aren’t the limbs that I see
Iambic pentameter – its French and Greek to me!
Da DAH Da Da DAH ... it’s ringing in my head
Oh I’ve had enough so I’m going back to bed

10th April 2015

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Wilfred Aniagyei April 23, 2015 at 6:42 PM lol.... simple complete genius!! Jan Allison April 24, 2015 at 1:59 AM LOL you are too kind lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Craig Munn April 15, 2015 at 6:16 AM great poem really enjoyed...... Jan Allison April 15, 2015 at 6:19 AM Thanks for dropping by to comment Craig:-)Hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley April 13, 2015 at 8:31 AM Great poem my friend, A7. As strong believer in the superiority of rhyme and message over all other I say meter is the tax they want to place on Peter. Do da do da day. Jan Allison April 13, 2015 at 8:46 AM Very clever comment Robert - I am thankful we all write in different styles - we are unique and have our strengths and weaknesses but we also have the choice to be able to express ourselves in whatever way we want:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne April 12, 2015 at 2:10 PM Thought I would just squeeze one cheap one in. Yeah a whole ten points! I bet I have all the top posters looking over their shoulders. How many posts do I need to get to two million if you get 10 points a post? Jan Allison April 12, 2015 at 2:32 PM ha ha ha I don't bother about the lists they can be manipulated lol ... but whoever chose me to get poem of the week I could kiss them! hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne April 12, 2015 at 2:08 PM You know it is one thing to build up community points by making lots of comments but I think it would be a lot easier to go to different poets and say a lot less. This is very time consuming since I use an IPad and type with one finger and a half a brain, in fact they have a search warrant out for my brain now. I am really doing this cheating stuff wrong. I can't help myself these comments are a lot more entertaining than my poetry! Jan Allison April 12, 2015 at 2:31 PM You always make me smile my friend - your poetry is outstanding - your last poem should get poem of the year it is THAT good! hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne April 12, 2015 at 2:03 PM I couldn't write meter if Shakespeare, Lord Byron, Shelly and Coleridge came back from the dead to help. Mind you if they all came back from the dead to help me, I don't think I would care about meter, I think the fact they were back would be enough I think I could ride on just that for a while. Great poem, dead on! A Double Fav! Jan Allison April 12, 2015 at 2:30 PM But they can't write outstanding free verse like you Armand - thankfully we all have different talents - I wonder when i will discover mine lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne April 12, 2015 at 1:59 PM Personally I think they're just making that stuff up. I mean like Debbie, Andrea and others are always talking about meter but how can any guy be that large that is like 39.370 inches, I mean that is biologically impossible. You would be like a circus act, you know like they would call you the elephant man because that is one heck of a trunk! ........What?..........not a measurement...........poetic form...oh...I see.......never mind then! Jan Allison April 12, 2015 at 2:28 PM lol :-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet April 11, 2015 at 2:33 PM This is very good ...it pours out the frustrations like a thick syrup...sad, funny and yet delicious! Emile. #7 Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 2:36 PM Thanks Emile I do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my poems:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emmanuel Brian Oule April 11, 2015 at 4:02 AM Bang Fav Stanza 'Foot’ or ‘feet’ aren’t the limbs that I see Iambic pentameter – its French and Greek to me! Da DAH Da Da DAH ... it’s ringing in my head Oh I’ve had enough so I’m going back to bed.. I loved it Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 4:34 AM Thanks Bryan - tongue in cheek humour - but i do struggle sometimes - what better way than to express it in a poem lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud April 11, 2015 at 2:09 AM yayy, we are all in the same boat, jan... why do these forms make us want to bleed?.. superb rhythm and greeat work!.. huggs Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 3:18 AM Your poems flow so beautifully Nette your meter is sweeter than mine! Hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley April 11, 2015 at 12:26 AM Don't panic, Jan- some of the best songs in the world change tempo and key, or throw in a dischord. I think you do very well, and congrats in making it into the top 100 for the Month more than once. Viv x Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 3:17 AM Thanks Viv - I take no notice of that list it is easily manipulated! hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso April 10, 2015 at 11:52 PM If my meter were sweeter.... well I will just stop it right there or I will get in trouble here!!!! Loved this! Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 3:16 AM LOL Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich April 10, 2015 at 11:11 PM this is so much fun and I love the pictures you always add with your cute little poems, Jan. Whether you have it SPOT ON or not, it doesn't much matter when it sounds this good! Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 3:15 AM Thanks Andrea I wrote this after I struggled doing your trochee poem - I was more stressed than the syllables lol:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sandra Haight April 10, 2015 at 10:29 PM Love this, Jan! Despite your complaining, I say you have a sweet meter and you are definitely in control of your feet! :) Very cute! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 3:14 AM Thanks for the cute comment Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie April 10, 2015 at 6:57 PM G'day Jan... Nice one Jan. Attempting to get the meter and rhyme to gel can be frustrating. It's a bit like riding a horse I suppose. Get out of rhythm there and see what happens. Regards - Lindsay Jan Allison April 11, 2015 at 3:12 AM Great comment Lindsay:-) Hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser April 10, 2015 at 5:14 PM Oh, I love this one. Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 5:16 PM Thanks so much ML just a bit of fun ... or is it:-) Hugs jan xx

Eve Roper April 10, 2015 at 4:29 PM The feeling is mutual :"( . : ) my head is also spinning reading this poem a 7 Blessings and hugs eve Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 4:31 PM I had a bit of fun with this one Eve lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez April 10, 2015 at 4:14 PM What...but I've seen many of your poems...they were so good...Oh, okay...i saw your reply to BW...Kaya mo yan, kaibigan...It means you can do it, my friend! Love this rhyme...HUgs! :) Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 4:18 PM oh what a lovely phrase Kim - with practice I CAN do it - I am learning all the time here and I won't give up:-) Hugs jan xx

Constance La France April 10, 2015 at 3:57 PM Jan, oh I know exactly how your feel about meter, I am struggling with it also but I think when done right it creates something really flowing, you have penned in my books a perfect 7, and thanks for visiting my bio poem with your kind comment, I am happy to hear that you know of the "stories in wrinkled hands" Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 4:00 PM I can do limericks but when it came to Andrea's trochee I struggled so i asked advice from another poet and he helped me a great deal. That line from your poem brought tears to my eyes - my mum is so lucky I visit every day - some residents get none so I try and spend time with them with mum - she gets to know more people and it brightens their day:-) Hugs Janxx

Robert Stoner Jr April 10, 2015 at 3:17 PM Fun write Jan and great art,lol. Don't stub your toes on that meter. Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 3:18 PM lol Thanks Robert I'll try not to:-) Hugs Jan xx

James Fraser April 10, 2015 at 3:08 PM My sentiments exactly when it comes to some Forms, nice one Jan, hugs, James xx Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 3:17 PM yes I struggle at times James:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper April 10, 2015 at 9:57 AM Puuuurfect! Seems that your feet are marching in perfect time in this dress parade. A 7 And into my favaourites again dear lady. Love Shane xxx Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 10:52 AM Thanks Shane I did struggle with Andrea's latest contest - did get some advice so I got the meter right:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka April 10, 2015 at 9:54 AM Stan~ There is a reason I have very few poems labeled blank verse...lol I really would not be sleeping at night. Woke at 3 AM with verse floating, but to tired to get up and write it down. All of the stresses would do me in for sure.. ( ;-0) ~Jan Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 10:51 AM I no longer wake in the middle of the night to write - I simply find it so hard to actually sleep lo l - I crave 7 or 8 hours unbroken sleep. When I first started writing i would get up in the middle of the night to write - then started to have a notepad by my bed :-) Hugs jan xx

Tim Smith April 10, 2015 at 8:48 AM lol fantastic...hugs Tim Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 10:49 AM Cheers Tim:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux April 10, 2015 at 8:22 AM Love it! Jan Allison April 10, 2015 at 10:48 AM Thanks Richard:-) Hugs Jan xx

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