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Love's Flame Ignites

Love's Flame ignites My heart was yearning I saw you in the distance our hearts were burning Our love's fire can never die Flames ignite, shine in our eyes Tanka style syllable count 5,7,5,7,7 John Derek Hamilton July 26,2016

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Eve Roper

Date: 7/27/2016 6:04:00 PM

Great tanka, John, very romantic. Hugs Eve

John Hamilton
Date: 7/27/2016 6:36:00 PM

Thanks Eve just trying to master different forms, short ones are a challenge, thanks for the read and comment!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 7/26/2016 2:52:00 PM

Beautiful verse, John. I especially love the last line, what a nice visual you've created. Nicely crafted. :) Always, Laura

John Hamilton
Date: 7/26/2016 3:31:00 PM

Thanks Laura, I think we always strive for the perfect line, sometimes we come sort of close, you more so than me, but I appreciate the comment and visit!

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/26/2016 2:32:00 PM

Very lovely John. I am not an aficionado when it comes to short verses but I like this one.

John Hamilton
Date: 7/26/2016 3:29:00 PM

It is a real challenge with the syllable restrictions but I like to try different forms, probably will move back to free verse, and rhyme as short verse restrictions mute creativity, thanks for positive feedback!