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A One Sided Love Affair

Such beauty that I see in you, white feathers gleam in misty dew. Above the water’s sparkling edge, I see you stand amongst the sedge. You think that I don’t see you there and sway like reeds in open air. Your heart I wish for us to share, I know inside you really care. Please let this be a loving start and never more to be apart, the feelings that we both could share, much more than just a love affair. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I see you swim beneath the wave, my life I know that you will save. Now quick I reach for you and then it’s down my throat it’s you I’ll send. 11/08/2017

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Date: 11/29/2017 3:44:00 PM
What a lovely, heartfelt love letter this is! I think anyone who receives such a letter would be touched by its simplicity, beauty, and sincerity. I know because it melted my heart! Excellent romantic piece! Hugs. Pandita
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James Inman
Date: 12/1/2017 4:53:00 AM
Thanks for the visit Pandita.
Date: 11/18/2017 12:10:00 PM
Such a beautiful written poem, everything about it was perfect, the way you make it rhyme, the way you ve describeb your feelings, and how you end it, it really was a brilliant poem
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James Inman
Date: 11/18/2017 6:54:00 PM
Thanks for the wonderful comment Faraz.
Date: 11/15/2017 8:25:00 AM
The all consuming love affair that never ends well. Brilliant write, Congratulations, SuZ
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James Inman
Date: 11/15/2017 10:27:00 AM
Thank you Suzanne, I guess I'm just too needy, lol.
Date: 11/14/2017 9:03:00 PM
How we soon get enraptured by the wiles of romance, only to be snatched of all that we are! Beautiful, and an incredible ending!!! This was deadly and beautiful all at the same time. Really enjoying exploring your page this evening. Well done! Always, Laura
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 10:20:00 PM
I'm afraid it's the risk we all take especially when young. Our expectations of what we are looking for do not correspond with what we actually want in a relationship, but we don't realize it until it's too late. Thank you Laura, you are always welcome here.
Date: 11/14/2017 8:02:00 AM
Congratulations on an awesome write with an unexpected ending James!~Che :)
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 10:56:00 AM
Thanks Cheryl.
Date: 11/13/2017 7:24:00 PM
Beauty and a beast...Totally unexpected! Excellent pen! Congratulations :) xomo!
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:51:00 AM
If you think about it Maureen, they really just love each other for different reasons. (I know, I know, how cruel. Perhaps it's me who is the beast.)
Date: 11/13/2017 6:48:00 PM
I love the twist at the end James:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:45:00 AM
Thanks Jan.
Date: 11/13/2017 9:24:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:45:00 AM
Thank you Frances.
Date: 11/13/2017 8:36:00 AM
A great rhyme with an unforeseen twist, James! Congrats on your win. Sandra
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:45:00 AM
Thanks Sandra, I watch the birds fishing on the lake where I work and the fish seem almost mezmorized by the Great Egrets as there necks sway back and forth until they are snapped up by the birds.
Date: 11/13/2017 6:24:00 AM
Well done, James, beautifully descriptive with a snap of a twist. Thanks for entering the contest. Regards, Viv
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James Inman
Date: 11/14/2017 2:41:00 AM
Thanks for hosting Viv, thought you would appreciate the irony.
Date: 11/13/2017 1:03:00 AM
Very well written, loaded with sweet words and great imagery too. Congratulations!
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James Inman
Date: 11/13/2017 1:28:00 AM
Thanks Afzal.
Date: 11/10/2017 5:32:00 AM
Great imagery - the added visuals of the water line (with wavelets!) are a very effective bonus. BRAVO !
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James Inman
Date: 11/10/2017 6:10:00 AM
Thank you, a little humor in this one.
Date: 11/9/2017 3:55:00 PM
Didn't see that coming. But great great write... hugs :)
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James Inman
Date: 11/9/2017 5:30:00 PM
A little twist Akkina, sorry it didn't turn out the way you expected.
Date: 11/8/2017 2:18:00 PM
James, great write, so dreamy until that final bite!
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James Inman
Date: 11/8/2017 2:41:00 PM
Sorry I haven't visited lately BW. I was thinking about you this morning. Thank you for the nice comment. I was thinking about the Great Egrets and Great Blue Herons I watch fishing along the canals at work and thought Viv might appreciate the irony.
Date: 11/8/2017 1:43:00 PM
Sure feels one sided--well written--best for a win James!
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James Inman
Date: 11/8/2017 2:37:00 PM
Thank you Vijay.

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