James Inman Poet Rhyme

A One Sided Love Affair

Such beauty that I see in you,
white feathers gleam in misty dew.
Above the water’s sparkling edge,
I see you stand amongst the sedge.

You think that I don’t see you there
and sway like reeds in open air.
Your heart I wish for us to share,
I know inside you really care.

Please let this be a loving start
and never more to be apart,
the feelings that we both could share,
much more than just a love affair.

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I see you swim beneath the wave,
my life I know that you will save.
Now quick I reach for you and then 
it’s down my throat it’s you I’ll send.


11/08/2017

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Pandita Sietesantos November 29, 2017 at 3:44 PM What a lovely, heartfelt love letter this is! I think anyone who receives such a letter would be touched by its simplicity, beauty, and sincerity. I know because it melted my heart! Excellent romantic piece! Hugs. Pandita James Inman December 1, 2017 at 4:53 AM Thanks for the visit Pandita.

Faraz Ajmal November 18, 2017 at 12:10 PM Such a beautiful written poem, everything about it was perfect, the way you make it rhyme, the way you ve describeb your feelings, and how you end it, it really was a brilliant poem James Inman November 18, 2017 at 6:54 PM Thanks for the wonderful comment Faraz.

Suzanne Delaney November 15, 2017 at 8:25 AM The all consuming love affair that never ends well. Brilliant write, Congratulations, SuZ James Inman November 15, 2017 at 10:27 AM Thank you Suzanne, I guess I'm just too needy, lol.

Laura Breidenthal November 14, 2017 at 9:03 PM How we soon get enraptured by the wiles of romance, only to be snatched of all that we are! Beautiful, and an incredible ending!!! This was deadly and beautiful all at the same time. Really enjoying exploring your page this evening. Well done! Always, Laura James Inman November 14, 2017 at 10:20 PM I'm afraid it's the risk we all take especially when young. Our expectations of what we are looking for do not correspond with what we actually want in a relationship, but we don't realize it until it's too late. Thank you Laura, you are always welcome here.

Cheryl Hoffman November 14, 2017 at 8:02 AM Congratulations on an awesome write with an unexpected ending James!~Che :) James Inman November 14, 2017 at 10:56 AM Thanks Cheryl.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 13, 2017 at 7:24 PM Beauty and a beast...Totally unexpected! Excellent pen! Congratulations :) xomo! James Inman November 14, 2017 at 2:51 AM If you think about it Maureen, they really just love each other for different reasons. (I know, I know, how cruel. Perhaps it's me who is the beast.)

Jan Allison November 13, 2017 at 6:48 PM I love the twist at the end James:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx James Inman November 14, 2017 at 2:45 AM Thanks Jan.

Frances Schiavina November 13, 2017 at 9:24 AM Congratulations on your win! James Inman November 14, 2017 at 2:45 AM Thank you Frances.

Sandra Haight November 13, 2017 at 8:36 AM A great rhyme with an unforeseen twist, James! Congrats on your win. Sandra James Inman November 14, 2017 at 2:45 AM Thanks Sandra, I watch the birds fishing on the lake where I work and the fish seem almost mezmorized by the Great Egrets as there necks sway back and forth until they are snapped up by the birds.

Viv Wigley November 13, 2017 at 6:24 AM Well done, James, beautifully descriptive with a snap of a twist. Thanks for entering the contest. Regards, Viv James Inman November 14, 2017 at 2:41 AM Thanks for hosting Viv, thought you would appreciate the irony.

Afzal Nusker November 13, 2017 at 1:03 AM Very well written, loaded with sweet words and great imagery too. Congratulations! James Inman November 13, 2017 at 1:28 AM Thanks Afzal.

Line Gauthier November 10, 2017 at 5:32 AM Great imagery - the added visuals of the water line (with wavelets!) are a very effective bonus. BRAVO ! James Inman November 10, 2017 at 6:10 AM Thank you, a little humor in this one.

Akkina Downing November 9, 2017 at 3:55 PM Didn't see that coming. But great great write... hugs :) James Inman November 9, 2017 at 5:30 PM A little twist Akkina, sorry it didn't turn out the way you expected.

Constance La France November 8, 2017 at 2:18 PM James, great write, so dreamy until that final bite! James Inman November 8, 2017 at 2:41 PM Sorry I haven't visited lately BW. I was thinking about you this morning. Thank you for the nice comment. I was thinking about the Great Egrets and Great Blue Herons I watch fishing along the canals at work and thought Viv might appreciate the irony.

Vijay Pandit November 8, 2017 at 1:43 PM Sure feels one sided--well written--best for a win James! James Inman November 8, 2017 at 2:37 PM Thank you Vijay.