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Lost In Dark Eyes

time to drink cold mountain snow water, or is it time to drink pure beauty (I dare a taste) time to profess love to village elder's daughter, it may if you're the one (the one awaited) will you lead me as lamb to the slaughter, willingly my neck, the finest cut eyes hold little forgiveness for my deeds, most days... a shirtless figure who removed the scar over my heart (silken your touch) you lay naked, exposed before a breath pulsed electric blue you flashed so sweet- hah, yes..(yet) you so lost in my dark eyes

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/4/2020 4:42:00 PM

A deeply touching and very moving write Richard. Linda

Quoth Theraven
Date: 10/5/2020 8:54:00 PM

Thank you for that Linda. The poem is for an old friend Majnun. My eyes are blue. -Richard

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/22/2020 2:18:00 PM

Very nice and sensual piece, well described.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 10/5/2020 8:50:00 PM

M.L., Thank you so much for that kindness. -Richard

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2020 3:20:00 PM

It truly still feels sensuous to me, all of it does. An arranged marriage COULD be a good thing, couldn't it?

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/7/2020 3:46:00 PM

Andrea, Sure..,only takes two bound in love. I know of one..a marriage without borders. I can't believe I missed John's terrific Acrostic dedication to such a special poet. Happy birthday to you.., Happy birthday to you..Happy birthday dear Andrea..! Happy birthday to you! -Richard

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2020 2:57:00 PM

This is sensuous and so metaphorical. I think jennifer's interpretation down here is spot on.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/4/2020 8:50:00 PM

Andrea, Thank you and how are you this fine Labor day week-end? What part is sensuous? What if I was to tell you the poem is about an arranged marriage? -Richard

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/4/2020 9:14:00 AM

'Lost in dark eyes' - (I dare a taste),if you're the one (the one awaited) - will you lead me as a lamb to the slaughter - (silken your touch) - exposed before a a breath pulsed (yet), you so lost in my dark eyes - powerful and mysterious write Richard - amazing where love can lead us! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/4/2020 8:41:00 PM

Hi Jennifer, Thank you for all of your comments. I read your poem 'THE CRY OF AN ANGEL' today. Puts things in proper perspective. Not fair mind you, but every little bit helps. The Days of Wine and Roses -Henry Mancini

Panagiota Romios

Date: 9/4/2020 7:21:00 AM

I liked best...silken your touch. It suggests so many possibilities Panagiota xx

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/4/2020 8:18:00 PM

Panagiota, Thank you...it certainly makes you wonder. "] "Dance like nobody's watching; love like you've never been hurt. Sing like nobody's listening; live like it's heaven on earth." -Mark Twain

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/4/2020 5:28:00 AM

Wonderful ruminations, Richard--a lovely write.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/4/2020 8:15:00 PM

Happy Friday Vijay, ruminations, I don't use the word as much as I should. noun plural noun: ruminations 1. a deep or considered thought about something. "philosophical ruminations about life and humanity" 2. the action of chewing the cud. "cows slow down their rumination" I choose the second definition. -Richard

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/4/2020 4:01:00 AM

- Beautifully written, Richard .... "is it time to drink pure beauty" ... love it :) - Wish you a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/4/2020 8:11:00 PM

Anne-Lise, Thank you, that was kind of you to say. Almost five years to the day...you wrote 'When we meet at Heaven's gate batting lashes close entering a doorway into a dream'. I wonder if you've changed much since then. -Richard

Sand Blown

Date: 9/3/2020 10:35:00 PM

'electric blue (lightning flashed)....you.... dark eyes (were wrapped in color)'....your write has a light..........stan sand

Quoth Theraven
Date: 9/4/2020 7:51:00 PM

Hello stan sand, Thanks for the comment..stolen days. This one, an 80's tune "Electric Blue" from 1987 Aussie synthpop band Icehouse and John Oates of H2O. -Richard