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February 9, 2018
 
~ Fifth Place ~
Premiere contest: No 1270
Sponsor: Brian Strand
 
~ Eighth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Your Favorite Poem Written In February
Sponsor: Laura Loo
 
~ Ninth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Loss Of An Innocent Mind
Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann
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Hibiscus rays of light herald the sun's stretch from slumber in a bloom of ravishing red passion- Oh! how I despise dawn's blushing optimism and lust for life! for I am too young to cry but too old not to a handful of heartbeats ago we crystal-gazed into evening's lustrous orb anticipating foretold fortunes of our future pinning dreams upon the darkling horizon with heartening baby’s breath stars featherlight the dandelion puff as zephyrs blew the seeds of our fantasies— free to fly the sighs of our summer days till breezes laid the pixie dust down our wishes taking root - flourishing like tow-headed weeds in our sunny field champagne flowed voluptuously through our veins we pulsed with ambrosial arousal and with every nectarous nip we lived as though we would celebrate in love f o r e v e r until the broken dawn-to-dark— when a cloud of angels cradled your harmonic harp against their white-rose-pillow hearts— their teardrops in ecstasies of grief and joy strummed your silvern strings in a glorious glissando that lifted your lustrous essence across the bridge to bliss— somewhere beyond me ..and behind the snowy veils of virtue I am anemic if not nothing now adulterated by loss of innocence dwindling in a dreamless state unoccupied but for the lurid loss that fills me - and my black skies storm with shrieking tears!

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Date: 1/5/2024 12:48:00 PM
This one would have been number one for me dear poet and I did comment on this one way back in 2018...So many poetic verses in this one.. Congratulations on your placement...
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Date: 1/9/2024 12:34:00 PM
Dear Silent One, your return visit and heartening words are truly appreciated. That you would have placed this poem as number one is uplifting and is definitely my "golden trophy" for this piece. Thank you for believing in my poetry.. you have been a wonderful poetic mentor, dear poet. Your kind congrats are appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 1/5/2024 2:20:00 AM
Wow dear susan! Im a fan of your poetry! This is so evocative and your descriptive wordplay is beyond impeccable! I just love how you paint imagery and how creative and clever your diction is, the way you phrase emotions and thoughts is unique and is definitely the kind that resonates with me i especially loved the lines “ featherlight the dandelion puff as zephyrs blew the seeds of our fantasies—“ how delicate and eloquent is that and the ending hits home for me! Definitely a fave for me: congrats
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Date: 1/9/2024 12:27:00 PM
Dear Empress, soulful poetess, I am truly honored and humbled to know you're a fan of my poetry as I hold your grand poetic artistry up in such high esteem! Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagination of this poem with me. Your lustrous presence adds a golden glow to my poem. The distinction of your fave and your kind congrats are held in my deepest appreciation, my dear talented friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 8/8/2018 10:56:00 AM
When I was a kid we had no garden but an employee had lots flower plants on his steps and I use to love going early in the morning to look at his flowers with light rays changing color in the dew and I started to steal his plants. Of course by afternoon my mom would return them. That alone made my day.
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Date: 8/8/2018 4:36:00 PM
I’m enchanted by your pleasant childhood reverie, Al, and delighted by the action your mother took, on your behalf. How wonderful that as a child you had a curious and artistic nature to notice the light rays changing color in the dew ~ that alone has made my day, my wonderful friend. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts.. ~Susan
Date: 4/2/2018 1:57:00 PM
Very beautiful, Susan; deep and provocative. This is why it is said, when one loses something, or change one's mind, the emptiness left needs to be replaced by something else endearing. Somethings cannot be replaced I know (another subject). Vacuums are always filled by negative energy. This is what is so dangerous about the way meditation is taught--especially the silence: one should always first surround one's self with spiritual white light. Great, passionate, sensual writing! I love it.
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Date: 4/26/2018 8:37:00 PM
I apologize, Joe, for the delay in replying to your beautiful comments. Yes, I agree, that when loss is experienced, the void needs to be filled with something loving, endearing and appreciative.. otherwise negativity, pessimism or cynicism will take root and grow and it can decay you from the inside out.. I've seen it happen and I've made a choice not to let it happen to me. Thank you for your insightful and profound thoughts, my friend.. Warmest wishes always ~Susan
Date: 3/12/2018 6:16:00 PM
I see you won twice with this one now. WAY to GO!!!
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Date: 3/13/2018 11:28:00 AM
It's always such a pleasure for me to see your lovely presence on my poetry page Andrea.. Your encouragement and heartwarming comments are cherished. Thank you! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/28/2018 2:48:00 AM
Sad, sso sad and beautifully written. Congratulations on your win in my contest. Kai
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Date: 2/28/2018 7:06:00 PM
Kai, thank you for the honor of my placement in your contest and for the inspiration your contest gave me to write this poem. It was a joy to participate and I appreciate your sponsorship. It pleases me to know you enjoyed my poem and I cherish your heartwarming comments.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/27/2018 4:04:00 PM
Susan, somehow I missed this poem before but reading it today blew me away! Such sadness and heartbreak so beautifully expressed through your emotional and touching imagery. Congratulations on both placements for this outstanding masterpiece. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/27/2018 4:31:00 PM
Sandra, your visit is such a delight and your lovely comments are a pleasure for me to read.. Thank you for your uplifting and encouraging sentiments. Your heartfelt words and congrats means the world to me and that you enjoyed my poem thrills me. You are an inspiration my friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 2/27/2018 11:41:00 AM
Back once again with congratulations on another winner, Susan! May the shrieking tears be ever transformed to tears of joy and gladness! Warm wishes, Gershon
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Date: 2/27/2018 4:25:00 PM
Oh Gershon, I just relish your comments! Yes, tears of joy and gladness are always wonderful and preferable for sure.. Thank you for your lovely comments and kindhearted congrats. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan
Date: 2/27/2018 8:26:00 AM
I agree with Line the last line is off the charts good, but I enjoyed every word, this is another masterpiece Susan, congrats on a fine placement!
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Date: 2/27/2018 4:18:00 PM
Your wonderful sentiments fill me with joy, John. Thank you for being a positive light of inspiration for me through your encouraging and uplifting comments. Your visits are always heartwarming and your kind congrats is greatly appreciated my friend. ~Susan
Date: 2/27/2018 8:12:00 AM
Wonderful poem, Susan. Your last line "and my black skies storm with shrieking tears!" is amazing. Congrats on a most deserving win.
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Date: 2/27/2018 4:13:00 PM
Line, it's such a pleasure to read your wonderful comments. Thank you for your lovely sentiments and kindhearted congrats.. ~Susan
Date: 2/27/2018 7:26:00 AM
Susan, this is such a beautiful masterpiece. Your writing is so incredible and such an inspiration. Congrats my friend. John
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Date: 2/27/2018 4:10:00 PM
John, your lovely comments fill me with joy. Thank you so much for your delightful presence on my poetry page, for your beautiful comments and kindhearted congrats. A BIG congratulations to you, my friend, on your top win! ~Susan
Date: 2/27/2018 5:53:00 AM
Sweet Susan..this was so amazing. Every line, every word entailed such emotion and greatness. I was so astounded with your poem, and actually all your poems! congrats and thank you :)-luloo
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Date: 2/27/2018 4:06:00 PM
Dear Luloo, thank you for the honor of my placement in your contest among the talented poets/poetesses also on the list. I am proud to be in such great company. It was a joy to participate in your contest and your sponsorship is appreciated. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and for your kind congrats.. ~Susan
Date: 2/25/2018 8:12:00 PM
This awesome piece floors me my friend. "" till the broken dawn-to-dark when angels cradled your harmonious harp against their hearts - their teardrops of ecstasy strumming your silvern strings in a glorious glissando that lifted your lustrous essence across the bridge to bliss somewhere beyond me and behind the snowy veils of virtue"" Magnificent!!!! A fav....
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Date: 2/25/2018 8:45:00 PM
Oh thank you Robert for your generously beautiful comments and for the Fav! Your visits are always such a pleasure and YOU, my friend, are always a delight. Thank you for making my day! I cherish your kind heart and your uplifting presence here on my page.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 2/23/2018 5:33:00 PM
I can see why so many are praising this piece. I am also impressed. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 2/23/2018 6:08:00 PM
Thank you for sharing your beautiful and uplifting comments with me. To know that you are impressed Richard is like beautiful music to my ears. I'm elated that you enjoyed my poem. Your kindness is truly appreciated. ~Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan
Date: 2/23/2018 9:46:00 AM
A great big round of applause and congratulations, my dear friend on your win! With this piece you continue to lead the way with your wonderful, refreshing talent! Best wishes and hugs. Pandita
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Date: 2/23/2018 12:21:00 PM
Oh my dear friend, you thrill me with your generously lovely words of praise. Thank you Pandita for your uplifting and encouraging comments, your precious thoughts and friendship inspire me to continue to reach higher and are deeply appreciated as always.. Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan
Date: 2/22/2018 5:42:00 PM
I"m visiting today because read you comment to Silent One's Tree poem. I was educated by your comment.I am too new to writing to say anything, except I am in awe of your style. Feel need million lesson before submit any more of mine. So glad to have met you! Whatever won, congrats. bbn
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Date: 2/23/2018 12:14:00 PM
Barbara, thank you for your heartfelt and kindhearted comments. I'm like you, I have much to learn as well. Every poem that you read or write is a stepping stone in developing your own artistry and experiencing the artistry of other poets. Please keep reading and writing, it's with practice and awareness that we grow into our poetry. Your poems, that I've read so far, are beautiful and enjoyable - have faith in yourself.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2018 10:58:00 PM
Susan, such a powerful write a well deserved win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 2/23/2018 8:38:00 AM
Thank you, Eve for your heartwarming comments. Your delightful visit and kind words are deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2018 1:42:00 PM
Susan, hats off to your winning entry. Hugs, Sonia
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Date: 2/21/2018 8:41:00 PM
Thank you so much Sonia for your delightful visit and your kindhearted congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2018 1:38:00 PM
Returning with congrats on your win, Susan.
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Date: 2/21/2018 8:42:00 PM
Thank you so much, Vijay for your warm congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2018 11:33:00 AM
Congratulations Susan for the nice win of this wonderful poem so rich in imagery and so moving ...
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Date: 2/21/2018 8:46:00 PM
That you found my poem to rich in imagery and moving, delights me so very much and is deeply appreciated, Probir. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and for your kindhearted congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2018 11:04:00 AM
So very well done Susan, congratulations...
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Date: 2/21/2018 11:28:00 AM
Thank you so much Charlie for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. Your visit is a delight my friend! ~Susan
Date: 2/21/2018 9:03:00 AM
Once again, original and moving images throughout this winner. I especially liked the last line...Wishing you only sunny, warm skies forever, my friend! :)Gershon
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Date: 2/21/2018 11:32:00 AM
Thank you for your precious thoughts my friend. Your heartwarming comments are deeply appreciated and I'm so happy you enjoyed my offering.. with warmest wishes may your skies be forever warm and sunny too! ~Susan
Date: 2/15/2018 8:03:00 PM
Such imagery, Susan - absolutely amazing and captivating, plus the emotion pulses in beats I relate to and feel as my very own. Its sadness dark-sparkles the pain of innocence lost so common to all who live long enough. Best of luck with this and all else. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 2/16/2018 6:09:00 PM
My dear sweet friend CayCay, your beautiful comments encourage and inspire me to continue to reach higher.. Thank you for sharing your deep and heartfelt thoughts that I treasure and hold with true appreciation in my heart. Warmest wishes and hugs to you always. ~Susan
Date: 2/13/2018 9:29:00 PM
Susan , the imagination takes us yet again on a journey of expression found in every word, every line, in every verse that goes to make up yet another of your masterpieces. I only have one question. Who is your Muse? Bravo Susan, take a bow, and this is a fave of mine....Maria xxx
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Date: 2/16/2018 6:03:00 PM
Maria, I am thrilled by your visit and delighted that you enjoyed my poem. Your beautiful comments are held in my deepest appreciation as I hold your friendship, your talent and your poetry in the highest regard. Thank you for your encouragement.. as for my muse.. that would be love and ironically, my lust for life lol! Warmest wishes dear friend. ~Susan
Date: 2/13/2018 5:43:00 PM
My GOODNES, Susan, this is one of the best ones yet that I have seen in this contest. you ROCKED it. I hope to see this way at the top of the winners' list!
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Date: 2/14/2018 4:08:00 PM
Andrea, your heartwarming comments are wonderful and encouraging. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem, let's hope the judge sees it the way you do :)) Your visit and kind words are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes! ~Susan
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