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Lilith poetry contest Sponsored by S1 05/25/04

And you didn’t make me I formed myself From the periodic table with a little help You added slurs and blackened my milk Turned me into a scapegoat and my flesh to filth And you never broke me I smashed up myself Unseen fractures healed wrong by themselves Broke the mold early was looking too good Patriarchally cast as the whore of love And you cannot destroy me I’ll do it by myself Sick of covering up what never turned out The unseen twists and labyrinth of lies I’ve no f*cking soul a doubt, or denial And you’ll never fix me It’s down to myself I look in the mirror pondering why else All this potential rotting away inside Necrotic failure unrepairable child And I cannot be forgiven I’ll find a way myself For being too perfect lacking self respect On freak show earth a man made planet falling to bits You pious can have it greatest story ever written ~ will not be penned with a kids mitten apples perhaps said she to Adam ~ my fruits were never forbidden a fig leaf rose one more fell ~ as the whore of man Lilith got bitten

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Di11y Da11y

Date: 6/12/2024 4:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement David, I was delighted to see your fabulous take amongst the winners :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/12/2024 11:52:00 PM

Thanks Dilly. Was delighted this one in particular was placed, makes my efforts all the more worthwhile, there’s a piece of Lilith in every woman, and I just wanted to recognise that I’m fully aware of their struggles throughout history, cheers David

Silent One

Date: 6/12/2024 1:04:00 PM

Deep take on this and so nice to see you do it in a different format, but also with your one liners at the end.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/12/2024 1:39:00 PM

Thanks very much S1, was a great theme for me to explore, and find some common ground with the fabled and also very real Liliths, cheers David

Candide Diderot

Date: 6/5/2024 3:57:00 PM

One of your better ones Kavanagh. Of course I adore ALL Liliths. They are terribly misrepresented, as was the original. Most Liliths harness great strength from their weaknesses. An excellent write Kavanagh, from the other gender's perspective.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/6/2024 2:50:00 AM

Aye! it would be one of those I’m pretty proud of Candide, yes written from the other gender’s perspective, but also with transparency on this guys views of the punishing patriarchal systems in place all over this world religious and otherwise, hey that link explains my suspicions, you’ll know what that means, cheers David

Candide Diderot
Date: 6/5/2024 3:58:00 PM

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_deconstructed_lilith_1185651

Paul Willason

Date: 5/28/2024 6:29:00 AM

A riveting poem David...nice to slip into such a challenging persona and hold up the mirror to catch the passing souls so accustomed to admiring their own image. Intelligent, witty and a thoroughly worthwhile read...replayed quite a few times.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/28/2024 8:48:00 AM

Good to hear from you Paul, yes indeed instead of studying their own damning reflection in the mirror, it’s easier to say it’s someone else’s fault it looks that way, cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/27/2024 2:27:00 AM

Quite a deep poem and very reflection. Best for a win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/27/2024 5:57:00 AM

Lilith given a bad reputation by man to deflect from his own methinks, cheers David

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/25/2024 4:26:00 PM

You did a fabulous job of being Lilith's voice. A creative way to approach the contest prompt. Your poem was engaging as you created Lilith as a 'Necrotic failure unrepairable child' Best wishes with the contest, Sara

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/26/2024 2:12:00 AM

Heya Sara, I always try to give man’s scapegoat a voice, in this case Lilith, imo they conjured her up to suit themselves, and cover up their own evils; was a great theme to let loose on my struggling muse, Thank you so much for commenting on this somewhat difficult post, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 5/25/2024 1:42:00 PM

Voicing Lillith, she is dark as night by her own doing like your poignant poetry specifies, and you were very kind to her, David this is a trophy winner, hopefully SO, will look over the *ucking. GL I love it, another fan!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/25/2024 2:12:00 PM

Heya Anaya, she is man’s creation in my mind, designed by him to be demonised for his own shortcomings, of course others will see her in a different light and that’s fine too, I honestly haven’t got a clue what S1 will make of it, oh he’s well big enough to see past the expletive, it just somehow seemed appropriate for that particular stanza, thanks so much for the positive feedback and kind comment, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 5/25/2024 10:29:00 AM

I never would have thought it but this is right up my street. Power of expression, taking on the theme but also mental strength relating to identity, judgement and expectations of society. Everything relevant is in here and the periodic table and other touches just add layers and layers of interest. You have a fascinating mind... Hang on, I'll stop talking before you call the police. I'm veering into #1 fan territory here haha :) a job well done - you aced it!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/25/2024 2:24:00 PM

Leave it to you Dilly Dally, sugar rush, now the comedown to reality lol!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/25/2024 2:02:00 PM

I'd eaten too much sugar Anaya - I think everyone is now safe haha :)

I Am Anaya
Date: 5/25/2024 1:36:00 PM

I love that, DD! David's #1 Fan! Yay to you both

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/25/2024 11:09:00 AM

Aw shucks I’m all embarrassed now, thanks for your supportive comment Dilly, I always try peer through the surface of myths, and the rationale behind them, seems to me man always needs scapegoats, and who better to pass judgement on than women, just because some men cannot control their own urges, it’s still a very real thing, and used as a form of oppression in certain parts of this world, I’m sure I’ll need a fly swatter to beat all my fans off with after this one haha! Cheers David