David Kavanagh Poet Free verse

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Lilith poetry contest Sponsored by S1 05/25/04

Lilith

And you didn’t make me 
I formed myself 
From the periodic table 
with a little help 
You added slurs and 
blackened my milk 
Turned me into a scapegoat 
and my flesh to filth

And you never broke me 
I smashed up myself 
Unseen fractures
healed wrong by themselves 
Broke the mold early 
was looking too good 
Patriarchally cast 
as the whore of love 

And you cannot destroy me 
I’ll do it by myself 
Sick of covering up
what never turned out 
The unseen twists
and labyrinth of lies
I’ve no f*cking soul
a doubt, or denial 

And you’ll never fix me 
It’s down to myself 
I look in the mirror 
pondering why else
All this potential 
rotting away inside 
Necrotic failure 
unrepairable child

And I cannot be forgiven 
I’ll find a way myself 
For being too perfect 
lacking self respect 
On freak show earth
a man made planet 
falling to bits 
You pious can have it 


greatest story ever written ~ will not be penned with a kids mitten 

apples perhaps said she to Adam ~ my fruits were never forbidden

a fig leaf rose one more fell ~ as the whore of man Lilith got bitten

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Silent One June 12, 2024 at 1:04 PM Deep take on this and so nice to see you do it in a different format, but also with your one liners at the end.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. David Kavanagh June 12, 2024 at 1:39 PM Thanks very much S1, was a great theme for me to explore, and find some common ground with the fabled and also very real Liliths, cheers David

Candide Diderot June 5, 2024 at 3:57 PM One of your better ones Kavanagh. Of course I adore ALL Liliths. They are terribly misrepresented, as was the original. Most Liliths harness great strength from their weaknesses. An excellent write Kavanagh, from the other gender's perspective. David Kavanagh June 6, 2024 at 2:50 AM Aye! it would be one of those I’m pretty proud of Candide, yes written from the other gender’s perspective, but also with transparency on this guys views of the punishing patriarchal systems in place all over this world religious and otherwise, hey that link explains my suspicions, you’ll know what that means, cheers David Candide Diderot June 5, 2024 at 3:58 PM https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_deconstructed_lilith_1185651

Paul Willason May 28, 2024 at 6:29 AM A riveting poem David...nice to slip into such a challenging persona and hold up the mirror to catch the passing souls so accustomed to admiring their own image. Intelligent, witty and a thoroughly worthwhile read...replayed quite a few times. David Kavanagh May 28, 2024 at 8:48 AM Good to hear from you Paul, yes indeed instead of studying their own damning reflection in the mirror, it’s easier to say it’s someone else’s fault it looks that way, cheers David

Victor Buhagiar May 27, 2024 at 2:27 AM Quite a deep poem and very reflection. Best for a win. David Kavanagh May 27, 2024 at 5:57 AM Lilith given a bad reputation by man to deflect from his own methinks, cheers David

I Am Anaya May 25, 2024 at 1:42 PM Voicing Lillith, she is dark as night by her own doing like your poignant poetry specifies, and you were very kind to her, David this is a trophy winner, hopefully SO, will look over the *ucking. GL I love it, another fan! David Kavanagh May 25, 2024 at 2:12 PM Heya Anaya, she is man’s creation in my mind, designed by him to be demonised for his own shortcomings, of course others will see her in a different light and that’s fine too, I honestly haven’t got a clue what S1 will make of it, oh he’s well big enough to see past the expletive, it just somehow seemed appropriate for that particular stanza, thanks so much for the positive feedback and kind comment, cheers David