Lilith

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Lilith poetry contest Sponsored by S1 05/25/04

And you didn’t make me I formed myself From the periodic table with a little help You added slurs and blackened my milk Turned me into a scapegoat and my flesh to filth And you never broke me I smashed up myself Unseen fractures healed wrong by themselves Broke the mold early was looking too good Patriarchally cast as the whore of love And you cannot destroy me I’ll do it by myself Sick of covering up what never turned out The unseen twists and labyrinth of lies I’ve no f*cking soul a doubt, or denial And you’ll never fix me It’s down to myself I look in the mirror pondering why else All this potential rotting away inside Necrotic failure unrepairable child And I cannot be forgiven I’ll find a way myself For being too perfect lacking self respect On freak show earth a man made planet falling to bits You pious can have it greatest story ever written ~ will not be penned with a kids mitten apples perhaps said she to Adam ~ my fruits were never forbidden a fig leaf rose one more fell ~ as the whore of man Lilith got bitten

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Silent One

Date: 6/12/2024 1:04:00 PM

Deep take on this and so nice to see you do it in a different format, but also with your one liners at the end.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/12/2024 1:39:00 PM

Thanks very much S1, was a great theme for me to explore, and find some common ground with the fabled and also very real Liliths, cheers David

Candide Diderot

Date: 6/5/2024 3:57:00 PM

One of your better ones Kavanagh. Of course I adore ALL Liliths. They are terribly misrepresented, as was the original. Most Liliths harness great strength from their weaknesses. An excellent write Kavanagh, from the other gender's perspective.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/6/2024 2:50:00 AM

Aye! it would be one of those I’m pretty proud of Candide, yes written from the other gender’s perspective, but also with transparency on this guys views of the punishing patriarchal systems in place all over this world religious and otherwise, hey that link explains my suspicions, you’ll know what that means, cheers David

Candide Diderot
Date: 6/5/2024 3:58:00 PM

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_deconstructed_lilith_1185651

Paul Willason

Date: 5/28/2024 6:29:00 AM

A riveting poem David...nice to slip into such a challenging persona and hold up the mirror to catch the passing souls so accustomed to admiring their own image. Intelligent, witty and a thoroughly worthwhile read...replayed quite a few times.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/28/2024 8:48:00 AM

Good to hear from you Paul, yes indeed instead of studying their own damning reflection in the mirror, it’s easier to say it’s someone else’s fault it looks that way, cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/27/2024 2:27:00 AM

Quite a deep poem and very reflection. Best for a win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/27/2024 5:57:00 AM

Lilith given a bad reputation by man to deflect from his own methinks, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 5/25/2024 1:42:00 PM

Voicing Lillith, she is dark as night by her own doing like your poignant poetry specifies, and you were very kind to her, David this is a trophy winner, hopefully SO, will look over the *ucking. GL I love it, another fan!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/25/2024 2:12:00 PM

Heya Anaya, she is man’s creation in my mind, designed by him to be demonised for his own shortcomings, of course others will see her in a different light and that’s fine too, I honestly haven’t got a clue what S1 will make of it, oh he’s well big enough to see past the expletive, it just somehow seemed appropriate for that particular stanza, thanks so much for the positive feedback and kind comment, cheers David