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Like a Butterfly

Like a butterfly caught up in a hurricane My love red seeps from black vein Where is the magic wand to change The devil's dead ditty Back to my pretty swan song Alone in my blue bed alone in my black head Loosened by despairing chains I hunger for love's food But where are you lover At work of course But I don't care to share You have spoiled me Given me wings and cause to dream Only leaving me to punch pink pillow While you punch the clock Leaving me to pen poetry in pursuit of pain Blooming like a venus fly trapper When lover so dapper Returns offering his vein Like a butterfly with brown eyes Caught up in a hurricane.

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Kelli White

Date: 10/17/2023 3:40:00 PM

I adore this poignant beautiful poem. Absolutely breathtaking, Kelli

Karen Jones
Date: 10/17/2023 3:57:00 PM

So kind of you to read and compliment Kelli. Thank you.

Christina Bowring

Date: 10/16/2023 1:57:00 AM

Such a beautifully expressed poem dear Karen. Very powerful and poignant too. So well written and descriptive. Love the title too.You write with real emotion, raw at times, that depicts real life and is refreshing. Poetry is such a wonderful, creative way to express yourself, like any art form and there is always dark and light (although hopefully more light) so continue to write what you feel as you do so beautifully. Hugs and smiles to you xx :):)

Karen Jones
Date: 10/16/2023 2:04:00 AM

Aw you made my day. I sometimes bore of my poetry as I tend to only write of my feelings or experience or lack of. Your words are kind and encouraging. Thank you. Love and light to you dear friend. Hugs

P.M. Richter

Date: 10/15/2023 9:40:00 PM

“Like a butterfly caught up in a hurricane. Given me wings and cause to dream”. Profoundly beautiful:)

Karen Jones
Date: 10/15/2023 11:13:00 PM

Thank you for reading and your kind comment.

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 10/13/2023 4:39:00 PM

So full of imagery and emotion my friend. Like a butterfly caught up in a hurricane is such a powerful line.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/13/2023 6:25:00 PM

Thanks Jerry

Tom Woody

Date: 10/13/2023 4:20:00 PM

Well, I wasn't expecting the devil in a butterfly poem but hey, it's unique. I always thought butterflies had black eyes. Who knew?

Karen Jones
Date: 10/13/2023 6:21:00 PM

Lol. Tom it's the neglect that feels so evil. And my butterfly has brown eyes like me. ;0)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/13/2023 9:37:00 AM

Splendid, Karen. A grand poem that is full of imagery and metaphors. Do you feel pain writing poetry? I feel pain when the muse leaves me. Blessings

Karen Jones
Date: 10/13/2023 11:35:00 AM

Often it is an emotional pain as relates to the feelings that inspired the poem. But I always pull up out of it for life is too short. You are a sensitive soul it is good and why you feel pain Victor at loss of muse. Hugs blessings

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/13/2023 6:01:00 AM

Wow, Karen, fantastic imagery! … Only leaving me to punch pink pillow While you punch the clock Leaving me to pen poetry in pursuit of pain

Karen Jones
Date: 10/13/2023 8:28:00 AM

Thanks Kim. This is my way of complaining. Lol Hugs and blessings

Karen Croft

Date: 10/13/2023 5:21:00 AM

Wonderful poem full of emotion!

Karen Jones
Date: 10/13/2023 8:27:00 AM

Thanks Karen!

Debjani Mitra

Date: 10/13/2023 5:12:00 AM

This is so unique style, Deep thought, a powerful poet using the metaphor of Butterfly in a very very different way. all can relate

Karen Jones
Date: 10/13/2023 8:27:00 AM

Wow. You words are kind and shocking as I never really feel I am a powerful poet. So glad you like the poem. When I wrote it I felt it may be too dark. But not all feelings are happy go lucky so there is my truth. Hugs and blessings.

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 10/12/2023 9:00:00 PM

Wow, incredible imagery, and pain. The punching of the pink pillow while your love punches the clock, I see in my mind a time clock, and he is always at work, and you missing him. There is a man who my kids know. He has a wife and three kids. He has two jobs and is only home a few hours to sleep, yet still fighting impoverishment. These are hard times. I feel so bad for him, his wife, and children. Your poem is incredibly beautiful, and sad. Hugs to you Karen.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 10:05:00 PM

Bj I feel sad for the man and his family you describe. I have been that man as a single mom working 3 jobs! 2 School bus and thrift store during week and Walmart weekends So I could pay bills and provide better life. It is at great cost but love pushes you through it. I do write my experiences a lot. But don't mean to share sadness. But it is there. Thanks for the hugs and reminiscing with me. :0)

The Situation

Date: 10/12/2023 12:01:00 PM

Exactly what I would expect a poet wife to write. But there are none except the one who Passed.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 12:07:00 PM

Hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/12/2023 5:57:00 AM

Karen, your poetry was replete with vivid imagery that took the reader into the heartbreaking situation you described. Your use of alliteration and metaphor was very effective in conveying your subject's anguish and sense of abandonment.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 6:59:00 AM

So kind of you to say so eloquently Sotto. Thanks for reading.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/12/2023 4:40:00 AM

Oh my, the emotions here certainly tugged at my heartstrings and I can feel the vulnerable depth, sigh. When love only proves to be feeding on our energy and when our souls are found, wandering in the raven landscapes of abandonment, being ghosted by the ones we love the most..It really takes a lot of courage to rise up from that and especially the feeling is very well described by "like a butterfly caught up in a hurricane".I love the colourful wordplay here so much and the lines flow very well

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 4:58:00 AM

Hiya you are so encouraging with a big heart. Thanks for sharing it. Hugs

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/12/2023 4:14:00 AM

an emotional and powerful write, Karen. Your alliterations and imagery spoke volumes about the pain and abandoment. I love the way your beginning and ending lines 'framed' your words. Magnificent and have a pleasant day writing words. :-) smiles, Sara

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 4:59:00 AM

Thanks Sara. Hugs and blessings for your writing day!

Ink Empress

Date: 10/12/2023 1:56:00 AM

How beautifully you’ve expressed! I love your use of colors here and how you’ve written this poem in such a creative manner. Especially “ you have spoiled me given me wings” ahh you deserve all the love! “ Leaving me to pen poetry in pursuit of pain” seamless alliterations! Very well crafted and delivered! Sending you light always. Thank you for supporting me and my poems.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 2:52:00 AM

I am sorry you went through that. Omg your poems are NEVER like that. I believe karma will take care of the true culprit! Until then beautiful soul continue to bless us with your pen. Hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 10/12/2023 2:39:00 AM

Yes its hard when apps like instagram have no way to be in contact with an administrative human. And what i went through is because of false reports for sexual poems and as you can see my poems are nothing close to that. I have a difficult time reading even sexual content haha. But the real ones who are guilty are still lurking and doing what they are doing posting sexual content. Unfortunate. Thank you for your kindness

Karen Jones
Date: 10/12/2023 2:07:00 AM

Thank you dear. I am blessed by your work and was unaware of the Instagram dilemma until reading the potd! We are behind you and your courageous pen has already won the battle. Screw Instagram! Hugs