Life As a Whole

begins with a whine life moves on with joys and woes ends with a whimper

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Panagiota Romios

Date: 2/11/2022 10:40:00 AM

I love this! Clear to the point! Panagiota

Anil Deo

Date: 2/10/2022 3:44:00 AM

I began with a howl ... Doctor slapped me too hard ( child abuse, day 1. Ok, kidding. Please no lawsuits)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/9/2022 12:04:00 PM

Well done! So true, in so many cases, Valsa. :) gw

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/9/2022 10:33:00 AM

The Bible says life begins when the breath of life is inhaled and usually ends with a last gasp; it not, wind is expelled after death, but your version is more acceptable! Aloha!

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/9/2022 5:39:00 AM

Great Senryu, Valsa, also every line portrays a vivid depiction of ordinary life. Your message was eloquently expressed!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/9/2022 4:42:00 AM

Each line an expressive image on life. So succinctly delivered!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 2/9/2022 4:33:00 AM

Hello Valsa - How very true your words and thoughts because this is the circle of life. You state your message with elegance. Thank you for sharing. May this day find you well. Blessings.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/9/2022 2:00:00 AM

Well I hope I will be more courageous when my time comes.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/9/2022 1:00:00 AM

So true Valsa. We cry at birth most times and we often cry at death. A very creative Senryu Valsa. Blessings xxoo