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Liar

When we got wed both of us said, it was until our dying day I thought we were happy but you got snappy, before you went away on a business trip with that blonde drip, you said her name was Kay It wasn’t right and with hindsight, I should have begged you to stay You were to go abroad, and work could afford to pay for meals and booze But when I look back, suits I helped you pack were more apt for a cruise You said that you’d booked into a large hotel, not a motel like we’d use It was just for one week, I guess I was too weak to ask you to refuse You promised to call me every day just to say that you loved me No calls came through and my fears grew, I ask for you in suite 23 They said I was mistaken;’ Mr and Mrs Draken’ were in suite Hawaii! I started crying knowing you’d been lying I’d proof of your infidelity You were having an affair with that old mare, I never found out why I was your loving wife it should have been for life, of that fact you can’t deny Now I really miss your tender kiss, but our wedding vows you did defy Sadly now you prefer to live with her, I’m so bereft I want to die In Rhymes Sublime Poetry Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 11/01/20
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Barry-Nishanian Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 4:47 PM
If this is true and about you, I am so sorry. Your pain turned into a win. congrats
Goldsmith Avatar
November 22, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Congratulations on your win. A "Wonderful story/write. So sad this happens. I love your write and your sign. Enjoy your win and day writing away. Hugs...................
Dietrich Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 5:55 PM
Great rhyming, Jan. Love how this contest brought so many different stories out of people. Congrats, my friend.
Allison Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:10 AM
thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
Proxenos Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 11:12 AM
Jan congrats my friend, I enjoyed your poem from the first time I read it, unfortunately this happens all too often in life. well penned. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Allison Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:09 AM
thanks Jennifer:-) hugs Jan xx
Kauffman Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 9:33 AM
Sending you congratulations and kudos on your win Jan. You really wove your rhymes together so effectively into this very sad story of betrayal. hugs my friend....
Allison Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:09 AM
thanks Sam:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 8:57 AM
A heartbreaking story Jan, Congrats on your win..
Allison Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:04 AM
thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Fowler Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 8:10 AM
I love how you fashioned this Jan. A tale too often told. :) Congratulations on the win! Linda
Allison Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:04 AM
thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx
Proxenos Avatar
November 3, 2020 at 9:31 AM
Excellent poetry Jan, I love the fact that you write of what happens daily to women. About 40 years ago in Greece, women rebelled and found lovers just as the men had been doing for years. Not all of them thank God, but a great majority. I have a wonderful husband and we got married late in life (both for the 2nd time) He is Cypriot and the kindest man on planet earth. Love your poem, Hugs and love, Jennifer.
Allison Avatar
November 4, 2020 at 3:49 AM
Thanks my friend:-) hugs Jan xx
Proxenos Avatar
November 3, 2020 at 10:26 AM
I said in one of my comments recently that we have a lot in common Jan. Hugs, Jennifer
Allison Avatar
November 3, 2020 at 10:11 AM
so glad you found true happiness second time around, we are both lucky with our husbands Jennifer, sadly other's are not so fortunate,, of course women can be unfaithful too but i decided to do the poem from a woman's point of view:-) hugs jan xx
Krutsinger Avatar
November 3, 2020 at 4:30 AM
The utilization of the required words worked out brilliantly!
Allison Avatar
November 3, 2020 at 10:09 AM
Thanks Caren:-) hugs jan xx
Leffanta Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 12:40 PM
I love seeing how you stretch and grow everyday! Well done, Jan! Aloha! Rico
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 1:27 PM
aww thanks Rico i do surprise folk with the odd serious poem:-) hugs jan xx
Bauer Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 10:30 AM
well done, jan! your internal rhyme is excellent! best of luck in the contest...
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 11:31 AM
Thanks Ilene:-) i do enjoy writing rhyme:-) hugs jan xx
Roper Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 9:19 AM
Deep and mournful write, Jan, you did a perfect job for Joseph contest. Good luck. Hugs Eve..... PS I am doing fine
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 11:30 AM
great to hear you are doing well:-) hugs jan xx
Mcintosh Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 4:19 AM
Love this, Jan. It's perfect for the contest and you never loose your touch with that amazing pen. God bless you
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 11:30 AM
thanks Regina it was nice to go out of my comfort zone for this contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Buhagiar Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 11:23 PM
Well writ poem about a subject that is too common now-a-days. Best for a win. ~~
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 9:07 AM
thanks Victor:-) hugs jan xx
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 8:49 PM
One can just feel the seething anger growing in this narrative, Jan. The internal and end rhymes work so well to keep the reader drawn in. So well done, I see a win in your future. Hugs ~ John
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2020 at 9:07 AM
thanks John:-) hugs jan xx
Ranaweera  Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 4:33 PM
A well-structured tragic tale, in which words grieve!! A great write, Jan!!
Allison Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 4:38 PM
thanks Newton:-) hugs Jan xx
Mchattie Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 3:33 PM
Time heals all. I know this is a hollow statement now but it worked for me. Stay close to family and friends. Stay well my friend.
Allison Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 3:51 PM
Its pure fiction for me but sad reality for others, thanks for your comment David:-) hugs Jan xx
Cunningham Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 2:20 PM
They always get found out in the end Jan. They play with fire they're going to get burnt. Good luck in the contest Tom
Allison Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 3:49 PM
thanks Tom:-) hugs jan xx
Y. Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 1:42 PM
WoW! Jan, You did this well. The story is so believable and relatable. I would my significant other to just tell me the truth. Will it hurt? But to live a lie is much worse. Nice flow content and rhymes. Excellent. Best wishes in the contest . Enjoy the rest of your day:-) Alexis
Allison Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 1:45 PM
Thanks Alexis it was good to go out of my comfort zone for the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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