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Written for Charles Messina's Sonnet Ku Ku poetry contest.

To write a sonnet and use verses from it to create a haiku and monoku.

This is an English Sonnet with 10 syllables per line.

Verses used for the two kus' are highlighted in bold.

From the moment I heard about your myth, I searched for the legend of your soft lips. I wandered like a bewildered wordsmith, confused if such elegance did exist. I became a pilgrim of devotion, roaming paths to oceans for just one glimpse. Struggling to express this rare emotion, I kept hope you would end my unloved jinx. Upon a balcony facing the shore, I saw a celestial sight of patience. Before I could find the way to your door, I became lost in a maze of silence. Timid tongue was stubborn with resistance, as you disappeared into the distance. bewildered wordsmith express this rare emotion end my unloved jinx a celestial sight of patience - legend of your soft lips did exist

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Sotto Poet

Date: 1/2/2024 2:26:00 PM

Silent One, your creation truly is breathtaking. The way you have crafted this sonnet is simply exquisite, evoking a sense of romance and beauty. The inclusion of the Haiku and Monoku at the end seamlessly enhances its overall magnificence. Congratulations on your win

Charles Messina

Date: 1/2/2024 8:52:00 AM

You did this really well, Silent One. Somewhere out there those soft lips await the bewildered. "Patience proves that soft lips DO still exist. Congratulations on your top win! Happy New Year, my friend. Charlie

Tonye George

Date: 12/4/2023 10:34:00 AM

Unloved jinx.... ????????

Tonye George
Date: 12/4/2023 10:34:00 AM

I love it.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/3/2023 8:54:00 AM

Stunningly beautiful and brilliant, Silent One. A masterpiece in such a difficult form (forms) of poetry, my friend. An excellent entry for the contest, a winner IMHO. A FAV for my list. Thank you for sharing from your heart, with your gift of poetry. Have a great week! Bill

Marcheleo Marcheleo

Date: 12/2/2023 8:10:00 AM

Beautifully Written....well done!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/1/2023 7:52:00 PM

A more unconventional sonnet but it's very cool how you came up with the ku and monoku. I love the idea of someone with legendary lips!

Silent One
Date: 12/2/2023 2:32:00 AM

How is it unconventional? It is and English sonnet in aabb and 10 syllables per line...

Christina Bowring

Date: 12/1/2023 3:38:00 PM

Gloriously composed and so romantic dear SO. Your skills and talent are boundless. I wouldn’t even know how to attempt this but with your golden pen, everything flows like a golden river! Sheer brilliance as always! You are such a captivating poet. Good luck in the contest. Blessings for a great weekend ahead. :):)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/1/2023 2:14:00 PM

Creative way to go with this contest entry. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. I guess those lips would slow or stop any wordsmith. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 12/1/2023 7:43:00 AM

Excellent poems!

Tom Woody

Date: 12/1/2023 7:32:00 AM

Ugh! I hate unloved jinxes. Well, I can't argue for the allure of lush lips. Interesting three in one form. Hope your weekend is awesome

Eli Arendel

Date: 12/1/2023 7:09:00 AM

So much emotion.. this is very heartfelt, silent one! amazing poem :>

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/1/2023 7:01:00 AM

Oh my, this is such a heartfelt and emotive poem! You've very creative imageries here along with the descriptions of a love that is like a whimsical mystery and unveils myriad shades. When one is truly fascinated & in bewilderment of the thought of his/her beloved being a an elegant zephyr.. But in the end, all the magick & mystique proves to be true.. "I became a pilgrim of devotion,roaming paths to oceans for just one glimpse" And he finds that glimpse! This poem is truly so beautiful to read

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/1/2023 5:27:00 AM

I wandered like a bewildered wordsmith, confused if such elegance did exist--Well delivered, SO--a difficult to execute contest theme.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/1/2023 4:56:00 AM

oh, Silent One, this is a breathtaking and beautifully constructed, romantic sonnet. The Haiku and Monoku at the end are perfect additions. You wow me with your majestic poetic skills. The words 'timid tongue' said so much. How often I've done that in the past. And 'unloved jinx' was priceless and well played. Have a great day. best wishes with the contest! Sara

Ink Empress

Date: 12/1/2023 3:10:00 AM

Wow you did this half asleep i suppose? Because well its easy for you, you breathe poetry. What a gorgeous romantic sonnet and your haiku and monoku flows so well with the sonnet. I am in absolute awe of this creative take on the contest.its like a beautiful romantic dream, as i read the ending. I love the balcony stanza how serene is one facing the seashore. Hah! Unloved jinx is a clever pair of words. Fave!best of luck