Victor Buhagiar Poet Free verse

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Lament

Thrice I attempted to express my feelings,
Thrice I failed miserably.
A fog covered every part of my soul.
A storm darkened my brain,
But no lightning lit my thoughts.
All that was sweet, is dead.
And I am dying too,
Slowly but surely dying,
Slowly, till with the finality
Of an auctioneer’s blow
Death’s axe shall fall
Like a yellow karate blow
Then shall I be cut in twain: 
But not yet, alas not yet, 
My death but lingers, 
Now I only wane.
Oh, curse the world.
Has the time come
When I must close my red-rimmed eyes
And give up my ebony soul
To the chaos and darkness below?

14 September 2021

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Word Chosen No 2
''L'' Contest New or Old Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Bj Legros Kelley October 2, 2021 at 11:06 AM I've told my husband about your exquisite poems, so stirring and so deep. I read him your poem 'Marguerite', and it brought tears to both of our eyes. Your poetry, as with this one is heart stirring and almost haunting.

Constance La France September 22, 2021 at 9:47 AM Victor, congratulations on your win in my L contest with your beautifully penned poem, excellent writing ~ peace and tranquility _Constance

Sam Kauffman September 21, 2021 at 11:01 AM Very powerful Victor - a picture of the grieving soul powerfully penned. Congratulations for your win. Blessings for you!

Paula Goldsmith September 18, 2021 at 10:03 AM WOW!!! Congratulations on your win. What a creative/beautiful yet sad story/write. Love your line "Has the time come" It is coming for all of us. Hope heaven will be our new home. Have a blessed day/weekend........................

Alexis Y. September 17, 2021 at 7:05 AM Hi Victor, You've penned such a sad and well-written entry for the contest. Congratulations on a well-deserved win. Have a great day and weekend, my friend-Alexis

Eve Roper September 16, 2021 at 8:59 PM deep heartbreaking with-in the soul , beautiful write

Mike Bayles September 16, 2021 at 2:33 PM Victor, this is a good, haunting poem.

Marilene Evans September 16, 2021 at 11:08 AM Ohh.... such a deep hearted self reflection.... exquisite!

Sara Kendrick September 16, 2021 at 8:40 AM Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. I could feel the pain described in the lines penned. Thank you for your kind comment on my page. Sara

Kim Rodrigues September 15, 2021 at 6:13 PM Pondering each line!

Beryl Edmonds September 15, 2021 at 5:06 PM A Lament from your heart Victor, don’t give up your ebony soul, your loved one will be waiting patiently however long it takes for the day to come when you both share a heavenly reunion. God bless, Belle

Evelyn Judy Buehler September 15, 2021 at 11:39 AM Victor, your sad tale makes an impressive contest entry, as it is masterfully written. Hope your day is a nice one. Hugs.

Anne-Lise Andresen September 15, 2021 at 11:06 AM - There is so much sadness in this poem ... we have to live until we die - Luck in the contest, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anitha Jayasankar September 15, 2021 at 10:08 AM Oh a poem well expressing laments in life... Well penned dear Victor... God bless.. ~ Ani

Vijay Pandit September 15, 2021 at 6:08 AM Truly a passionate expression of laments, Victor. Many are on this journey--and you speak for them! A sure win!

Sotto Poet September 15, 2021 at 4:50 AM Aside from that, this sad poem was beautifully written, but it really touched me deeply; just the thought of waking up one day and not having read your poetry as the first thing in the morning bothers me. I hope everything is going well for you. maintain your fortitude

Delice Arleen Skelly September 15, 2021 at 1:33 AM "My death but lingers, Now I only wane"..... so true Victor...Delice

Tom Cunningham September 15, 2021 at 1:04 AM It hits us all sometimes to realise that we won't be around for ever. Thought provoking words Victor. Tom

Unseeking Seeker September 15, 2021 at 12:57 AM Well known Snoopy wisdom dialogue ~ one day we will die ~ true but on other days we will be alive!

Joanna Daniel September 15, 2021 at 12:48 AM A dark poem, Victor, a true poet's lament.. hope all is well with you:)

Harry Horsman September 14, 2021 at 11:11 PM I sincerely hope not, Victor, You are the sun rise to so many of us here. Stay safe my friend, Harry