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Thrice I attempted to express my feelings, Thrice I failed miserably. A fog covered every part of my soul. A storm darkened my brain, But no lightning lit my thoughts. All that was sweet, is dead. And I am dying too, Slowly but surely dying, Slowly, till with the finality Of an auctioneer’s blow Death’s axe shall fall Like a yellow karate blow Then shall I be cut in twain: But not yet, alas not yet, My death but lingers, Now I only wane. Oh, curse the world. Has the time come When I must close my red-rimmed eyes And give up my ebony soul To the chaos and darkness below? 14 September 2021 Placed 1 Word Chosen No 2 ''L'' Contest New or Old Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 10/2/2021 11:06:00 AM
I've told my husband about your exquisite poems, so stirring and so deep. I read him your poem 'Marguerite', and it brought tears to both of our eyes. Your poetry, as with this one is heart stirring and almost haunting.
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Date: 9/22/2021 9:47:00 AM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my L contest with your beautifully penned poem, excellent writing ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
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Date: 9/21/2021 11:01:00 AM
Very powerful Victor - a picture of the grieving soul powerfully penned. Congratulations for your win. Blessings for you!
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Date: 9/18/2021 10:03:00 AM
WOW!!! Congratulations on your win. What a creative/beautiful yet sad story/write. Love your line "Has the time come" It is coming for all of us. Hope heaven will be our new home. Have a blessed day/weekend........................
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Date: 9/17/2021 7:05:00 AM
Hi Victor, You've penned such a sad and well-written entry for the contest. Congratulations on a well-deserved win. Have a great day and weekend, my friend-Alexis
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Date: 9/16/2021 8:59:00 PM
deep heartbreaking with-in the soul , beautiful write
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Date: 9/16/2021 2:33:00 PM
Victor, this is a good, haunting poem.
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Date: 9/16/2021 11:08:00 AM
Ohh.... such a deep hearted self reflection.... exquisite!
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Date: 9/16/2021 8:40:00 AM
Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. I could feel the pain described in the lines penned. Thank you for your kind comment on my page. Sara
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Date: 9/15/2021 6:13:00 PM
Pondering each line!
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Date: 9/15/2021 5:06:00 PM
A Lament from your heart Victor, don’t give up your ebony soul, your loved one will be waiting patiently however long it takes for the day to come when you both share a heavenly reunion. God bless, Belle
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Date: 9/15/2021 11:39:00 AM
Victor, your sad tale makes an impressive contest entry, as it is masterfully written. Hope your day is a nice one. Hugs.
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Date: 9/15/2021 11:06:00 AM
- There is so much sadness in this poem ... we have to live until we die - Luck in the contest, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/15/2021 10:08:00 AM
Oh a poem well expressing laments in life... Well penned dear Victor... God bless.. ~ Ani
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Date: 9/15/2021 6:08:00 AM
Truly a passionate expression of laments, Victor. Many are on this journey--and you speak for them! A sure win!
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Date: 9/15/2021 4:50:00 AM
Aside from that, this sad poem was beautifully written, but it really touched me deeply; just the thought of waking up one day and not having read your poetry as the first thing in the morning bothers me. I hope everything is going well for you. maintain your fortitude
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Date: 9/15/2021 1:33:00 AM
"My death but lingers, Now I only wane"..... so true Victor...Delice
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Date: 9/15/2021 1:04:00 AM
It hits us all sometimes to realise that we won't be around for ever. Thought provoking words Victor. Tom
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Date: 9/15/2021 12:57:00 AM
Well known Snoopy wisdom dialogue ~ one day we will die ~ true but on other days we will be alive!
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Date: 9/15/2021 12:48:00 AM
A dark poem, Victor, a true poet's lament.. hope all is well with you:)
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Date: 9/14/2021 11:11:00 PM
I sincerely hope not, Victor, You are the sun rise to so many of us here. Stay safe my friend, Harry
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