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Journey To Here

While everything’s still out of synch, A long flight gives one time to think. To take a step back from the brink, Commit the journey’s thoughts to ink. To muse a little more... A final skip across the pond, Returning from the great beyond. The distance makes the heart grow fond; I’d gladly upgrade for the wand That whisks me to my door. And though I’d make the trip again, Seems like forever since I’ve been In Lacey’s Spring, right ‘round the bend With Frances and my daughter Gwen, The grandkids I adore. I think I’ll stay at home a while, Embrace the gravel with a smile, Take Missy for a wooded mile, Find tasks as joys and not as trials, Let God show what’s in store. You cannot go, ‘cuz you’re still here; You cannot leave what you hold dear, And if at first, that seems unclear, When it resolves, then you’ve come near To wisdom at its core. ----------
Third Place Winner for the "Form J - Just Write Me a New Poem" Poetry Contest sponsored by Constance La France written 03/91/2022
I classified this as a tail-rhyme, since it is aaaaf, bbbbf, ccccf, ddddf, eeeef. It is also a quintain, but since the tail is a shorter meter, it seemed be better characterized by that description.

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Date: 4/10/2022 4:58:00 PM
Belated congrats on the great win too.
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Date: 4/10/2022 4:57:00 PM
Oh this one I really really like!! And it's very consistent rhyming pattern. I take it the stanza could be either aab/ aaab/ oR aaaab for first one. Hope you will comment to me if I got that wrong!
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 4/10/2022 5:14:00 PM
No, that's correct - you're on it :-)
Date: 3/26/2022 6:58:00 PM
Jeff, congratulations on your win in my Just Write Me A Poem contest, wonderful ~Constance
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Date: 3/25/2022 10:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful story/write. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away.......................
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Date: 3/24/2022 10:07:00 PM
"Commit the journey’s thoughts to ink" - Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/19/2022 7:45:00 PM
This is complicated, intricate, and so well done, Jeff. I don't think I've ever tried this.
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/19/2022 7:55:00 PM
Thanks, Milt, the tail rhyme is kind of fun to work with. I’ve used it on a few others, including Son of Amittai, but those stanzas just had 3 lines.
Date: 3/19/2022 7:29:00 PM
This is so pretty - especially this part "I think I’ll stay at home a while, Embrace the gravel with a smile, Take Missy for a wooded mile, Find tasks as joys and not as trials, Let God show what’s in store."
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/19/2022 7:34:00 PM
Thank you, Caren.