Journey

"Death is like an inevitable leap into the unknown. But we are sure to land in a state eternal either to be blessed or cursed" By poet

With the suddenness of a locomotive
that has come to an abrupt halt,
he fell motionless and in a coffin lay.

 like –

all mystery sealed in a jar.
all agony compressed,
in a tremulous whimper.
all charms shut in an amulet.

amid,

the scent of burning incense,
frozen silence,
heaving hearts
and
silent prayers.

the chariot wheeled him along
in his last journey
through the mazy paths,
stretching, stretching endless
to a world,
beyond all galaxies.
to the Elysian Fields-
to a time, immeasurable
to abiding infinity,
to inconceivable eternity!!

March. 7. 2023
Re entered for Brian's Contest

~ Placed First~

Writing Challenge ‘J’ Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France

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Date: 4/3/2023 4:01:00 PM
Valsa, excellent writing and thank you for sharing your poem in my Writing Challenge congratulations !
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Date: 4/3/2023 8:23:00 PM
Thanks a lot dear Constance for the win you granted and the opportunity given
Date: 3/16/2023 10:45:00 AM
Amazing journey dear Valsa. Your have masterfully entwined the physical elements of a funeral and the spiritual elements of a pilgrim's quest now complete. Wonderfully crafted dear friend. I stand in awe. Congratulations on your win. Sending you blessings of joy!
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Date: 3/14/2023 5:35:00 AM
Lovely and so well-penned poem, Valsa. Congratulations on your contest win.
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Date: 3/9/2023 7:40:00 PM
Valsa, your metaphorical writing does a wonderful job of capturing the melancholy of the final voyage. Congratulations on your top contest win, dear friend.
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Date: 3/9/2023 1:22:00 PM
Great journey Valsa, with a perfect ending. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 3/9/2023 10:18:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win, Valsa ... totally different from my own ... but the same theme ... a journey that does not have a conclusion ... lovely written - hugs
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Date: 3/8/2023 8:32:00 AM
Sadness of ultimate journey--you described well in this metaphoric write, Valsa.
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Date: 3/8/2023 6:01:00 AM
Praise be to the God and Father of our Lord Jesus Christ! In his great mercy he has given us new birth into a living hope through the resurrection of Jesus Christ from the dead, and into an inheritance that can never perish, spoil or fade. This inheritance is kept in heaven for you, 1 Peter 1:3?-?4 NIV, once we receive new birth we have put old self in grave,to receive a deposit unto eternal life, this body will wear out are for many sudden death, cast out to the one they served, great poem
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Date: 3/8/2023 2:04:00 AM
No one escapes death. It's what we have done at that time that counts.
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Date: 3/7/2023 4:53:00 PM
I guess we think only of our life being a journey. Death is equally a journey, into the unknown. A beautiful Poem Valsa. I didn't think when I started reading that I would enjoy a poem about death. When one thinks about it, death must be a very exciting journey, as your lovely poem depicts. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it Thank you Valsa. Warm wishes Wendy.
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Date: 3/7/2023 11:19:00 AM
A wonderful write/quote. Have a blessed day...............
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Date: 3/7/2023 11:09:00 AM
Wow! Loved this!
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Date: 3/7/2023 8:37:00 AM
Love the reference to "Elysian fields" Valsa. "inconceivale eternity" Some folks need to let that sink in. Good luck!
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