Jars

We took mason jars and poked small holes in their lids; then went out into those long hot summer nights as childhood flickered around us. We couldn’t hold youth any more than we could keep caught fireflies alive, and our once bright lights are now dimming in the jar of life. Written 1/17/12

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Kash Poet

Date: 2/11/2012 7:39:00 PM

Automatically----has 6 syllables but you have put it in the 5th line.....check your latest etheree---When soup crashed.

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 2/9/2012 7:31:00 AM

Congrats on your win in my contest! this is a FAV!

Robert Johnson

Date: 1/31/2012 4:00:00 PM

They preserve us as long as they CAN.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 1/30/2012 3:18:00 AM

Belated Congratulations Andrea x

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/30/2012 2:21:00 AM

this glows, andie... cheers to you for a grand award!!.. i wonder if we could still make those jars..:) huggs!

Gwendolen Song

Date: 1/29/2012 4:21:00 PM

I just emailed you, Andrea. I read this one on my lunch break at work but can't respond on my device..this won bc of its strong and clever analogy to life--I am sure of it! This is just another example of why you are such a great poetess..you can bring it all together on just about any topic...A bouquet of roses for this extra special win! Bravo Bravo! Gwendolen

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/29/2012 3:40:00 PM

a sad write Andie! Congrad's Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/29/2012 10:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Susan's "JARS" contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Dinda Minardi

Date: 1/29/2012 9:27:00 AM

Wow, this is a very interesting topic on jar, Andrea. Jar of life. Thanx for your sweet comment. Congraaattsss :)

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 1/29/2012 4:31:00 AM

Your write invokes such sweet memories....congrats on your win : )

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/28/2012 11:59:00 PM

The march of time is described well in this winning poem. Congratulations.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 1/28/2012 11:19:00 PM

Oh yes. I thought this would be up there in the winer's circle. Congratulations once again Andrea. Love, Joyce

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 1/28/2012 7:43:00 PM

Congrats on the win, Chum! This one is so sad :-( But then it's all about the range isn't it? Poetry, I mean. The highs, lows, Ups, downs, births, deaths... Just to let you know. Ain't nothin' dim about you! Hugs, Cyndi

Diana-Marie Bombardieri

Date: 1/28/2012 7:24:00 PM

Congrats Andrea on your win!! I used to catch catterpillars in hopes of one turning into a butterfly - I got a lot of moths!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/28/2012 1:39:00 PM

Congrats!! Great poem! Your light is certainly NOT dimmimg. Blessings, Rhonda

Bob Quigley

Date: 1/28/2012 12:35:00 PM

I used to like to catch grasshoppers myself. Would see who could catch the most with their hands and put them in their jar. Congratulations Andrea. Well done.