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It Matters Not

It hovers here, a moon opaque, obscuring mountain trails I take. No other living things appear. A moon opaque. . . It hovers here. I follow on along a ledge; below a swirling river’s edge. In front of me, the canyon’s yawn. Along a ledge, I follow on. I see no hue when fog congeals. Oh, doom of one who no more feels! The moon has fled, as so have you. When fog congeals, I see no hue. Now all is dim; it matters not. My dear one’s heart I have not got. No use in living without him. It matters not. Now all is dim. At peace I’ll be if I should fall to murky water from this wall. Oh, yawning canyon, swallow me. If I should fall, at peace I’ll be. Now entered in Anthony Slausin's Opaque Poetry Contest Swap Quatrain Form with iambic tetrameter. In this form, created by Lorraine M. Kanter, each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the first line is reversed in the fourth line. Rhyming pattern: aabb, ccdd and so on

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Date: 4/29/2020 7:00:00 AM
One of your darker writes. I'm so glad you never fell into that yawning canyon, haha! Belated congrats on the trophy it garnered. This is one of the few from Sistine I have not visited yet. You used the swap quatrain to powerful effect. Brilliant writing, Andrea.
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Date: 2/25/2020 6:28:00 PM
Hello Andrea Dietrick, so very romantic. I felt the love flow in this poem. Have a nice evening my friend. Hugs Darlene
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Date: 12/9/2019 8:46:00 AM
The amazing form I haven't seen before. The pen is off the charts also: another masterpiece of style. Twilight shades and hues are pleasing to the eye. Pls, accept my belated congratulations.
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Date: 12/6/2019 11:56:00 AM
'Andrea, Congratulations on you win! Extremely well done. The feeling is captivating. David'
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Date: 12/2/2019 3:32:00 PM
12/2/19 Congratulations on your win, Andrea. You mastered a difficult poetic form with such graceful images I could feel walking that ledge with you.
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Date: 11/29/2019 11:32:00 PM
Andrea, I like your poem and prize 'It Matters Not'. With swapped first and fourth line in each Quatrain. So glad you didn't fall. -Richard
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Date: 11/29/2019 8:17:00 PM
Quite deserved, very nice,Peter
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Date: 11/29/2019 5:34:00 PM
Saw this in the winners list and knew I'd read it before, commented on it back in 13,just as stunning now. Congrats once again. Take care, Richard
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Date: 11/29/2019 9:10:00 AM
Congrats my friend on your top finish in this contest. Beautifully done Andrea.
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Date: 11/28/2019 11:55:00 PM
Hello Andrea Congrats on your winning poem
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Date: 11/28/2019 10:30:00 AM
Oh I’m being spoilt today! Just read Sandra’s quatern, now a swap quatrain! This is superb, how the mood of the landscape blends with “your” mood - remind me who it was that said she couldn’t do weird metaphors?! Not that this is weird - GOOD metaphors then, good! :-x
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Date: 11/28/2019 10:08:00 AM
Beautiful write Andrea...congratulations on your trophy win....Happy Thanksgiving as well :) hugs
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Date: 11/28/2019 9:40:00 AM
Congrats, Andrea! A fav for me!
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Date: 11/28/2019 5:18:00 AM
Congrats on your top win. Love this. Bless you and hugs to you, Gina
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Date: 10/27/2018 2:18:00 PM
This is a gorgeous and emotive write from start to finish. I'm so glad I saw it on the right margin of my screen and clicked. Stunning. Love ... CayCay
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Date: 5/11/2018 2:36:00 PM
I love this one, Andrea. It is a perfect example of how some of us feel when severely depressed. I've been there. Maybe that's why I have such a fear of heights. Faved for sure.
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Date: 5/2/2018 11:46:00 PM
A very beautiful piece of work, indeed. I enjoyed it through and through.
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Date: 4/13/2018 9:10:00 PM
Well executed, Andrea. A beauty.
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Date: 3/14/2018 9:39:00 AM
Darn you so good , and your vocabulary is interesting it really helps, it's like a beat of a song
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Date: 9/21/2017 4:25:00 AM
love the rhythm and rhyme, perfect for this contest, poignant...thank you and congrats :)
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Date: 9/19/2017 8:01:00 AM
Andrea,,CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this amazing write
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Date: 6/17/2017 1:19:00 AM
Congrats on this great write :)
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Date: 5/10/2017 1:54:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea...I love this form and you did it so well....
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Date: 5/9/2017 8:27:00 PM
Congrats on your top win, Andrea. I am so glad to be able to read this poem, and I just love how you did the swap quatrain form!
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Date: 5/9/2017 8:27:00 PM
Oh, and a fave!
Date: 5/9/2017 4:09:00 PM
Wow, that looks a really challenging form. And you pulled it off so impressively. Massive congratulations for your First Place win! Regards, John.
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