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I am dented! My spirit an empty void! My soul diminished and my heart eroded, like abandoned, hollow, unwanted cans damaged, and beyond all repair! I stand on the edge of life battered, my eyes glazed and emotionless: - How did this happen? Once, I was happy! But life has broken me- thrown me, in the trash with a mighty slam, not even the recyle bin! Too much death- too much sorrow, my spirit, soul and heart kicked and barren. Now I hide in my hair!- And I am happy there! Quiet and serene in my sanctuary, and with lifeless eyes I view a vacant- world from beneath my feathery bangs! The dented cans of my within do not matter- as I go- deeper and deeper within- . . . waiting for the dreadful end! For the garbage truck to arrive! And I wait- drained of emotions and hope like so many dented cans- useless- My spirit, soul and heart weep- dead tears and then! I feel a light on me- growing inside me is a strength! and I climb out of the pit of- nothingness - ____________________________ December 24, 2017 Poetry/Verse/'Inside of Me' Copyright Protected, ID 17-9754-36-0 All Rights Reserved. Written Under Pseudonym. Written for the contest, Dented Cans sponsor, John Lawless Seventh Place

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Date: 4/19/2018 10:36:00 PM
Awesome take on the challenge, BW. Superbly done. Congrats.
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Date: 1/14/2018 12:45:00 PM
Fantastic penning Constance! I love the hiding behind hair :) Congratulations on your win with this wonderful original piece dear poetess xomo
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Date: 1/13/2018 4:46:00 PM
Love your taken on the dented theme Constance congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/13/2018 12:27:00 PM
BW - you imbued this dented can with all the angst and agony of life's loneliness and longing and balanced it on that masterful phrase "I hide in my hair". Just so subtle a shift....thanks for participating in the contest
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Date: 1/5/2018 11:02:00 PM
great job
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Date: 1/3/2018 5:38:00 AM
Just wow BW!!! Dripping with sadness and angst!!! You have an amazing way with words and images. To make the reader FEEL emotions is a gift!! Just beautifully written!!!!
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Date: 12/25/2017 11:27:00 AM
Very cool interpretation and stylization of dented cans. Good luck in contest
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Date: 12/24/2017 9:53:00 PM
Nice,happy charisma's dear
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Date: 12/24/2017 2:02:00 PM
This is another deep and emotive write Constance... Good luck in the contest..
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Date: 12/24/2017 12:04:00 PM
"now i hide in my hair" ...
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