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In the Park

Sitting on a bench our eyes meet across the pond a fleeting glance strangers.

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Edlynn Nau

Date: 5/14/2016 2:39:00 PM

Okay! You left me asking. . . And then what? Intriguing! Is it what could have been or did they meet? GREAT! Love this and you gave us that question of all the possible scenarios so simply! A7

Paul Callus
Date: 5/14/2016 3:18:00 PM

I can see those cogwheels turning in your mind, Edlynn:) Thank you for responding to my suggestive words! I always enjoy your comments...Regards // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 5/9/2016 7:27:00 PM

A single fleeting moment of time was captured forever within your words... Very nicely written, Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2016 5:12:00 PM

Thank you, Kelly:) Always a pleasure to have you stopping by:) ~ All the best....paul

Mark Peterson

Date: 4/30/2016 9:49:00 AM

You convey a greater depth of feeling and describe visions and moments more succinctly and profoundly than perhaps any other poet here when dealing with this form. Impressive!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/30/2016 5:32:00 PM

You are too kind, Mark...but, mind you, I love your lovely and encouraging feedback:) ~ All the best....paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/27/2016 12:12:00 PM

I enjoyed this moment and can visualize it very well. An option to remain strangers or to develop into something more. You do tanka justice.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/27/2016 2:38:00 PM

Hi Timothy!! A while ago I was on fb and noticed that you started your journey on the 24th. Maybe you have already arrived. ~ Glad you enjoyed this poem; I am not quite sure whether it qualifies as a tanka, but I tried my luck! Take care. ~ paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2016 5:29:00 PM

what the heck? Didn't I comment to this one before? Anyway, I love it!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/27/2016 2:34:00 PM

Yes, Andrea; it must have been pft! Thank you for reading it again and for clicking 'like':) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2016 5:29:00 PM

oh, maybe from pft!!!

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/25/2016 11:10:00 AM

Thinking something but showing something. Beautifully caught the scene. Excellent piece. With a beautiful 7 for this gem. Loved always, bl

Paul Callus
Date: 4/25/2016 3:21:00 PM

The high rating and lovely comments are truly appreciated, BL; thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Cherl Dunn

Date: 4/24/2016 8:17:00 PM

Dear Paul Thank you my friend for your shinning seven, I grew up with Prince and loved his music, I was shocked to find out that he had passed away. My small tribute poem is simple compared to the legacy that he left to the world itself, but I appreciate the cool comment you left for me on my humble piece of dedication, an thank you for your concern about my up coming surgery, I'm getting nervous about the whole thing, but their is no excape iF I want to stay alive right, thanks again, cheri d.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/25/2016 11:12:00 AM

Thank you for coming back for a second read, Cherl:) I was about to pay you a visit to wish you strength and calm for tomorrow's surgery. At home we'll be saying a special prayer for you, and I am sure many others will be thinking of you. Wishing you the best outcome possible, my dear friend. God bless. ~ paul

Gary Bateman

Date: 4/24/2016 5:52:00 PM

A great one for sure Paul! A fleeting romantic chance -- perhaps. A compelling image. Cheers and Best, Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 4/25/2016 11:01:00 AM

Thank you for your feedback, Gary. It's always a pleasure to have you stopping by. ~ All the best. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/24/2016 2:45:00 PM

Wow What a beauty .A fave ! ( Im sorry we didnt meet today, Christina is a bit better now). She is drinking Gatorade, eating plain crackers and doc prescribed sachets of liquid to replace fluids..for her not to get dehydrated. What is good is that She doesnt have fever .Tomorrow She wont be going to school , but tnks God She is much better..Hope We'll get to meet another time soon.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/24/2016 2:57:00 PM

I'm so pleased that Christina is better; galletti/crackers & Gatorade usually do the trick. Not to worry, as long as she has no fever. I bet she'll be pleased to spend the day with you tomorrow:) No worry about meeting...we'll think of an alternative. ~ Txs for liking this short poem....regards and a X for Christina...paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/23/2016 10:37:00 PM

Beautiful, reminds me the Jardin du Luxembourg :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/24/2016 2:50:00 AM

Thank you Arthur:) A bit of romanticism never hurts! Jardin du Luxembourg is a beautiful regal place:) // paul

Cherl Dunn

Date: 4/23/2016 10:06:00 PM

Dear Paul Just love the imagery my friend, strangers of the distant hearts, can live a life time in just a single glance, loved it, and thanks for the comments on my site as well, remember I'll be off the air for awhile starting on the 26, surgery's recovery will take awhile for the healing, getting nervous but I know it has to be done right, thanks again for all the prayers and best wishes, cheri d.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/24/2016 2:47:00 AM

Glad you liked this simple poem, Cherl...thank you. Your Prince of Purple is a wow! ~ Hope the tests went well; getting nervous is only natural....but what has to be done needs to be done; you'll be in my prayers. Take care my friend. ~~ paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/22/2016 12:30:00 AM

oh yes! Perfect Strangers... Wonderful tanka. Paul. LINDA

Paul Callus
Date: 4/22/2016 2:58:00 PM

Yes, strangers, but when eyes meet anything could happen, Linda! hugs // paul

Red Fiery

Date: 4/21/2016 7:15:00 PM

With all your poem, I can simply relate myself (majority of them ).. This is as brilliant as your previous poems... I hope I can meet you in person someday and talk about poetry and life... Hugs Red

Paul Callus
Date: 4/22/2016 2:40:00 PM

That would be lovely, Red. I'm sure we would find lots to talk about! I'm working on a time machine...:) Thank you for the lovely comments. Have a delightful weekend...hugs // paul

Daver Austin

Date: 4/21/2016 2:27:00 PM

I think I saw this one on another web site. Romantic is the word for such a happening. Exciting! Love, daver

Paul Callus
Date: 4/22/2016 2:25:00 PM

Love can be both romantic and exciting, Dave! But let's not forget that it can be painful, too! ~ Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/21/2016 4:05:00 AM

I can identify with this Paul, especially if you believe at love at first sight! A great Tanka Paul # 7 ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/22/2016 1:40:00 PM

Yes, Connie, this could have been love at first sight:) Thank you for liking and the high rating! ~ Warm regards // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/21/2016 3:22:00 AM

How sweet and tenderly romantic dear, Paul! Superb!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/22/2016 1:09:00 PM

"Superb" is more than I deserve, Demi:) Thank you, my friend! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 4/20/2016 6:41:00 PM

beautifully penned tanka I love the fact we can use our imagination to interpret how this should end:-) hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/22/2016 1:08:00 PM

Thank you Jan:) I love it when I see everybody thinking....saves me thinking! hugs // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 4/20/2016 5:05:00 PM

so many possibilities await! you've told a story in so few words, paul, and i love that we have to fill in the ending...

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2016 4:36:00 PM

You have a fertile imagination, Ilene:) I am sure you will find the perfect ending!:) Thank you for a pleasant visit. ~ Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/20/2016 4:58:00 PM

- A love image - Beautiful, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2016 4:27:00 PM

Thank you Anne Lise:) Have just booked a ride in your boat...hope there is a seat left! hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/20/2016 4:04:00 PM

i sense the magic of your lovely imagination, that sense of ' what next?'... enticing read, paul..huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2016 4:19:00 PM

Thank you Nette! That feeling of 'what next?' is exactly what I had in mind; perhaps it's not quite a tanka...more a case of free verse; still brooding on it! hugs // paul

Lin Lane

Date: 4/20/2016 3:47:00 PM

Is there a path around the pond? It's what my romantic side imagined. Love the tanka, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/21/2016 4:15:00 PM

Hmmm...I'm sure there was one:) Thank you for reading and liking, Lin! ~ Regards // paul