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In the Final End

There is something so pitiful in the flail - a desperation of movement that gets you nowhere... in your eyes I can see that you are lost and though you flutter wildly to right yourself you only turn in circles ~ panting - your fragility in a frenzy... you now know that life is just an interruption before death. Susan Ashley July 24, 2018

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 11/6/2018 4:50:00 PM

Hi Susan, a short but oh so beautiful poem from your golden pen. A poem to bring a tear to the eye of this reader. This peace does touch the heart so gently Susan. I feel the words as they stir my emotions. This is such an emotional piece. You have created a touching, poetic gem. Your talent shines through this write. Your golden heart shines. Have a wonderful Monday. Your friend always....Mike.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/8/2018 10:20:00 AM

My wonderful friend, I'm pleased that my verses stirred the emotional beauty of your heart, you are a poet of great depth and deep feelings, a soulful being. Thank you for your heartfelt and heartwarming comments. Your kind light is truly appreciated, my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 8/30/2018 3:59:00 PM

The word 'flail' is what struck me most in this beautiful poem, Susan. We humans toil and struggle as long as we live on earth...like birds we flail our wings to keep us going till the very end. I remember my grandfather used a flail to separate the corn from the husk...showing that even life's struggles can be fruitful. ~ Warm regards and hugs, my friend // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/31/2018 9:15:00 AM

Indeed, my dear friend Paul, I truly appreciate the fruitfulness of many beautiful blessings that have come from my life's struggles.. I wouldn't change any of the hardships I've endured.. Your amazing insight never fails to reach in deeply and touch my heart and soul in the most stirring way. Thank you for your inspiring comments. Warmest wishes and hugs my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Warren Doll

Date: 7/28/2018 7:54:00 AM

Wonderful poem , Susan. The last three lines are so true, but what a magnificent interruption. Well done.

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/28/2018 10:18:00 PM

Thank you Warren for your beautiful comments. It's such a pleasure to see you my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/27/2018 11:13:00 PM

Whew! Susan, this concise, powerful poem GRABBED me; I'm crying! Janice

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/28/2018 10:17:00 PM

Your precious thoughts are very moving, Janice. Thank you for your heartfelt and soulful comments which are held in my truest appreciation. Warmest wishes always my lovely friend.. ~Susan

Lyric Man

Date: 7/27/2018 12:47:00 PM

Well Susan, he was right. This fatalistic masterpiece is melancholy brilliant!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/27/2018 1:24:00 PM

We live to die to live again.. this is my belief, Lyric Man.. but there are many ways you can interpret the words in the last three lines.. depending on your perspective - I love your apt term 'fatalistic' - so befitting. Thank you for sharing your lustrous thoughts with me my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/26/2018 1:07:00 AM

Wow, this really got to me, (as it relates directly to something I just went through), and put the correct face on mortality ... a powerful and beautifully dark write that is headed to my favs. Wonderful work, Susan! :-) <3

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:14:00 PM

Thank you Gregory, for your meaningful and thoughtful comments. I'm so pleased that my poem touched and connected with you, though, I'm sorry for the hardship you've gone through recently.. thank you for sharing your wonderful response to my poem with me and for the fav! Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/25/2018 10:45:00 PM

The flail, a sudden realisation, too late.... fine piece, Susan, enjoyed. Viv x

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:15:00 PM

Indeed! It's as nice to hear from you, Viv, as it is to read your wondrous poetry. Thank you for sharing your precious comments with me. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Alesia Leach

Date: 7/25/2018 9:35:00 PM

I could picture a poor little insect who got flipped on his back, struggling to right himself. Do you think they know death is knocking? I feel so sorry for them I have to turn them back over. It is a beautiful poem, makes you think.

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:21:00 PM

Alesia, thank you for your precious comments. I can relate to your feelings of empathy and I've wondered the very same thing about whether they know that death is knocking..? I would have to guess, quite often, yes.. Your heartwarming visit and kindness is truly appreciated my lovely friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 7/25/2018 4:24:00 PM

I would not say life was an interruption... I think it is preparation for death... Profound words Susan.. Very well expressed..

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:44:00 PM

Thank you, my dear friend, for sharing your meaningful thoughts with me. Your wonderful comments are held in my truest appreciation, Silent One. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Brandy Nicole

Date: 7/25/2018 1:33:00 PM

Life is worth the living, before that final breath is taken. "an interruption before death" This is a very emotional moment and you have expressed it so well my friend. ~ Brandy

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:45:00 PM

Thank you Brandy, for your beautiful and meaningful comments. Your precious thoughts are appreciated as is your lovely kindness. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/25/2018 8:20:00 AM

Pitiful the hours, these hidings from clean showers* Awful the demise, failure to heed words wise* Thankful the Love, pure sweet joys from Above* Bountiful the praise, the Son his Father did raise* Your brilliant poem on death inspired me to immediately write those verses as they flowed on out, my dear friend! A fav, a jewel!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:50:00 PM

Thank you dear Robert, for sharing your inspired and beautiful verses with me. I truly appreciate your shining talent as well as your wonderful friendship. Your meaningful comments and brilliant poetry are held in my highest regard. Thank you for the fav as well my kindhearted friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Charles Messina

Date: 7/25/2018 6:48:00 AM

You have magic in your pen, Susan. Yes, life is just an interruption before death...Love this! Have a wonderful day...warmest wishes...Charlie

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:35:00 PM

Charlie, your presence has a magical way of always brightening my page! Thank you for your wonderful comments and for the delight your visit brings. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/25/2018 12:14:00 AM

I always say the real life does not begin until the moment of death; this poem is beautiful!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/26/2018 9:32:00 PM

Indeed! Caren, your comments express a profound insight. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem and I thank you for sharing your beautiful and precious thoughts with me. Warmest wishes my lovely friend.. ~Susan

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/24/2018 11:40:00 PM

Powerful image of that moment before death that I think many of us have seen in our lives. Tom

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/25/2018 9:51:00 PM

Thank you for your precious comment, P.M. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

P.M. Richter
Date: 7/25/2018 10:26:00 AM

Agreed. This poem is very special Susan. Thank you.

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/24/2018 11:49:00 PM

Indeed! Your deep insight into this intense moment touches me, Tom. Is is profoundly sad to see the light of life go out. Thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan