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Near frangipani flowers that infuse the air with fragrance, a pellucid stream flows gently past us. Here we both will lose timidity in an exquisite dream. Vermilion ripples in the twilight sky as drifting clouds form a menagerie of winged-like shapes that we identify as mockingbirds, and then he says to me - “This – my own ancestral home – will bring us bliss.” He seals his promise with a luscious kiss! Jan. 10, 2018 for Brian Strand's 'ALL YOURS (Mar 8)' Poetry Contest

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Date: 3/8/2021 8:24:00 PM
Congratulations dear Andrea. This poem is simply enchanting...the last couplet mesmerized me..A fave..
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Date: 3/8/2021 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A beautiful write. Way to go, "He seals his promise with a luscious kiss!" Have a blessed day/week writing away.................
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Date: 3/7/2021 7:46:00 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your first place win in the poetry contest.~ Warren
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Date: 1/24/2018 3:40:00 PM
Beautiful! So positive, loving and uplifting. Great spirit!
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Date: 1/20/2018 1:51:00 PM
this is just soooo clever. really lovely
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Date: 1/15/2018 4:32:00 PM
I like the Greek: "Pell"; ( pélma, “sole of the foot”), And "lucid" ( light ) so... Light-Foot? Or Foot-lights? --- No... it's; 'admitting maximum passage of light without diffusion or distortion.' - bet this sent others to the dictionary too. Lovely scene- lucky guy
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Date: 1/13/2018 4:09:00 AM
This is so darned sweet I want to wrap up in it! Darned if I'm not going to break down and look up frangipani - eventually. I leave with a feeling of romance in the air! Hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 1/12/2018 7:49:00 PM
Your poem is such a sweet romantic delight Andrea. Congratulations on your wonderful win with your lovely write. ~Susan
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Date: 1/12/2018 11:08:00 AM
Hey, I must read more of your romantic poems. Congratulations, Eros woman!
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:53:00 AM
Lovely romantic paradise Andrea, congratulations...
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Date: 1/12/2018 5:22:00 AM
Happy New Year, Andrea! Lovely imagery with this one - I learnt a new word, too!! Congrats on your win! Regards, John.
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Date: 1/12/2018 1:47:00 AM
A beautiful write Andrea. My kind of dream.
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Date: 1/11/2018 9:27:00 PM
You have created a beauty blended with fragrance and a refreshing scenic beauty which flows in your lines like a cool music. A very sweet and romantic write dear friend Andrea and well deserving win. Congrats with best wishes.... Ravindra K Kapoor
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Date: 1/11/2018 8:10:00 PM
So romantic, Andrea. Love it. Congrats on your placement in the contest too. :)
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Date: 1/11/2018 7:43:00 PM
A lovely romantic write! Back to say CONGRATS on your win Andrea!!! ~ Judy
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Date: 1/11/2018 7:11:00 PM
You weaved this one just right Andrea, a unique choice of words that you have magically put together here;-)
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Date: 1/11/2018 6:19:00 PM
Wonderful spin on this, Andrea. Well done.
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Date: 1/11/2018 4:38:00 PM
Hi Andrea, How did I miss such a write? You most definitely rose the challenge with this remarkable write. I found it to beautiful and romantic. You used the chosen words to paint a lovely picture. Congratulations on your winning write. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 1/11/2018 3:48:00 PM
Very pretty! What does pellucid mean - I have never seen that word before? Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 1/11/2018 3:18:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 1/11/2018 3:15:00 PM
Andrea, back to say congrats, well done. John
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Date: 1/11/2018 3:12:00 PM
Beautiful from beginning to end!
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Date: 1/11/2018 2:48:00 PM
A great use of the ten words Andrea... You wrote a very sweet poem... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 1/11/2018 9:58:00 AM
Where had he been taking your hand to? What was the name of the stranger you were with. Gads. It will take you forever to answer each comment. An idea. Set it up so you can write a general comment that everyone can receive at the same time automatically. Glad you enjoyed my poem. (GYEMP). Sounds kind of gimpy to me.
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Date: 1/11/2018 9:45:00 AM
Hello Andrea, this is sweet, and reminds me all promises should be kept. Lovely, Always ~LINDA~
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