In Dreams

Naked in the surf

   We splash and play together.

Falling to the sand

   In a hot lover's embrace....

 I awaken to snoring.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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March 15, 2015 at 11:59 PM
Francine, CONGRATULATIONS, on your top Tanka win:) ~SKAT~
Roper Avatar
March 14, 2015 at 7:37 PM
Congratulations on your win a very descriptive verse a 7
Haight Avatar
March 14, 2015 at 4:37 PM
Love the twist in your Tanka, Francine. Wonderfully done. Congratulations on your win. Sandra
Kendrick Avatar
March 14, 2015 at 3:17 PM
Congrats on the second win..Sara
Allison Avatar
March 14, 2015 at 10:54 AM
This made me smile Francine congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
March 14, 2015 at 9:38 AM
hahaha. I looked below at what I said about this one in 2011. you were very wise to use one that I already considered a best one!! You even fooled me again on my second read!
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March 14, 2015 at 9:36 AM
Francine, as I was reading this, I was thinking, ok ok, this is not really tanka because it is just describing a great moment of romance, and then I got to the last line and I LOVED the twist. For that reason I am putting this humorous one on the winner list tied with the other one I got that was funny!! Congrats to you.
Brown Avatar
February 25, 2011 at 10:45 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Michael's contest Francine. I almost wet my pants laughing at this one. You made my day. Love, Carol
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February 23, 2011 at 1:57 PM
Congrat my dear poet friend on your success in my contest...always Michael
K. Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 1:53 AM
haha that last line is a wonderful twist :) Enjoyed this fun and hottie one, Francine :) Congrats on your win :)
Poet Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 11:25 AM
Just awesome!Congrats Francine on your well deserved win in this contest.----kashinath
Neels Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 11:13 AM
Francine, congratulations on your win in MJF's contest ;-)
Sweetheart Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 9:21 AM
Congrats Francine on your super win in the Dream Tanka contest with another amazing write my friend.. enjoy your top ten win with luv..
Freeman Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 8:19 AM
Good to see you in the top 10 again Francine. Congratulations on your poem's 10th place. Agape, Moses
Onclaud Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 7:53 AM
strikingly sumptuous, francine.. happy for you for the great win! congrats with huggs..:) nette
Pettit Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 11:12 PM
Michael did like this one as I had predicted. Congratulations on winning in his contest.
Dietrich Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 11:08 PM
One of the best is right HERE. Congratulations, Francine!
Haick Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 10:10 PM
Congratulations on your very fine win in Michael's Contest! Always, Annalise
Mannan Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 8:44 PM
hahaha Good one. Many congratulations my dear friend.
Mehta Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 5:48 PM
Congratulations on this win in the contest of Michael, Francine
Muzzey Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 5:22 PM
Congratulations on your tenth place win, I enjoyed the read. I had those dreams before but I try to go back to sleep. Caryl
Kendrick Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 4:25 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
Johnson Avatar
February 21, 2011 at 3:48 PM
Great work Francine. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Fraser Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 10:02 AM
Och Francine, you said I didn't snore, boo hoo!! Terrific Tanka, and so funny, good luck in the contest. Michael will chuckle at this, this is his kind of humour....:)x
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February 11, 2011 at 3:27 PM
Such irony, awaking to snores after dreams of passion. You had me going there for a while, Francine. Thought you'd found a sexy new guy! Soup mail in a second. Love, Carolyn
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