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In Darkness I Dwell

How long will this dreary night go on
Seems years since the dawn of morn
Why does anxiety keep me awake
What is this burden I cannot shake

Heartbeats too fast within my breast
Too quickly to grant needed rest
There's no moon above to cast light
This crepuscule gives birth to fright

I smell the wax of candles burning
but something keeps me from turning
If this be a dream, I pray, let me wake
for I've a thirst and hunger to slake

My eyes are open, and yet I cannot see
the willow outside; my weeping tree
"Fear not," I warn myself in voice aloud
the moon must be cloaked by a cloud

I call out for Davinia, in angst and fear
but my dear wife is not sleeping near
I long to glimpse morning rays of sun
Harried for never-ending night to be done

Only sleep could bring a measure of peace
and from shadowed night to have release
but I seen to be shackled to the beast
who fights the dawn's rising in the East

Of going insane, I fast approach the brim
tortured by thoughts, dark, dank and grim
Whispers I hear, mawkish murmurs dim,
"What will become of Davinia without him"

Who speaks of me in grammar, past tense
Someone who's lost all sentience and sense
Fragrant air 'round me grows warm and dense
Could that redolent odor be flowered scents

A memory haunts my sleep deprived brain
It's of a brutal nature, and cold falling rain
An act of violence, like the angry sin of Cain
A man's life taken; from a dagger he was slain

Motionless in rest, but not on my feathered bed
This unnerving moment is one I most dread
In a sepulcher, on a satin pillow, rests my head
In eternal darkness am I to dwell, among the dead
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Connelly Avatar
September 16, 2023 at 2:41 PM
The ghost of Poe is certainly haunting this one Lin... Dark but beautifully written. Thanks
Cunningham Avatar
July 11, 2018 at 2:58 PM
What a fantastic verse you've written Lin,I enjoyed this, very dark with a hint of menace. The smell of burning candles.loved the dark images you created. You are one talented poe-t Lin.
Lane Avatar
July 11, 2018 at 6:25 PM
Tom, thank you for going back to read this one and for the glowing comments. (pun intended, ergo the burning candles) lol I thought you may like it.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 12:48 AM
A great poem, Lin. Congrats.
Lane Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 9:04 AM
Thank you very much, Subimal.
White Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 12:01 AM
Lin, congratulations with your placement, sorry that I have been so absent lately in every way, I am sick, I'll make it up to you :)
Lane Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 9:04 AM
There's no need for you to be sorry, Darren, and there's nothing to make up. I only hope you're feeling better and thank you.
Barden Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 9:16 PM
Just adored this write, Lin, and while it hearkens Poe, I think it's all yours from start-to-finish, with emotion, beauty, rhythm, and that tinge of dark allure ... love it! Congratulations on FOURTH PLACE!! :-) <3
Lane Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 8:46 AM
Thanks, Greg. Compliments to you for the comparison to Poe.
Raven Avatar
January 4, 2016 at 4:00 PM
For many of us there is a great fascination with Poe and the way he did write, his poetry, his books. This piece does bring poe dreams into my mind. Poe lives on in quiye a few writers on the Soup. An excellent write Lin. A seven and into my favs with this write....Vladislav.
Lane Avatar
January 4, 2016 at 4:05 PM
I'm truly honored by your comment, Vlad...if I may shorten your name? This was written for a "write like Poe" contest, but didn't fare well. Thank you for liking it.
Hlabisa Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 7:23 AM
Congrats :-)
Lane Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 7:27 AM
Thank you, and also congrats to you on your Dark Passage.
Negron Flores Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 7:01 AM
Congratulations Lin.
Lane Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 7:06 AM
Thank you, Nayda... a congratulations I share with you.:)
A. Sharma Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 4:24 AM
Brilliant write Lin.. congrats on fine win!
Lane Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 7:05 AM
Thank you,Upma...and the same congrats back to you.
A  Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 11:39 PM
lin, Congratulations on your Poe, Poe WIN! SKAT :)
Lane Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 3:34 AM
Thanks, skat
Hamilton Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 10:47 PM
Nice write Lin congrats
Lane Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 3:34 AM
Thanks, John
Roper Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 10:40 PM
Wonderful write, Lin, congratulations on your win!!!
Lane Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 3:34 AM
Thank you, Eve
Custard Avatar
November 23, 2015 at 2:53 PM
Poe was the best! This is just like one of his poems!
Lane Avatar
November 23, 2015 at 2:57 PM
Your comment is dungeon music to my ears..lol Thanks.
Leiser Avatar
November 23, 2015 at 11:28 AM
This is most impressive, Lin! Your dramatic write flies off the page so well! Great poem and good luck in the contest :)
Lane Avatar
November 23, 2015 at 12:07 PM
Thank you very much, Laura. Your comments are always a joy to read.
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