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Imperfect Perfection OCD -SHM

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This is a sonnet written about Obsessive compulsive disorder.
and the haiku and monoku are written using lines taken from the sonnet. Written for the sonnet-kuku contest sponsored by Charles Messina

In pursuit of imperfect perfection, she slowly turned every lucky star blind, drowning in constant chores from obsession, unable to appease her stormy mind. Promises ascend against perception, nothing halts fixed rituals from spinning, as turmoils of time twirl through aggression, she sees the devilish mantra winning. What is left when breathing becomes a pain? whilst malignant fears urge for reliance, spiky succulents perish faith in vain frantically panicking in silence. day bleeds into repetitive debate— Emotive wildfires stir despair and hate. emotive wildfires appease her stormy mind blind stir despair and hate breathing becomes a pain~in the pursuit of imperfect perfection

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Silent One

Date: 1/6/2024 2:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your first place in the contest..

Charles Messina

Date: 1/2/2024 9:05:00 AM

I Love this, Ink. Two of my four sons have OCD, so I can relate to this... I'm sure many can. Excellent poetry by all means...your magical pen speaks volumes, my dear friend. Congratulations on your top win! Happy New Year! Charlie

Bill Baker

Date: 12/8/2023 5:28:00 PM

Excellent poetry in this difficult contest, my friend. You've described the behavior of an OCD person well and the Haiku was a good one. I could feel the turmoil in the Haiku. Good luck in the contest! Bill

Paige Hind

Date: 12/8/2023 2:50:00 PM

An intense piece, very artsy... I loved how you combined the forms. "breathing becomes a pain" - I know what you mean, and "every lucky star blind"- how deep! Wishing you light, just me!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/5/2023 4:11:00 PM

3 forms in one! Amazing! You've so wonderfully captured the sometimes maddening impact of OCD. I love the emotions and reflective tone of your words. This verse was truly powerful and evocative: Promises ascend against perception, nothing halts fixed rituals from spinning, as turmoils of time twirl through aggression, she sees the devilish mantra winning. What a masterpiece, dear Ink! best wishes with the contest...seems like a winner to me, hugs, Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 3:46:00 AM

Ah thank you so much sweet sara i had fun doing this form, i appreciate you always taking time to read my work and to leave your supportive thoughts, grateful always.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/5/2023 2:00:00 PM

It must be a very difficult state of being to have OCD. It can be helped today though with the right meds and counseling. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us which reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 3:49:00 AM

Thank you kind sara, for your sweet support. Yes i know few that struggle so badly with this and its never easy, i always appreciate your support truly

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 12/5/2023 9:42:00 AM

In pursuit of imperfect perfection,.. ooo that start!! drowning in constant chores from obsession,mmmmm that line papi !!! unable to appease her stormy mind.. turmoils of time twirl through aggression, yaaazzz come thru alliterations!!! What is left when breathing becomes a pain? Mmm that line hits the spot aee… day bleeds into repetitive debate.the weight of that line runs sooo deep!!! breathing becomes a pain~in the pursuit of imperfect perfection.damn papiu craft pieces of heaven ! Marvelous

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 3:53:00 AM

Papi thanks i appreciate ur cute comments always i miss cookies as i read ur comments

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/5/2023 8:22:00 AM

This poem is truly captivating with its exquisite imagery and seamless composition. Its optimistic tone and the celebration of beauty and life are truly inspiring. The emotions conveyed are deeply heartfelt and the sincerity in your expression, dear Ink, is truly remarkable. Your talent is truly exceptional. BOL with the contest

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 3:53:00 AM

Thank you dear sotto i appreciate u always

Len Gasun

Date: 12/5/2023 8:19:00 AM

Impressive poem in 3 forms from your golden pen my dear poet friend Ink. You excellentlyy expressed and described the dread of someone with OCD here. Outstanding poetry my dear. Thanks a lot for sharing this precious gem. I love and enjoyed it a lot. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs.

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 4:02:00 AM

Ah this is so kind and so generous of you, thank you so very much truly . Grateful for your support

Clive Culverhouse

Date: 12/5/2023 6:26:00 AM

three poems in one, excellently expressed and executed, such emotion - unable to appease her stormy mind - really felt that one IE

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 4:03:00 AM

Thank you clive. Yes the contest required to do that. I am glad and so grateful for your support always

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/5/2023 6:22:00 AM

What is left when breathing becomes a pain--splendid exploration in this poem, Ink. Flawlessly executed using three forms--aptly done for the contest theme.

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 4:03:00 AM

Thank you always dear Vijay i appreciate your poetic support truly, grateful always

Ayesha Iqbal

Date: 12/5/2023 6:09:00 AM

So so emotive and truthfully expressed dear Ink.. you are brilliant!! This is so aptly done!

Silent One

Date: 12/5/2023 2:39:00 AM

I think Charlie will love this one.. Your sonnet is excellent, it flows so well and so many great lines about angst with OCD... no one wants that devilish mantra to win, this is a sonnet that is a little different, but that is always good... Your haiku is very good, very clever to use those lines as it makes sense after you poem and just before your excellent monoku...

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 12/5/2023 1:57:00 AM

You have expressed so well .. this is how exactly it feels … always a great write

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/5/2023 1:52:00 AM

Gosh, my dear Ink.. I can truly feel these emotions speaking to me in many ways, although you've written it specifically for OCD, but the depth here can be interpreted for myriad situations..When emotive wildfires stir hate and agression, creating a way for apathy to surround the atmosphere..Love ceases to breath and the heart drowns in a volcanic rage. "she slowly turned every lucky star blind", "spiky succulents perish faith in vain frantically panicking in silence" True what you've said about

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/5/2023 1:56:00 AM

Breathing becoming a pain as well, sigh. Sometimes my heart aches to feel about all these sufferings and ache.. You've so impeccably described the vulnerability here & am truly amazed by how effortlessly you've woven the sonnet, haiku & monoku together, flowing so wonderfully.. Loved reading this, best of luck for the contest!!