Jan Allison Poet Diminished Hexaverse

I'Ll Never Give Up

I miss you my love
For we are apart
Far across the seas
I pray will we meet 
Sweep me off my feet

Lonely days pass
Sad tears now flow
I need some news
Ease my sorrow

My true love
Hear my plea
Come to me

I won’t
Give up

Hope

01~06~14
Contest: Dr Ram Mehta – Diminished Hexaverse
Syllable Counter Used - How Many Syllables
~awarded 8th place~

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 23, 2015 at 10:09 AM Beautiful, Jan...I would place this hopeful write much higher...hugs, Rhonda Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 23, 2015 at 12:12 PM LOL...I think the HM is worse! Jan Allison January 23, 2015 at 10:41 AM Thanks Rhonda your comment means the world to me - Armand felt the same too - but at least it wasn't an HM or the dreaded N/A lol Hugs Jan x

Kayod5 Kayode January 22, 2015 at 12:15 AM I will not give up too , congrats on the win Jan..huggs Jan Allison January 22, 2015 at 2:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Kayod5:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick January 20, 2015 at 4:21 PM !!! ((())) Way to go ……Sara Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 4:25 PM Thanks Sara:-) Hugs Jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty January 20, 2015 at 11:18 AM Congratulations Jan> love-rajat Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 11:28 AM Thanks so much Rajat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne January 20, 2015 at 7:56 AM I would of loved to see this oh so special write, higher up on the list. Still happy to congratulate you on your win. Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 10:20 AM Me too Armand lol :-) least it wasn't an HM or N/A lol:-) Hugs Jan x

Dr. Upma A. Sharma January 19, 2015 at 10:40 PM Never shud one give up hope, so true is ur write Jan! Congrats on fine win! Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 1:09 AM Thanks so much Dr Sharma I will never give up on him I love him so much as a dear dear friend:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Fisher January 19, 2015 at 7:38 PM This is fine work for the contest. The title is very strong too. Congrats! Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 1:08 AM Thanks David I think the title is as important as the actual poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet January 19, 2015 at 6:42 PM Your imagery here describes hope to a T, Jan. Congratulations on your win. There is no giving up in hope. Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 1:07 AM Thanks so much Reason:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight January 19, 2015 at 5:31 PM Hi Jan, stopping back to congratulate you on your fine win! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 1:07 AM Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta January 19, 2015 at 11:17 AM Congrats on the win in my contest and thanks for the participation Jan Allison January 19, 2015 at 12:01 PM Thanks for sponsoring the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans January 19, 2015 at 10:33 AM Someday you'll meet again. Keep that hope alive my friend. Congratulations on your win. Jan Allison January 19, 2015 at 12:00 PM I just hope we have contact again Brenda - I would love to meet but doubt we ever will:-)hugs Jan xx

Fayaz Bhat January 12, 2015 at 9:42 PM Again touching! Wish you soon meet your lover, and he gives you plenty of love.. Jan Allison January 13, 2015 at 1:06 AM It's actually written based on an amazing friendship not a love affair although I love his so much as a wonderful friend - so there is a little poetic licence here:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux January 7, 2015 at 1:35 PM This rings with a hopeful tone. Jan Allison January 7, 2015 at 1:38 PM Thanks so much Richard it is written from the heart I miss Darren's friendship so much:-( Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper January 7, 2015 at 1:10 PM Hi Jan, A lovely poem. Sad but still with hope. i know what it is to "not know". I think this is a winner in the competition. love Shane xxx Jan Allison January 7, 2015 at 1:37 PM Thanks Shane my lovely friend - its the not knowing that hurts so badly:-( Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus January 7, 2015 at 10:41 AM Hi Jan...I still have to try out this interesting form; you make it look so easy. Understandable content...true friends can never be discarded and we feel for them and their absence. gl and hugs. // paul Jan Allison January 7, 2015 at 1:37 PM Its written from the heart Paul I miss Darren's friendship oh so much:-( Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian January 7, 2015 at 10:21 AM Beautiful, sweetie. All we can do is live with hope...what else is there? Hugs Jan Allison January 7, 2015 at 10:32 AM ooh love the sultry avatar my friend - I have hope Eileen its all I have left in this situation:-( Hugs jan xx

Mama Bear January 6, 2015 at 6:05 PM extremely well done for a difficult write. Proud of you my dear Hugs Edith Jan Allison January 7, 2015 at 10:31 AM Behave! Hugs jan xx Mama Bear January 6, 2015 at 6:55 PM I have a feeling that you do not ever need a white flag. LOL Hugs Edith Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 6:11 PM Aww mama bear you are always so kind my friend but I will never wave the white flag on this one he is simly a dear dear friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne January 6, 2015 at 5:19 PM Excellent! Feels as if it was painful to write. I swear I can see a tear on my screen. Lots of Love, Armand. Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 5:25 PM Thanks Armand am in a good place at the moment but I have to go where my muse takes me - wish I could control it lol:-) Hugs as ever my friend:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight January 6, 2015 at 4:52 PM Hi Jan, such a deep sense of hope you convey in your poem with such perfect flow of words! Good luck in the contest...I see it a winner! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 4:55 PM Thanks Sandra maybe we can share the same step for this one - and not the naughty step! Hugs Jan xxx

Casarah Nance January 6, 2015 at 4:47 PM Very nice! There is lots of Hope in the air tonight! Hugs and Hope! :) Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 4:52 PM Yes amazing Cas - hope its not just wishful thinking! Hugs jan xx

James Fraser January 6, 2015 at 4:37 PM Beautiful tender poetry Jan encompassing hope with a wanting conviction. Good luck in the contest - James :) xx :) Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 4:44 PM Thanks James its written from the heart:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith January 6, 2015 at 4:26 PM Never give up Jan....There is always a glimmer of hope..my best to you and your family...hugs Tim Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 4:27 PM Thanks Tim:-) Hugs Jan x

Sara Kendrick January 6, 2015 at 4:16 PM Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Great idea for the work..Thanks for the visit to my page.Sara Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 4:17 PM Thanks as ever for your continued support Sara:-) Hugs Jan xx