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If Only I Could

If only I could shake myself free Sling away all troubles and cares Always searching through old debris Ameles potamos dry my tears Sling away all troubles and cares Take a big deep breath and just breathe Ameles potamos dry my tears Only happy thoughts to now perceive Take a big deep breath and just breathe There are still ways to recalibrate Only happy thoughts to now perceive Let all those thorny thoughts abate There are still ways to recalibrate If only a way I could foresee Let all those thorny thoughts abate If only I could shake myself free This Or That, Vol 17 Poetry Contest 28th March 2023 Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

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Speaks Volumes

Date: 3/29/2023 5:09:00 AM

I think Pantoum is the hardest of all poetry forms DD, and you mastered it so well. With in the constraints of this difficult platform, your beautiful words and meaning perform as if they were free from conformity. Its inspirational and heart warming. A favorite for sure. Well done. ( Hmm rereading that seems I am in "form" tonight).

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/29/2023 5:30:00 AM

A lovely comment Wen! I quite like this form as it speaks to you whilst you are writing and if you get lucky with a sentence you are talking yourself round. I love how the meanings of the lines change as they are repeated. I don't think it's tricky as you have half a poem to write and the other half is written by magic due to the refrains. Thank you for your wonderfully kind words as always

Daniel Turner

Date: 3/28/2023 3:44:00 PM

Great pantoum, DD. They do make a pretty poem.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/28/2023 5:10:00 PM

Thanks DT - they make a neat parcel out of a small idea

Valsa George

Date: 3/28/2023 10:03:00 AM

How we wish we could drive away and banish all painful thoughts. But they keep marauding us like wayside bandits. This is the case with everyone. Great entry for the contest. All the Best dear DD

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/28/2023 10:12:00 AM

Thanks Valsa, your kind words are much appreciated.

John Oldham

Date: 3/28/2023 9:57:00 AM

Nice job on this, Dilly. You always bring these rare forms of poetry I've never heard of to my attention. A masterful effort! Best - john

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/28/2023 10:05:00 AM

Thanks John! I picked it up from a previous contest - I only started writing poetry in December and have done quite well flying by the seat of my pants but I might need to study the rules now as I think I've stalled. I'm glad you like this one - I was pleased putting ameles potamos in as Lethe waters looks like a typo. Thanks for commenting, much appreciated:)