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I Will Keep Your Smile

First time we met, I got you a flower A rose it was not, but it was my desire, You told me you loved it, for you couldn't resist Urge of my plea and longing that gave it, Soon things changed when we looked in vain Searching each other where we don't exist, In my ardent mind, every dream you fulfilled Yet I never saw me in your festive daydreams, Though I emptied for you my entire reservoir You still remained dry, looking for rainy skies, When your heart said hello you forced it shut Still I don't regret, rare moments of true-love, I see you looking wearily at the exit door Smiling gleefully still, at my genuine ardor, If life without you hangs around the corner Hold on to my love, I will keep your smile. February 1, 2018 Placed first in mid November 2018 contest by Brian Strand

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Date: 11/19/2022 6:01:00 PM
"Though I emptied for you my entire reservoir/ You still remained dry, looking for rainy skies",..... Some are never satisfied even if we pour all our love on them ! Sadly they never reciprocate, but keep longing for more ! A great love poem.
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Date: 1/10/2019 11:00:00 AM
Hi Vijay, such a beautiful write from your pen. The emotions flow through this wonderful piece. I love to read emotional content. Such strong visions come from your lines my friend. This is such a beautiful write. Have a wonderful Thursday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 11/22/2018 4:25:00 PM
Beautifully penned, Vijay. Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 11/18/2018 11:31:00 AM
This is a great poem, Vijay:-) Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 11/16/2018 9:59:00 AM
Congrats on your top win Vijay !!!
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Date: 11/15/2018 7:44:00 PM
To open the heart completely, means there will pain, as well as sweet love. Your thoughts hold so many emotions. Of all things to keep. "A smile" I would hold close as well. This is beautiful and tender. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy
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Date: 11/15/2018 5:37:00 PM
Congratulations for your win Vijay! :)
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Date: 2/5/2018 3:02:00 AM
Such a beautiful read, Vijay. Flows effortlessly, and the ending is poignant and exquisite. Wonderful!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/6/2018 6:36:00 AM
Thank you Bernard..appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 2/4/2018 10:25:00 AM
This is beautifully crafted Vijay :) This may be fiction, but it is true that you can hold good memories of past loves... it is how we learn and move on...lovely write, have a great day :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/6/2018 6:35:00 AM
Thank you Chris for your visit and lovely comments.
Date: 2/2/2018 3:10:00 PM
I'm super happy this was fiction :) a beautiful write my dear friend Vijay! Hugs and smiles :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 4:37:00 PM
Thank you Akkina.
Date: 2/2/2018 9:06:00 AM
Glad it is fiction, Vijay, one-sided love can hurt very much:) beautifully described:)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 9:10:00 AM
Thank you Jo.
Date: 2/1/2018 8:39:00 PM
Yes, as Ashely says, it's bittersweet. I enjoyed the imagery especially in those last verses. looking wearily at the exit door and the contrast with the person who still has ardor!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 6:33:00 AM
Thank you Andrea.
Date: 2/1/2018 8:21:00 PM
Your bittersweet poem is filled with melancholy beauty Vijay and your last line, especially, is tender and poignant.. deep emotions wondrously expressed. ~Susan
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 6:33:00 AM
Thank you Susan.
Date: 2/1/2018 7:50:00 PM
a love not returned is a sad one sided feeling... enjoyed reading your fiction write.. Hugs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 6:33:00 AM
Thank you Eve.
Date: 2/1/2018 6:08:00 PM
nice write here Vijay, loves fleeting moments
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 6:32:00 AM
Thank you Lewis.
Date: 2/1/2018 4:09:00 PM
such a lovely poem that blends yearning and devotion, vijay... a work of art!.. huggs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2018 6:32:00 AM
Thank you nette.
Date: 2/1/2018 1:33:00 PM
Alas, Your poem brings memories of my own, melancholy and beautiful !!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2018 1:41:00 PM
Appreciate your comments, Mike...many thanks.
Date: 2/1/2018 9:37:00 AM
Well written Vijay. I like the ending ..I will keep your smile :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2018 1:40:00 PM
Glad to read your comments, Heidi..many thanks.
Date: 2/1/2018 8:51:00 AM
A great poem, Vijay ... Enjoyed reading it ...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2018 1:39:00 PM
Thank you Probir..appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/1/2018 6:52:00 AM
A little bit of love is better than no love at all...I like the line,"rare moments of true-love," All the best Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2018 1:39:00 PM
So true Arutro--appreciate your comments..many thanks.
Date: 2/1/2018 6:50:00 AM
Sounded so real, like I said before, you write about loss very well.. a great free verse poem..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2018 1:38:00 PM
Many thanks Silent One..appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/1/2018 6:32:00 AM
A lovely piece of fiction my dear Vijay - But so true in real life of many - and most believable - but there again your are a master wordsmith. I enjoyed reading it ...Maria
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2018 1:38:00 PM
Thank you Maria..enjoyed reading your comments.

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