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I Was Broken

Grandma, when I was b r o k e n you held me, you gave me sanctuary and excellent tea! When I could N O T express my pain, you gave me a journal. "Write it my DEAR!" And I did, I wrote about every fear and tear. Often, my writing held a teardrop s t a i n ; but my pen kept dripping AGAIN and again, and a poet was born- that is clear. Then you left one n i g h t, so peacefully in your sleep. Oh, THIS girl was shattered! I wept for days, d a y s . . . A whisper w r i t e it my dear- (in the church I read my words.) _________________________ April 19, 2017 Couplet/Rhyme/Sedoka/I Was Broken Copyright Protected, ID 893793 For the contest, Three Style III Sponsor, Laura Loo Second Place

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Ironic Zink

Date: 5/18/2017 6:27:00 AM

Tears teetered on the tip on every stanza. Nice imagery and stellar dedication!

Dean Wood

Date: 5/16/2017 4:03:00 PM

Oh, this is pretty! This one is going in my FAV's. Thanks for sharing you wonderful talent with us. -Dean

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/14/2017 4:55:00 PM

so lovely, Constance, Never stop your poetry! Keep it flowing. Love to you on this day!! And congrats for your win.

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 5/13/2017 9:55:00 AM

Touching, Constance, brokenness heals slowly but precious memories seems to be the best salve, I know. Such a remarkable tribute to your grandmother. Congrats on your placement.

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/13/2017 8:57:00 AM

Constance, I felt your deep love for your grandma and the pain she helped you deal with by writing...and your hurt and loss when she left...such a beautiful poem. Congratulations on your well-deserved placement on this short list of winners. 7, Hugs, Sandra

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/13/2017 8:37:00 AM

Excellent! Congrats!

Laura Leiser

Date: 5/12/2017 11:23:00 PM

Such a moving poem, Constance! Congrats on your win :)

Lu Loo

Date: 5/12/2017 9:27:00 PM

I really feel your pain, I'm still feeling it today. It just keep lingering like a cut on your finger. It stings and is always there in the back of your mind. Blessings to you sweet Broken Wings, lots of hugs and love...thank you :) luloo

James Inman

Date: 4/23/2017 10:02:00 AM

I have a tear in my eye for you BW.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/23/2017 9:22:00 AM

Your grandma was right, Constance, you must continue to write such magnificent and touching poetry:) a 7:)

Jan Allison

Date: 4/19/2017 3:32:00 PM

Your grandma was a massive influence on your life and I know she made you the wonderful writer that we see now:-) beautiful and yet so sad you must miss her so so much:-( hugs Jan xx

Shubham Kamble

Date: 4/19/2017 3:15:00 PM

And you write wonderfully. She must really be proud and honoured up there. Beautiful poetry ! Shubham

Chris Green

Date: 4/19/2017 2:32:00 PM

Another beautifully sad piece of writing, but out of those sad times in our lives something good always seems to appear and in this case I know something good has appeared.

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 4/19/2017 2:19:00 PM

This is such an endearing poem. You lit the torch she was passing on when you expressed your first pain and you are now writing and honoring both her memory and her loving advice "Write it my dear", and your poem lights the way back to her A7:) Amitiés

Constance La France
Date: 4/19/2017 2:24:00 PM

Anne-Marie, thanks for that lovely comment, yes Grandma is the reason I am a poet, she inspired and encouraged me to write my feelings, it is because of her that those feelings have become poems. Thanks for the 7 TOO!