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growing on stalks that become brittle holding form right up until disintegration effort made to square everything up make sense of it through staring eyes stopping only when Hypnos stole their blue the essence of me invisibly taking flight as I linger in gloom too heavy to rest my head triptychs span the horizontal and vertical ironically telling stories with ~ no beginning, no middle, no end fine chains catch my gaze add it to their lustre I bathed in echoes until nothing cried out stories seem finished when pages are full but let tumble empty words to unseen floors who cares how my scene is captioned maybe when I return I'll tell it straight

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Date: 12/27/2024 3:31:00 AM
Congratulations, DD, way to go, you excel in ekphrasis:)
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Date: 12/27/2024 3:58:00 AM
Thank you Jo :) it's lovely to have Brian's contest return for Christmas as somewhere to enter these so they get read haha
Date: 12/25/2024 3:18:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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Date: 12/25/2024 1:21:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 12/2/2024 9:34:00 PM
The flowers in a vase, I have seen 'holding form right up until disintegration.' It is sad to see them withering away. We understand finally the futility of all our efforts to fix things and hold them up, and it is depressing. The figure of the woman in the painting with a dead tired face sitting and staring until her eyes droop when Hypnos comes with a trance is a representative of all who strive and fail. Ironically we keep telling stories with no beginning, no middle and no end to a world which is least interested in what we say. The poem is a reflection of the vain efforts we make and the complexity of human condition. Wonder if my reading of it comes anywhere close to what you had in mind. Dilly, your poems, especially your Ekphrasis are outstanding and so profound.
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Date: 12/3/2024 8:28:00 AM
Thank you for your in depth comment Valsa - I usually write as a stream of consciousness for the ekphrasis (and most other poems) and only consider them afterwards. You have summarised the painting well :)
Date: 11/30/2024 6:12:00 PM
D1lly, This seems to me like the subject made a huge effort to put things in order, but ultimately could not. The aftermath of an effort like that hurts the ego. This is something I've experienced several times in life when the forces that be could not accept my work even though I thought it might change the world. I've learned to let it go and am much happier now. At the time it felt devastating. Hard it is to actually see this coming for hard working and sincere people. You've created a psychological masterpiece that could be used to train mental health professionals! Smiles and appreciation!
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Date: 12/1/2024 6:49:00 AM
High praise indeed Duke! The world seems more complex than ever with so much that can be fixed, but it's very much a treadmill with no pauses to assess how it's all gone. I worry everyone is in the same position these days as there's very little down time for anyone. Thanks for stopping by
Date: 11/30/2024 11:30:00 AM
Dear DD, this is so intriguing and also moving how you’ve written this poem, so many lines stood out for me, especially resonate right now with “ too heavy to rest my head” and “ who cares how my scene is captioned” there is always something about the way you weave words that gets readers to feel so much and this is no exception! I also love the catchy title. Must check that out. Pleasure reading you . Sending you light always
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Date: 11/30/2024 2:21:00 PM
Thank you Ink - it's lovely how you tune into a poem. I was fascinated with the trance like hypnotism of this one. Thank you for commenting on it - I'm delighted it didn't fall straight into obscurity x

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