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I Felt Love At First Sight

I FELT LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT


Heartbeats slow~to~rush, slow~to~rush in blue blithesome air,
faces spotlight the summer sun, their laughter notes: a choir of February flair.

When eyes match the brilliance of diamonds and cheeks bud like roses unreserved,
the dulcet of shoots and tingles intercourse: non-stop thrilling every nerves,
skin gloss by flaming wonder wheels triggering senses to ripple and dare,
thoughts even suffer a sudden stroke despite rosaries of whispered prayers.

It is as  if  ten-thousand fireflies constellate mimicing the farthest stars,
I am leaping beyond the winds and hopping on the rim of a tilted caramel jar.

Has a swarm of fallen meteors, melted in rainbow dyes, envelope my heart?
How did the sullen  sorrows I  have~  within  sighs  slowly  tear  apart?
Melancholy disperse as circus melody hugs hearts beating in lowly breasts,
chains of interludes harp no shame as pure intentions are expressed.

My bosoms has been dressed by famine-tattered scars, I moaned complains,
but in the name of love authored by God, new life with you, I gain!
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~~for DANCING with DESCRIPTION CONTEST ~~
~~Sponsor: Casarah Nance~~

Olive Eloisa Guillermo
2:26 pm, November 11, 2015

Copyright © Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser | Year Posted 2015

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Dan Cwiak Date: 11/23/2015 11:44:00 PM Nicely done composition of love and tender feelings, Olive. Beautifully written and the emotions come through it. Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 11/12/2015 4:36:00 PM Oh this is so beautiful, sensual and romantic, Olive_eloi! You raise pure love to a higher level, while making use of captivating imagery. Top marks for you! Hugs // paul Login to Reply

Edlynn Nau Date: 11/11/2015 12:51:00 PM CONGRATUATIONS Olive on this sentimental and picturesque read. Hours of work here! :-p Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 11/11/2015 12:06:00 PM Many congratulations little one on this beautiful poem being recognised in the contest. It's a gem to read, and isn't love at first sight lovely ;) hugs // James // xxxx Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 11/10/2015 11:36:00 AM Olive, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT Login to Reply

Viv Wigley Date: 11/9/2015 10:21:00 PM Love this one, Olive, a real feelgood piece, bounces along nicely. Well done! Viv x Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/9/2015 6:41:00 PM Congratulations! I enjoyed this one. Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 11/9/2015 5:46:00 PM Beautifully written, Olive. Congrats on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 12/9/2015 7:19:00 AM thanks you Sandra.. =`) hugs back!

Afolabi Muideen Date: 11/9/2015 12:13:00 AM What an immense beautiful write. It flows smoothly within this reader..........A.M. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 12/9/2015 7:00:00 AM Thanks much Afolabi.. I enjoyed writing this poem..!

James Inman Date: 11/7/2015 6:04:00 PM Beautifully written, Olive. So many excellent lines. Very impressive! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/20/2015 8:46:00 PM Thank you so much James.. =`) so appreciate your comment,=`)

Lei Strauss Date: 11/6/2015 6:49:00 AM I'm starting to roll on my floor Olive. I loved it Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/20/2015 8:38:00 PM Thanks much Lei, it will be cute seeing you roll.. =`)

Sandra Haight Date: 11/4/2015 8:20:00 PM Very beautiful and so full of romantic imagery, Olive! All the best for the contest. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 7:08:00 AM thanks much Sandra.. =`) so appreciate it.. =`)

Nette Onclaud Date: 11/4/2015 4:00:00 PM really bursting with delight, eloi... love makes poetry, like yours, shine with the stars!.. kilig!,,huggs Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/13/2015 1:48:00 AM thanks much Nette... appreciate your kilig comments....=`)

Kevin Fairbrother Date: 11/3/2015 11:18:00 PM A great piece of writing as your words danced to the tune of love, great, cheers Kev Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/10/2015 2:15:00 AM thank you so much for your wonderful comment.. =`)

Robert Lindley Date: 11/3/2015 6:46:00 PM Love at first sight is what I had with my wife Riza and four years later we married! Image laced feast my friend! A7 Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/9/2015 2:28:00 AM thanks much Robert.. =`) more than the imagery is the feeling RObert.. =`)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/3/2015 6:34:00 PM This is SUPER descriptive, I think it's just what Casarah is looking for and I enjoyed the unique imagery of it! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/9/2015 2:24:00 AM Andie, thanks much for your lovely comment on my poem...=`) I just tried this one..

Skat A Date: 11/3/2015 3:10:00 PM nice :) SKAT Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/9/2015 2:10:00 AM thanks much Skat.. =`)

Edlynn Nau Date: 11/3/2015 1:39:00 PM I always enjoy metaphors that mix the falling in love with the patterns in nature. You did that well here. Epic poetry not done much so bravery to take it on! I KNOW this took hours of work. If you wrote with a pencil then there is no graphite left by now! Lovely to meet you Amiga Olive. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/7/2015 7:45:00 AM Thanks much Ednalyn.. am so glad you like my poem... and yes i like that type of eriting too

Len Gasun Date: 11/3/2015 11:31:00 AM Hello my very dear Amiga Olive! I supposed to go to bed already and be back at you tomorrow as I've stated in my replies to your comments on my poem; but I can't stop myself coming by here to read one of your outstanding masterpieces. This sooo adorable! You did it very well -as always! Kudos my friend. So enjoyed! Good luck in the contest! Now, I can go to bed smiling. Tytyssm and God bless! love lots and big hugs, amiga Leonora Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/5/2015 12:42:00 AM Hi Leonora, thank you for your generous comment.. I really just up to the challenge of Cassie.. =`) And somewhat I want to describe in the most creative way I know how I felt last month of February, 2014... =`)thanks God bless and hugs!!!!! weeee!

Kp Nunez Date: 11/3/2015 9:22:00 AM This is indeed a love epic, Olive! So beautiful! 7 and all the best in the contest. hugs! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/4/2015 7:04:00 PM Thanks much Kim . =`) weeeee... =`) hugs

Constance La France Date: 11/3/2015 8:42:00 AM Olive, beautifully penned poem, a loving 7 and best of luck in the contest. .. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/3/2015 11:56:00 PM Constance thank you..=`) I just tried it..