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I Died Contest

Vital signs slow, feel last beat within chest The tick tock of time gone wasted and lost My regrets in this life felt at such cost Now I grieve how I did selfish invest I thought that there would be so much more time No more thinking and thought, goodbye, so long Stone cold reminisce, this my final song Never opened what was beautiful mind Forgive I plead on last and final breath Wrong time to die as I wasted living Clamber away do not yearn for release For I cannot settle into my death Please turn back time, my soul to life clinging Darkness descends, they chant, thy rest in peace I Died Poetry Contest 3rd April 2023 Sponsored by: craig cornish

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Daniel Turner

Date: 4/4/2023 7:26:00 AM

Nice job, DD. Good luck!

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/4/2023 8:45:00 AM

They can be. For me it was all a matter of repetition.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/4/2023 8:41:00 AM

Thanks DT - I find sonnets tough :)

Speaks Volumes

Date: 4/4/2023 2:23:00 AM

Brilliant DD. You have taken us passed your last breath in such a final embrace of your life. Wonderful words

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/4/2023 2:52:00 AM

I don't know about that Wen! I was sat on slightly damp garden furniture half enjoying the sun whilst knowing I should be pegging washing out when I wrote it- I think that shows through haha :) thank you though. Maybe I'll read it again without the veil :)

Valsa George

Date: 4/3/2023 7:11:00 PM

"Please reverse time my soul lays shivering But I hear the voices say rest in peace" Thoughtfully written ! However bored or annoyed with life, no one is ready to quit it. But Fate won't listen to our plea! The casual tone and the ease with which you have handled the theme reminds me of the style of Emily Dickinson

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/4/2023 12:28:00 AM

Thank you Valsa, I have looked her up and I like the comparison! Sonnets feel awkward to me though, quite bizarre that I preferred the Rondeau Redouble. I think some forms have an echo back that seems to have some wisdom whereas sonnets seem to be just speaking into the abyss - I can do that already without iambic and rhyme slowing me down :)