Notes About The Poem

I Cried Alone

It wasn't destiny or fate that brought us together.
There was no roar of thunder,  
     no strike of a lightning bolt,
          no rain cleared my vision.
               It was the way you looked at me.

A look, a touch...never enough and never too much.
Tears I wept were drawn from the well of my happiness
     from years of loving you.
Your name was inscribed upon my heart.
We held the hands of each other,
      not the hands of fate.

Our hands lost their grip in the raging wind of a storm.
Water rising. . . we needed to seek higher ground.
I couldn't climb a mountain 
     while you kept pulling me down.

It was then I heard the roar of thunder, 
lightning struck my heart,
and cold rain cleared my vision.
When the storm passed you were gone 
and I was on the mountain top.
     I cried alone...for both of us.
          Your name is still written on my heart. 
               That bolt of lightning didn't burn it off
                     Stinging tears could never wash it away.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Dalei Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 4:47 AM
Hi Lin, A meaningful & heart touching write. Congratulations for ur well deserving POTD. Truly impressive. Super 7 from me..............hugs
Lane Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 7:25 AM
I'm happy to meet you, Manmath, and also to say 'thanks' for such a generous comment and rating.
Maverick Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 12:34 AM
A lot of feeling that transmits here Lin, Congratulations on the p o t d spot.'
Lane Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 7:23 AM
Hello Joe, and many thanks for the visit and reading...appreciate it a lot.
Inman Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 8:43 PM
Lin, my heart is breaking. A beautiful write. So much feeling.
Lane Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 7:22 AM
Thank you so very much for such sweet sentiments, James.
Williams Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:45 PM
It strikes a cord with me. I love it. Nice poem.
Lane Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 7:22 AM
Marilyn, Thank you very much for reading and liking this one.
Ashe Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 4:15 PM
I like to read with the feeling of the heart of the writer and your writes have so much "heart" in them! Congratulations on this POTD! :-)
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 4:43 PM
Thank you for your valued comment, Walter.
Manassian Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 1:18 PM
How heartfelt. I feel the pain in the lines. You write so well, Lin Lane. Out of pain...beauty comes. Congrats on POTD. :)
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 3:14 PM
Life is beautiful now, Eilene, but it took a while. thank you for feeling this one.
Joseph Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 1:15 PM
Beautiful... nicely written
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 3:13 PM
Thanks so much, Andrew.
Andresen Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 10:11 AM
- Excellent poem - Congrats on Poem of the Day - hugs // Sun :)
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 12:29 PM
Hi A-L... It's great to see your sunshine smile, and thank you very much.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 8:35 AM
The emotion builds, like a storm! Wonderful write!
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 9:12 AM
Thank you so very much for such kind comments, Kim.
Haight Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 8:28 AM
Hi Lin, back again to again read your beautiful and so emotional poem and to congratulate you for it being honored as Poem Of The Day. Hugs, Sandra
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 9:12 AM
Thanks for the compliments and the hugs, Sandra.
Hamilton Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:11 AM
What a stirring write! A look a touch..never enough and never too much loved it! Congrats on well deserved POTD
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:27 AM
Thank you, John. Writing about real events, although not completely in the literal sense is bittersweet, but the imagination is not called in to play.
Sergi Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:09 AM
A very emotional poem, Lin. I really enjoyed the last stanza.
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:25 AM
Thank you, Ralph. I always appreciate knowing which lines appeal to a reader. ;)
Smith Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 6:55 AM
Another emotionally charged write done very well. Congratulations dear friend for POTD. Think of happy days ahead...
Lane Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:24 AM
Poem of the day...Well thanks for letting me know, Charlie. I just walked in and there you are with the news. Good morning to you.
Haight Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 5:03 PM
Dear Lin, I echo Paul's thoughts below. So sad for sure, but your words stirred such deep emotion in me as I shared this sadness with you as I read them. 7, Hugs, Sandra
Lane Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 5:07 PM
Oh, Sandra, you always say things that touch my heart. I appreciate your kind words and caring about my sadness. Thank you very much, and also for your hugs.
Raven Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 3:33 PM
Hi Lin, another excellent write. A moment in a life caught in such beautiful yet sad words. The emotional content of this write is at its highest as always. You have used the full scope of the free verse form to build the emotion within the vision of your words. Another beautiful poetic piece that sings in its sadness Lin. You may have cried alone then, now there are those who will cry with you. Hugs....Mike. XX. I send you a seven over the great pond,
Lane Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 5:06 PM
It's a bit overwhelming that people I've met here, those who've read my poetry, are so touched by the pain I've known. My deepest thanks to you, Mike.
Callus Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 2:36 PM
I give you full marks for this poem, Lin! I read it a few times...it's sad, but beautiful and full of emotion. ~ Regards // paul
Lane Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 2:41 PM
Thank you, Paul. I believe one of the nicest comments I can receive is being told my poem was read more than once. Then I've no doubt that the comment is sincere, so thank you for the readings and the compliments.
Babbit Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 1:45 PM
Lost once in the throws of love and its touch, when we lose it, it seems much too much. Nicely portrayed love lost. DMB
Lane Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 2:11 PM
It certainly does, DM. Thanks for such nice comments.
Smith Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 12:56 PM
So touching Lin...I cried alone...for both of us....I love that line...a fave
Warrior Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 8:45 AM
All is well as can be my dear Lady Lin...this old warrior is not what he used to be...then life's chores catch up...plus my wings needed a bit of a tune up...perhaps I can ask Broken Wings for some oil lol...god bless...^WW^
Lane Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 2:09 PM
I always appreciate that you point out lines that you particularly like. Thank you so much, Tim.
Warrior Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 12:51 PM
My dear Lady Lin...beautiful verse but sad...you are not alone...I cry with you...): ):...god bless...^WW^
Warrior Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 8:47 AM
All is well as can be my dear Lady Lin...this old warrior is not what he used to be...then life's chores catch up...plus my wings needed a bit of a tune up...perhaps I can ask Broken Wings for some oil lol...god bless...^WW^
Lane Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 12:54 PM
Hello, WW. Thank you for the shoulder. I've been missing seeing you around. I hope all is well in your world.
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