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I Can'T Go On Without You Emotive Write

The poem must begin with .. And the cemetery was then continue with your poem

And the cemetery was shrouded in a veil of early morning mist which rose eerily from the grey granite and marble graves. Desperately searching I crept silently from gravestone to gravestone. My breath came out in tiny white clouds as soft white snowflakes performed pirouettes, falling like a downy blanket over the cold marble. Eventually I came across your final resting place I recognised the two golden cherubs, carved on either side of your headstone Gently I brushed away the snow and traced your names with my fingertip It had only been a few weeks since you had fallen asleep forever How I longed to hold you and sing you both a lullaby But it was too late and you lay together in the arms of Jesus I placed two red roses on the snowy pillow Then lay down and waited for the sleeping pills to take effect So we could be reunited in death Submitted to Laura Loo's Best sad poem ever contest. Fictional write for ‘And the Cemetery Was’ contest sponsored by Broken Wings 05~17~16
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Marcum Wong Avatar
August 30, 2016 at 3:45 AM
Your detail in expressing the little things brought this poem to life. Sad but wonderful Jan! Congratulations on your first placement!7 ; )
Neumann Avatar
August 30, 2016 at 3:39 AM
Snow flakes' pirouettes, congratulations, Kai
Y. Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 1:18 PM
Hi Jan, Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
Krampe Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 11:20 AM
Beautiful imagery, so very sad, and there is so much left unsaid that the poem lingers in the mind. Congrats on your win, Jan.
Scars Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 10:06 AM
Oh Jan, you hit the nail with this one lady! You knew it would get to me! A winner right away...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
Roper Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 5:49 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win!!!! Congratulations again on your owl poem it makes me feel like I was there with you when you wrote it . I'm so proud of you :-)
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 6:20 PM
Oh Eve if it hadn't been for your contest inspiring me it would never have got written so I have YOU to thank:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 4:31 PM
Jan, congratulations on first place in my contest, oh my what an incredible write so beautifully written and so heartbreaking, that ending was a shock, well done , Constance
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 5:30 PM
Thanks so much Constance I am so pleased you liked my sad poem I am delighted with the high placement:-) hugs Jan xx
Ficklin Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 10:03 AM
Woah, the emotion is raw here... Love it! Congrats Jan
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:11 PM
Thanks so much Lukas:-) hugs Jan xx
Grasso Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 8:27 AM
Congratulations, Jan. ...Fran
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 8:41 AM
Thanks so much Fran:-) hugs jan xx
Daniel Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:48 AM
I knew this would win:) A big congratulations, Jan:)
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 4:02 AM
Thanks so much Jo I was delighted that Constance liked my poem so much - I do like to write with humour but do suprise people with a more serious poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx
Misra Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Tragic, poignant. The imagery is very powerful. The desolation of the landscape and that of the mind comes through powerfully. I could feel a finger tracing out names on my heart. Congrats for such a powerful poem and terrific win. ~karam~
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:34 AM
Thanks so much Karam I was delighted to place so well in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Raina Avatar
June 1, 2016 at 9:59 PM
Congratulations on your win Jan!
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:35 AM
Thanks Meenakshi:-) hugs Jan xx
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2016 at 8:46 PM
Wow! Congratulations on your win!
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:35 AM
Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
June 1, 2016 at 8:35 PM
Back to congratulate your on your First Place win, Jan! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:36 AM
Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
June 1, 2016 at 6:42 PM
Congrats on your win Jan
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:37 AM
Thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx
Johnson Avatar
June 1, 2016 at 6:36 PM
Congratulations Jan. I just found this finished contest. Well done. Love, Joyce
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 3:37 AM
Thanks Joyce I've yet to read the winning poems I'm dleighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx
Apell Avatar
May 29, 2016 at 7:24 AM
Jan, this is a superb construction! I feel transported on the wings of imagery to that nameless cemetery. But I would flee for dear life if I saw mist rise from a grave as though wafted by an unseen hand below the marble.
Allison Avatar
May 29, 2016 at 12:02 PM
Thanks Agona I was so delighted to get POTD I'd been struggling with my creativity and my muse was on holiday :-( this gave me the boost I needed:-) hugs Jan xx
Hamilton Avatar
May 24, 2016 at 6:31 AM
Very sad Jan, you truly captured the despair and the pain of a tragic loss, well done! Congrats on POTD
Allison Avatar
May 24, 2016 at 3:03 PM
Thanks so much John I was so delighted to get POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
Makama Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 6:43 AM
Awesome and refreshing. A jaw breaking 7.
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 12:32 PM
Thanks Funom:-) hugs Jan xx
Y. Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 6:04 AM
Hi Jan, Congrats on getting the poem of the day. It was well deserved. Enjoy the honor- Alexis
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 12:32 PM
Thanks Alexis I was delighted:-) hugs Jan xx
Daniel Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 2:29 AM
I'm a day late, still Congrats on the Poem of the Day:)
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 5:27 AM
Thanks Jo I'm really delighted:-) hugs Jan xx
Daniel Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 2:28 AM
Haunting but Excellent:) loved the line - "But it was too late and you lay together in the arms of Jesus":) All the best in the contest:)
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 5:27 AM
Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xxx
Bar Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 1:02 AM
Haunting and captivating write. Great share.
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 1:31 AM
Thanks you:-) hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
May 19, 2016 at 10:16 PM
Wow!!! Great write, Jan, an outstanding piece. Congratulations on Poem of the Day!!! Good luck in the contest!
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 1:31 AM
Thanks Eve I'm so delighted to get POTD been struggling with my creativity and not been around as much - am so glad to have my muse back:-) hugs Jan xx
Ashe Avatar
May 19, 2016 at 9:50 PM
Your write is sadly poignant and visually effective at the same time! The last two lines speak volumes!! The best to you in this contest Jan! :-)
Allison Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 1:29 AM
Thanks Walter:-) hugs Jan xx
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