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For Unseeking Seeker's 'I am' Poetry Contest..

"and I don't want the world to see me... as I dont think they would understand,

when everythings made to be broken... I just want you to know who I am..."

Iris - Goo Goo Dolls

 

In uncontrollable destinies, fate is visible, signposted with faith. In limitations of the intangible unforeseen, tribulations from tangible organisms, leave a heart yearning to release  the force from kundalini kismet. What am I, but a speck of dust,  spinning from nothingness, composed in a complex analogy, but more than just a meaningless metaphor. Pursuing conscience consciousness, a misunderstood muse in a poetic garden, sowing seeds for a wallflower soul to bloom as an orchid in Eden's orchards - to feel mercy from heavenly raindrops. A once, dysfunctional mind, scribbled as an unmetered sonnet, but with an eagle spirit healing from wounded wings, caged within a circle of sins, polishing the heart to coexist. Firmly planting my roots into  the mouth of mother earth. Feeding on morsels of atonement and redemption. Eternally exploring self-reflection, wishing internal paths lead to steps  with simple sentiments of silence. Hoping illuminative energy liberates, to ease the adversity of climbing  towards the zenith of zen - to flourish in sunflower serenity.

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Date: 2/28/2024 10:49:00 AM
We all struggle with life's uncertainties and look forward to growth as we are aging. love phyl
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Date: 2/25/2024 5:19:00 AM
SO, I'm thinking this poem explores the meaning of life. It is not an easy question to contemplate, but your journey takes me on the ride. It sounds like you have struggled as many of us have, but along the way we start to get a sense of where we want to go. Your attachment to nature in this is very insightful. Without our nurturing environment, we would be nothing.
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Date: 2/25/2024 5:14:00 AM
Dear Silent One, Congratulations on your win for this superb piece. I couldn't relate to the "zenith zen" reference but I loved the reference to the "eagle spirit" that prevails over one's human failings. Loved it..
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Date: 2/25/2024 1:09:00 AM
I love this and you finished it so perfectly. "...Feeding on morsels of atonement and redemption. Eternally exploring self-reflection, wishing internal paths lead to steps with simple sentiments of silence. Hoping illuminative energy liberates, to ease the adversity of climbing towards the zenith of zen - to flourish in sunflower serenity." Sunflowers are very unique and beautiful. A serenity of peace of mind. Another phi principle reminding one that God is always near...
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Date: 2/25/2024 1:10:00 AM
I always found that Goo Goo Dolls' song to be very deep and poetic. Great visual accompaniment you rallying flagged for this !
Date: 2/24/2024 12:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, SO! Excellent song, excellent I Am poem. I see that we both used the concept of we are dust. You are Stardust!
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Date: 2/23/2024 10:53:00 AM
Truly, SO, your are so much more than a "meaningless metaphor!" You are a gift! Through your exquisite images and amazing metaphors you reveal your lifetime quest "towards the zenith of zen!" Powerful alliterations written in simple and direct honesty in every line! How do I pick a favorite? Every time I read one of your poems I know I will be taken on an awe inspiring adventure through stunning poetic artistry! A well loved journey for me! Congratulations for your win! Blessings to you!
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Date: 2/23/2024 9:45:00 AM
Excellently penned thought provoking work. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/23/2024 3:01:00 AM
I love this poem. The lines so crisp and lucid make the poem flow. Congrats, SO.
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Date: 2/22/2024 11:33:00 PM
Love it! Given you wrote this in few mins! You nailed it silent one! Congratulations on your win! You are poetry
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Date: 2/22/2024 11:02:00 PM
Feasting on small portions of atonement and redemption, constantly exploring self-reflection and longing for inner paths that lead you towards simple sentiments of silence, I hope that the illuminative energy will liberate you and ease the adversity of climbing towards the zenith of zen. Your ultimate goal is to flourish in the serenity of a sunflower. Beautiful reflections, amazing affirmations S1...Hugs
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Date: 2/22/2024 8:02:00 PM
Wonderful execution of a great idea! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/22/2024 4:37:00 PM
A marvellous free verse write Silent One, I also am ‘healing from wounded wings,’ hoping ‘ to flourish in sunflower serenity.’ All the best… Beryl
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Date: 2/22/2024 3:23:00 PM
Your amazing poem is thought provoking and deep, Silent One. The video is wonderful, too. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 2/22/2024 1:41:00 PM
The sponsor will LOVE yours, especially because it's so zen-like. Something I just can't really do!
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Date: 2/22/2024 11:37:00 AM
Dear Silent One, I love how your poem wonderfully explores fate, consciousness, and redemption. Your words beautifully convey the struggle of navigating life's uncertainties while seeking inner peace and growth. Your journey from a dysfunctional mind to a healed spirit is inspiring, reflecting the resilience of the human spirit. Very introspective and evocative piece with the quest for serenity and enlightenment. Loved It!! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 2/22/2024 10:20:00 AM
Beautiful- very wise, I feel your spirit growing..
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Date: 2/22/2024 5:55:00 AM
Such powerful words, Silent One. 'Feeding on morsels of atonement and redemption' Another fav for me, my friend.
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Date: 2/21/2024 10:35:00 PM
My soul cries out and few have ears to hear what I'm saying. You are amongst those that might understand because I sense we've felt many of the same things at the soul level. A FAV for my list and a winner for the contest IMHO. Blessings, Bill
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Date: 2/21/2024 10:32:00 PM
The YouTube video was a great emotional stagging for you poem. It touched my soul. The music took the message deep within my heart. I could see you as the singer in this video. The quote is a feeling I've had my whole life and I've known few that I think could every truly understand me. I think they're many in the world that have the same or similar feeling and thoughts. We all want validation of who we think we are from another human, but we weren't create to know anyone except ourselves.
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Date: 2/21/2024 8:33:00 PM
A poem of great depth and beauty.... ! Hats off to your amazing talent, dear Silent One. Some of the poets here on this site keep me reminding each time how small I am as a poet !"a misunderstood muse in a poetic garden, sowing seeds for a wallflower soul to bloom as an orchid in Eden's orchards - to feel mercy from heavenly raindrops." Dear poet, you are never an 'unmetered sonnet', but an orchid beautifully blooming in Eaden's orchard'!
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Date: 2/21/2024 7:22:00 PM
you see the unseen SO and can feel what others do not, wisdom is learned, it's unseen yet known and felt...
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Date: 2/21/2024 6:13:00 PM
You blossom the readers heart at every turn of event here, I love it :)
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Date: 2/21/2024 4:56:00 PM
Wow, your words never cease to amaze me dear poet... so many excellent lines lie within this one second stanza grabs the reader, but i think you are more than a speck of dust! I think you scribbled a winning poem here! it's going to my favorites, it speaks to me on so many levels! Bravo!!!!
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Date: 2/21/2024 3:37:00 PM
Your poem was engaging at every turn with its imagery and outstanding alliterations, Silent One.Loved that question, "What am I but a speck spinning from nothingness." Perhaps we've all had similar feelings at some point in our lives as we try to make sense of ourselves and get comfortable in our own skins. "Sunflower serenity" is brilliant. Best wishes with the contest and enjoy your evening, Sara
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Date: 2/21/2024 11:58:00 AM
I wonder if my mind is no longer dysfunctional. Creative lines penned. Way to go. Thanks for dropping by my page. I appreciate the visit. Sara K
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